issue13 第一次写这么多，求拍，必回，请指教

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

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Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct.
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There are hundreds of languages in different countries among the world. It is reasonable for the government to protect these languages from becoming extinct. However, regarding the lesser-known languages, the government need not prevent them all from being extinct.

First of all, it is very difficult for the government to avoid all the lesser-known from extinction. In fact, fewer and fewer people speak some of the lesser-known languages, because these people are influenced by other culture and tend to speak other language, which leads their language to extinct itself. Take a counterexample is that Chinese, which is spoken by a large amount of population, hardly becomes extinct. Moreover, some lesser-known languages only have pronunciation and do not have their own words. In this way, it is very difficult for the government to protect them, because these languages cannot be documented and they may become extinct easily. In addition, some speakers of particular lesser-known languages may live in some remote areas and they may not communicate with other people. It is even more difficult for the government to protect this kind of lesser-known languages. Thus, it is really a tough and complex work for the government to prevent these lesser-known languages from becoming extinct.

Furthermore, the government may not have the ability to prevent these lesser-known languages from extinction. There are a lot of fields for the government to support, such as the science researches, the education, the national security and so on. And the national funds are limited so that the government may not have enough money to put into the protection of lesser-known languages. Moreover, it is possible that the process of the protection may spend a lot of time and money of the government, which may arouse others' complaints. For example, most of the national funds come from the taxes of the citizens. If the government spends a lot of money to protect the lesser-known languages only to meet the needs of few people, the others may consider it unfair to cost their money in the protection, which has little relation with them. Therefore, the protection of the lesser-known languages may beyond the ability of the government.

Admittedly, if the governments have the power to prevent some lesser-known languages from extinction and these languages are able to be protected, they should try their efforts to do so. A particular language stands for a particular culture. Some cultures have a history over thousands of years. It is worthwhile to prevent the languages from extinction. Because they are the reflection of the ancestors' wisdom and creativity and the current people may research these languages to understand the culture of the nation. Hence, if it is probable for the government to prevent the lesser-known languages from extinction, the government should struggle to do so.

To sum up, in most cases, it is very difficult for the governments to prevent lesser-known languages from becoming extinct, not only because some of such languages cannot be protected, but also because some governments do not have the ability to do so. Also sometimes some lesser-known languages just extinct themselves due to the development of the society, which is a natural social process. However, some lesser-known languages that should be protected do have their particular values, which stand for a culture of a nation.

nickaaronleeUID: 183378

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mkb57288UID: 2105771

前两天刚好写过这个提纲，帮你改，稍等一下

mkb57288UID: 2105771

There are hundreds of languages in different countries among the world. 第一句跟主题没什么关系，删掉会更简洁It is reasonable for the government to protect these languages from becoming extinct词性错了，下面也是. However, regarding the lesser-known languages, the government need not prevent them all from being extinct.

First of all, it is very difficult for the government to avoid all the lesser-known from extinction. In fact, fewer and fewer people speak some of the lesser-known languages, because these people are influenced by other culture and tend to speak otherdominant还是尽量提供清晰的信息other太模糊了 language, 既然后面还有一个从句，简洁起见不妨把前面的because简化成短语如due to the effluence of。。。,which。。。 which leads their language to extinct itself. Take a counterexample is that Chinese,take...as a counterexample,... which is spoken by a large amount of population, hardly becomes extinct. 前面讲到了其他语言的冲击，这个例子最好也接着变化一下Moreover, some lesser-known languages only have pronunciation and do not have their own words. In this way是case吧, it is very difficult for the government to protect them, because these languages cannot be documented and they may become extinct easily. In addition, some speakers of particular lesser-known languages may live in somecertain两个some挨得太紧 remote areas and they may not communicate with other people. It is even more difficult for the government to protect this kind of lesser-known languages. Thus, it is really a tough and complex work for the government to prevent these lesser-known languages from becoming extinct灭绝可以用些别的表达assimilation, dying languages, on the verge of extinction.

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To sum up, in most cases, it is very difficult for the governments to prevent lesser-known languages from becoming extinct, not only because some of such languages cannot be protected, but also because because多余some governments do not have the ability to do so. Also sometimes some lesser-known languages just extinct themselves due to the development of the society, which is a natural social process. However, some lesser-known languages that should be protected do have their particular values, which stand for a culture of a nation.

mkb57288UID: 2105771

今天刚刚知道有v6，相见恨晚啊，这个主要只改了句子方面，能简洁还是简洁些好，可以腾出时间来加强观点，感觉框架还是不错，小弟也实在是菜鸟，若有改得不妥的还望见谅
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mrealUID: 201732

不过mkb57288改的还真是细致~
还想提几点意见：
b2举Chinese的例子好像和理论不太搭哦~
b3的开端有些混乱，让人摸不清头脑要说什么，段中才挑明~
还有行文的顺序似乎是这样的：
1：政府避免所有稀有语言灭绝是很困难的
2：政府能够确实做到保护稀有语言也是值得质疑的
3：如果政府的确有能力保护稀有语言就应该保护，因为他们毕竟代表了古代智慧和历史等~
如果上面我理解的没有问题，那我觉得顺序有必要调整一下，使得全文更连贯。
仅供参考，呵呵~