issue52 同主题写作 请兄弟姐妹们拍拍：）

GladysryUID: 198609

熬夜终于给写了。= =！

这时我写issue以来思路最清晰的一次，但写的时候充分感觉到自己语言功力的不够，整个写下来都有一种绕口令的感觉，快转晕了。:L  不过还是拿上来给战友们看看，希望大家多多赐教！:$

赫赫，有拍必回，给链接必改。

issue 52 Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony.

提纲：1，否定原题态度，因为它无视教育的其他作用，也曲解分析批判的结果。

2， 首先看看教育的作用以及社会和谐的方面。将教育的方方面面尤其是分析批判的作用作一个总结。再将社会和谐的包含方面写出来（跳下文用得上的）。

3，依照第二段，来一个递进，对应什么作用怎样能够促进社会那个方面的社会和谐（嗯哪， 就是这一段给转晕了）:o

最后再总结。


I do agree with the speaker that education encourages students to question and criticize, nevertheless, the speaker not only neglects many other functions of education, but also misunderstand the essential virtues of question and criticize, and therefore the conclusion that education does little to promote social harmony is fundamentally wrong.

To begin with, we can have insight into the various functions of education and what indeed are included in social harmony. From our childhood, every person are told to be polilte, to respect the elders and protect the young as well as being a student abide by the rules. When people grow older and get higher education they are taught to appreciate others, tolerate different opinions, learn to compromise with others, think thoroughly and deeply, evaluate things carefully before they make it into action, learn the skills of being a good group-working member, so many things to list. They are all virtues a well-educated student should master. Obviously education give people a lot, but before evaluating its impact on social harmony, what aspects are included in social harmony should be analyzed first. Actually speaking, all the elements in a society should be considered. Therefore, a well-ordered situation, fine communications and understanding among different nations, recognition and appreciation to different opinions and willingness to hold a nice and effective membership in certain group should all be included. Certainly they are not the whole but they are indeed the essence.

Then we can have a close look at their relationships. Absolutely the willingness to respect others which is taught by education prompts recognition and appreciation to different opinions which demonstrates part of social harmony, so does the learning of compromise. Moreover, only when people comply with the same rules can a society be well-ordered, only when people understand other cultures can communication among various nations goes well and only people are taught the importance of group work can good memberships be got. If we think from the speaker's perspective that education encourages students to question and criticize, we can find that they do the promotion in an indefinite but also a much deeper way. With questioning the authority, the past and everything around them, people can build a more matured and profound attitude to life and society. With this profound attitude, they can find out more existing problems and make practical suggestions to solve them thus bring us a more fine regulated society which decrease ambivalence between different groups of people, that is, increase the harmony in society. Likewise, the ability to criticize the accurate situation makes people think throughly thus have access to understand others. So actually speaking, education contributes a lot in the promotion of social harmony.

As all the above demonstrates, education not only prompts the harmony of society, but also promotes a lot. Those who deny education's contributions to social harmony must have not realized the essence of education.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-27 at 13:16 ]

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看到题目，我的想法正文分4段：
1。这2句是因果关系。前一句是原因，是成立的。
2。但是应该认识到，质疑不是无限度的。不能对什么都怀疑。
3。后句是结论，是不成立的。由前面推不过来。正是科技的进步推动社会进步。
4。然而，科技的进步不能解决所有问题。同时它也会带来新的问题。因此教育还应该教会人们提高觉悟，学会关爱。
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看看你怎么搞：


I do agree with the speaker that education encourages students to question and criticize, nevertheless, the speaker not only neglects many other functions of education, but also misunderstand the essential virtues of question and criticize, and therefore the conclusion that education does little to promote social harmony is fundamentally wrong.

To begin with, we can have insight into the various functions of education and what indeed are included in social harmony（这句怎么这么怪？）. From our childhood, every person are told to be polilte, to respect the elders and protect the young as well as being a student abide by the rules. When people grow older and get higher education they are taught to appreciate others, tolerate different opinions, learn to compromise with others, think thoroughly and deeply, evaluate things carefully before they make it into action, learn the skills of being a good group-working member, so many things to list（这半句不要）. They are all virtues a well-educated student should master. Obviously education give people a lot, but before evaluating its impact on social harmony, what aspects are included in social harmony should be analyzed first. Actually speaking, all the elements in a society should be considered（这2句太罗嗦。需要压缩）. Therefore, a well-ordered situation, fine communications and understanding among different nations, recognition and appreciation to different opinions and willingness to hold a nice and effective membership in certain group should all be included. Certainly they are not the whole but they are indeed the essence.

Then we can have a close look at their relationships（删！） Absolutely（你是想说obviously?) the willingness to respect others which is taught by education prompts recognition and appreciation to different opinions which demonstrates part of social harmony, so does the learning of compromise. Moreover, only when people comply with the same rules can a society be well-ordered, only when people understand other cultures can communication among various nations goes well and only people are taught the importance of group work can good memberships be got. If we think from the speaker's perspective that education encourages students to question and criticize, we can find that they do the promotion in an indefinite but also a much deeper way. With questioning the authority, the past and everything around them, people can build a more matured and profound attitude to life and society. With this profound attitude, they can find out more existing problems and make practical suggestions to solve them thus bring us a more fine regulated society which decrease ambivalence between different groups of people, that is, increase the harmony in society. Likewise, the ability to criticize the accurate situation makes people think throughly thus have access to understand others. So actually speaking, education contributes a lot in the promotion of social harmony.(这段前1半好像和后1半不沾边？似乎改分2段？）

As all the above demonstrates, education not only prompts the harmony of society, but also promotes a lot. Those who deny education's contributions to social harmony must have not realized the essence of education.

继续努力吧。
废话都要删掉。语法错误在words里面改了再发上来。
记住：当你不知道是否该重起一段时，那就重起一段！