Issue103 失败的作品,提纲不是保险柜

xiaowenzi118UID: 202887

103"The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."


"If only I could turn back the time!" We always hear people say this. However, since history is irreversible, past events could never occur in our daily lives. As a result, some people regard history as mostly irrelevant to our daily lives. They even think the study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives. Such opinion is biased. In fact, the value of studying history is far beyond that.

On one hand, history tells us the origin of new problems today, and helps us to better understand today's world. Things are really getting more and more complex today and problems rise one after another. While we have not solved the problems of the environment, social problems like unemployment are coming rightly towards us. How to solve these problems? People are at a loss. At this time, turn to history for help is the best choice. The past is directed linked to the present because it is the origin of the present. Delving into history, we find the origin of the environment problems is our hasty industrialization process and unemployment comes from this highly development technology. So no more worry, no more complaint, as soon as we find the origin of the problems, we could take actions rightly to solve them.

On the other, history not only tells us where the origins of the problems are but also tells us how to solve them. For one thing, history helps us to learn from mistakes and find the possible ways. Although past things could never occur in our daily lives, similar things could. Being aware of past mistakes, we are informed of what are the impossible ways. Making further investigations into the mistakes, we find where the problems are. That is why Edison finally invented the light bulb through 1800 trial-and-errors. That is why we learn from the 1930 prohibition and build a wholesome legislation system today. For another, history provides us with inspirations. When an analyst in the chemistry field developed a novel biosensor for the detection of glucose, he gets his inspiration from the work of his predecessors who introduced nanomaterials to that area. When a business man finally makes a successful strategy, he might attribute his success to the inspirations from military strategies in the past. This is history, not only tells us what should do, but also gives out tips for us about how to do.

In sum, although history seems irrelevant to our daily lives, the study of history is essential because it helps us to find the origin of new problems today as well as provides us with possible ways to solve them.

昨天堕落了,没再准备提纲,就没再写政治类的,随手拿了一篇昨天改过的同主题来写.可惜呀,严重超时.原因嘛,是我的提纲有问题,论点有交叉,害得我写不下去.改了一下,还是觉得很失败,大家借鉴一下吧! 现在发现提纲 is one thing, while 作文 is quite another. 总以为写了提纲就行了,其实问题还很多呢!

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-27 at 13:21 ]

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

"If only I could turn back the time!" We always hear people say this. However, since history is irreversible, past events could never occur in our daily lives. As a result, some people regard history as mostly irrelevant to our daily lives. They even think the study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives. Such opinion is biased. In fact, the value of studying history is far beyond that.

On one hand, history tells us the origin of new problems today, and helps us to better understand today's world. Things are really getting more and more complex today and problems rise one after another. While we have not solved the problems of the environment, social problems like unemployment are coming rightly towards us. How to solve these problems? People are at a loss. At this time, turn to history for help is the best choice. The past is directed linked to the present because it is the origin of the present. Delving into history, we find the origin of the environment problems is our hasty industrialization process and unemployment comes from this highly development technology. So no more worry, no more complaint, as soon as we find the origin of the problems, we could take actions rightly to solve them. 有些这个观点我有一些不同意，并不是现在所有的问题都是来源于过去，有些问题是现代社会新出现的，比如克隆等

On the other, history not only tells us where the origins of the problems are but also tells us how to solve them. For one thing, history helps us to learn from mistakes and find the possible ways. Although past things could never occur in our daily lives, similar things could. Being aware of past mistakes, we are informed of what are the impossible ways. Making further investigations into the mistakes, we find where the problems are. That is why Edison finally invented the light bulb through 1800 trial-and-errors. That is why we learn from the 1930 prohibition and build a wholesome legislation system today. For another, history provides us with inspirations. When an analyst in the chemistry field developed a novel biosensor for the detection of glucose, he gets his inspiration from the work of his predecessors who introduced nanomaterials to that area. When a business man finally makes a successful strategy, he might attribute his success to the inspirations from military strategies in the past. This is history, not only tells us what should do, but also gives out tips for us about how to do.这段写得不错，例子也证明了论述

In sum, although history seems irrelevant to our daily lives, the study of history is essential because it helps us to find the origin of new problems today as well as provides us with possible ways to solve them.
总的来说还不错，文章字数有些少吧？最后最好再让步一下，我觉得你对题目没有完全把握，题目中relevant　是关键，但是在你的文章中没有体现出来，你完全按照自己的想法来写了，脱离了题目，不知楼主是否同意，加油～～～大家互相拍

zehuaUID: 199246

看到题目， 我的想法：
1。正：历史是镜子。当现在的措施需要借鉴历史的时候它的价值很高
2。反：历史一定是不断重复的嘛？有的事情只发生一次。过去和今天未必有可比性.
没有可比性，历史就没有价值了嘛？关键是相关性如何衡量？有没有值得注意的历史被忽略？
3。散：无论人们如何选择，总是挡不住历史的车轮前进。当我们老时，回忆过去的事件，都是过往烟云。更重要的是把握好自己，珍惜今天的生活。
寒！这个题目很难哦！3那样发散，不知道是不是扯的太远？
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"If only I could turn back the time!" We always hear people say this. However, since history is irreversible, past events could never occur in our daily lives. As a result, some people regard history as mostly irrelevant to our daily lives. They even think the study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives. Such opinion is biased. In fact, the value of studying history is far beyond that.

On one hand, history tells us the origin of new problems today, and helps us to better understand today's world. Things are really getting more and more complex today and problems rise one after another. While we have not solved the problems of the environment, social problems like unemployment are coming rightly towards us. How to solve these problems? People are at a loss. At this time, turn to history for help is the best choice. The past is directed（directly） linked to the present because it is the origin of the present. Delving into history, we find the origin of the environment problems is our hasty industrialization process and unemployment comes from this highly development technology. So no more worry, no more complaint, as soon as we find the origin of the problems, we could take actions rightly to solve them.

On the other, history not only tells us where the origins of the problems are but also tells us how to solve them. For one thing, history helps us to learn from mistakes and find the possible ways. Although past things could never occur in our daily lives, similar things could. Being aware of past mistakes, we are informed of what are the impossible ways. Making further investigations into the mistakes, we find where the problems are. That is why Edison finally invented the light bulb through 1800 trial-and-errors. That is why we learn from the 1930 prohibition and build a wholesome legislation system today. For another, history provides us with inspirations. When an analyst in the chemistry field developed a novel biosensor for the detection of glucose, he gets his inspiration from the work of his predecessors who introduced nanomaterials to that area（这里过于专业了，并不太好。）. When a business man finally makes a successful strategy, he might attribute his success to the inspirations from military strategies in the past. This is history, not only tells us what should do, but also gives out tips for us about how to do.

In sum, although history seems irrelevant to our daily lives, the study of history is essential because it helps us to find the origin of new problems today as well as provides us with possible ways to solve them.

我觉得你这篇写的比较乱。正文2段说的都是当历史和现在有关的时候的价值。那么无关的时候呢？还是没有说。如果确实是想不到什么理由说明无关的时候也有价值，就把开头结尾改了吧。改成完全赞同。:lol
其实可以写成基本赞同，正文再加1段Admittedly, some may argue that the relation of certain history events  might be hidden due to our incomplete understanding of such events. They would still have merit when we thoroughly understand them and use them for reference of today. Yet this argument is still based on the creteria of relevance because when we use them for reference, they are no longer irrelevant. Instead, they  become tightly associated with our contemporary life.  

xiaowenzi118UID: 202887

zehua 的观点真是让我恍然大悟呀,确实,这题最难把握的就是revelence了,一直不知怎么写,我觉得自己这题受北美范文的影响太严重了!

xiaowenzi118UID: 202887

参考了大家的意见后改了一下,例子先懒得动了,关键是结构!

103"The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."

"If only I could turn back the time!" We always hear people say that. However, since history is irreversible, past events could never occur in our daily lives. Luckily, history is often relevant to our daily lives and only finding these relativities could the study of history has value.

In the first place, the value of study history lies in that it is directly related to the new problems today and could tell us the origin of them. Things are really getting more and more complex today and problems rise one after another. While we have not solved the problems of the environment, social problems like unemployment are coming rightly towards us. How to solve these problems? People are at a loss. At this time, turn to history for help is the best choice. The past is directly linked to the present because it is the origin of the present. Delving into history, we find the origin of the environment problems is our hasty industrialization process and unemployment comes from this highly development technology. So no more worry, no more complaint, as soon as we find the origin of the problems, we could take actions rightly to solve them.

Furthermore, history not only tells us where the origins of the problems are but also tells us how to solve them. Although past things could never occur in our daily lives, similar things could. Once finding the relations between them, we find the way of solving problems today. Take mistakes in the past for example. Being aware of past mistakes, we are informed of what are the impossible ways. Making further investigations into the mistakes, we find where the problems are. That is why Edison finally invented the light bulb through 1800 trial-and-errors. That is why we learn from the 1930 prohibition and build a wholesome legislation system today. History provides us with inspirations. Finding the relations between history and present not only prevents us from making mistakes but also gives us inspiration. When an analyst in the chemistry field developed a novel biosensor for the detection of glucose, he gets his inspiration from the work of his predecessors who introduced nanomaterials to that area. When a business man finally makes a successful strategy, he might attribute his success to the inspirations from military strategies in the past. This is history, not only tells us what should do, but also gives out tips for us about how to do.

Admittedly, some people would arguer that sometimes relations of history and the present life might be hidden due to our limited understanding of them. Once the relativities are discovered, they could still be valuable to our lives. However, such kind of opinion still relies on the relations between history and our lives. The only difference is that we turn what is irrelevant to relevant. In fact, such kind of ability is vital for us to further discovery the value of history. The relations we have found today between history and our daily lives is just a tip of the iceberg, there are a lot more for us to discovery. Only through finding the unknown relations could we really find their values.

In sum, history is like a treasury and the value of studying history is endless. However, unless we find the relations of history and our lives, we could never realize the values. So delving into history, finding the relations and enjoy your exploration.

自我感觉好多了;P;P;P

zehuaUID: 199246

Originally posted by xiaowenzi118 at 2005-7-27 20:30
zehua 的观点真是让我恍然大悟呀,确实,这题最难把握的就是revelence了,一直不知怎么写,我觉得自己这题受北美范文的影响太严重了!

你前面2段也给我很大启发。我自己想的那个提纲根本就是套话，空话，很难展开。
不要在写前看范文啊！
:lol
That is why we learn from the 1930 prohibition and build a wholesome legislation system today.这个例子看不大懂。能否讲讲？:lol
还有那个化学的例子，好专业啊！你是学化学的？;P

[ Last edited by zehua on 2005-7-28 at 09:26 ]

zehuaUID: 199246

感觉B1和B2似乎还是说的1个意思啊

xiaowenzi118UID: 202887

Originally posted by xiaowenzi118 at 2005-7-28 11:42
National prohibition of alcohol (1920-33)--the "noble experiment"--was undertaken to reduce crime and corruption, solve social problems, reduce the tax burden created by prisons and poorh ...