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飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.
1．        学习让视野更宽
2．        学习让我们看得更深
3．        改正了一些错误的观点
I strongly agree with the author's assertion that by studying academic discipline, we see the same material word, but with different eyes, in that we see the word with broader and deeper eyes. Also, we correct some misunderstanding of the word in the past.

To begin with, the academic knowledge makes what we see broader, because it bring information not only in universe but also in microcosmic field . For example, study of astronomy brings us to the planets and universe. While in the past we just thought stars in the dark sky are little and shining, now, we know that in fact they are huge and covered with dust and dirt, not beautiful at all. Also, by study physics, we shift attention to tiny particles, learning that matters consist from separate particles. Molecule is not the smallest unit of matters, but atoms consist with a molecule. Thus, after studying academic disciplines, we stretch eyes to broader field, from universe to microcosmic field

Meanwhile, pursuit of knowledge makes our eyes not only broader but also deeper. We begin explore the deep essence of things using relative information. For instance, when studying chemistry, we pay our attention on chemical constitution and structure of matters. We know water in our daily life is consisted with H and O. Also, after study medicine, we realize the existence of bacteria and virus, even the actual cause of some diseases. In addition, we know that the process of recovering is the process of antibody struggling with antigen and then people can develop some medicine strengthen . Studying of discipline informs us the knowledge on the deeper field than what we used to know only by physical observation.

In addition, academic knowledge changes some misunderstanding in the daily observation only by eyes. For example, people usually feel that the earth is flat. In fact, it is not, determined by Magellan, who traveled around the earth and was back to where he left at last. Also, in the astronomy classes, teacher tells us that the sun lies on the center, which the earth circle around it. And these are different from what we feel, because we see the sun rise and down everyday and thought that the earth is the center. In a word, through education, we change some prospects that we used to think right but actually are wrong.  

In sum, as all discussed above, I conclude that because of studying discipline, we make our eyes broader, deeper and correct some misunderstanding in the past, different from past.

飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

写提纲的时候觉得思路挺清晰的,没想到写起来例子用的很不顺
我觉得说理的部分头脑空空,没想法了,经常是给出ts后就摆例子了

Chloroplast923UID: 207486

I strongly agree with the author's assertion that by studying academic discipline, we see the same material word, but with different eyes, in that we see the word with broader and deeper eyes. Also, we correct some misunderstanding of the word in the past.

To begin with, the academic knowledge makes what we see broader, because it brings information not only in universe but also in microcosmic field. For example, study of astronomy brings us to the planets and universe. While in the past we just thought stars in the dark sky are little and shining, now, we know that in fact they are huge and covered with dust and dirt, not beautiful at all. Also, by study physics, we shift attention to tiny particles, learning that matters consist from separate particles. Molecule is not the smallest unit of matters, but atoms consist with a molecule. Thus, after studying academic disciplines, we stretch eyes to broader field, from universe是否应该改成形容词? to microcosmic field.

Meanwhile, pursuit of knowledge makes our eyes not only broader but also deeper. We begin to explore the deep essence of things using relative information. For instance, when studying chemistry, we pay our attention on chemical constitution and structure of matters. We know water in our daily life is consisted with H and O. Also, after study medicine, we realize the existence of bacteria and virus, even the actual cause of some diseases. In addition, we know that the process of recovering is the process of antibody struggling with antigen and then people can develop some medicine strengthen. Studying of discipline informs us the knowledge on the deeper field than what we used to know only by physical observation.

In addition, academic knowledge changes some misunderstanding in the daily observation only by eyes. For example, people usually feel that the earth is flat. In fact, it is not, determined by Magellan, who traveled around the earth and was back to where he left at last. Also, in the astronomy classes, teacher tells us that the sun lies on the center, which the earth circles around it. And these are different from what we feel, because we see the sun rise and down everyday and thought that the earth is the center. In a word, through education, we change some prospects that we used to think right but actually are wrong.  

In sum, as all discussed above, I conclude that because of studying discipline, we make our eyes broader, deeper and correct some misunderstanding in the past, different from past.

给个建议: 可以写一些人文科学开拓视野的例子
全是科学例子有些单调

xiaonawangUID: 2114716

The study of an academic discipline alters the way we perceive the world. After studying the discipline, we see the same world as before, but with different eyes.

1．        学习让视野更宽
2．        学习让我们看得更深
3．        改正了一些错误的观点

I strongly agree with the author's assertion that by studying academic discipline, we see the same material [/color](文中并没有说是material world呀)word, but with different eyes, in that we see the word with broader and deeper eyes. Also, we correct some misunderstandings of the word in the past.

To begin with, the academic knowledge makes what we see broader, because it brings information not only in universe but also in microcosmic field . For example, study of astronomy brings us to the planets and universe. While in the past we just thought stars in the dark sky are little and shining, now, we know that in fact they are huge and covered with dust and dirt, not beautiful at all. Also, by study physics, we shift attention to tiny particles, learning that matters consist from separate particles. Molecule is not the smallest unit of matters, but atoms consist with a molecule. Thus, after studying academic disciplines, we stretch eyes to broader field, from universe to microcosmic field

Meanwhile, pursuit of knowledge makes our eyes not only broader but also deeper. We begin explore the deep essence of things using relative information. For instance, when studying chemistry, we pay our attention on chemical constitution and structure of matters. We know water in our daily life is consisted with H and O. Also, after study medicine, we realize the existence of bacteria and virus, even the actual cause of some diseases. In addition, we know that the process of recovering is the process of antibody struggling with antigen and then people can develop some medicine strengthen . Studying of discipline informs us the knowledge on the deeper field than what we used to know only by physical observation.

In addition, academic knowledge changes some misunderstanding in the daily observation only by eyes. For example, people usually feel that the earth is flat. In fact, it is not, determined by Magellan, who traveled around the earth and was back to where he left at last. Also, in the astronomy classes, teacher tells us that the sun lies on the center, which the earth circle around it. And these are different from what we feel, because we see the sun rise and down everyday and thought that the earth is the center. In a word, through education, we change some prospects that we used to think right but actually are wrong.  

In sum, as all discussed above, I conclude that because of studying discipline, we make our eyes broader, deeper and correct some misunderstanding in the past, different from past.

飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

谢谢楼上各位的意见拉!^.^

我也想到哲学方面的例子,不过后来没时间写了T.T

查过字典应该是consist of
呵呵,中学就犯的老毛病了

francisjordanUID: 209743

我也写了一篇， 帮忙看看贝？
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=310527

superkiddUID: 2120413

另外，每一个观点可以用几个例子，这样更有说服力，字数也可以更多

ouymUID: 2109118

I strongly agree with the author's assertion that by studying academic discipline, we see the same material word, but with different eyes, in that(我记得此处不能用that,换成which!) we see the word with broader and deeper eyes. Also, we correct some misunderstanding of the word in the past.

To begin with, the academic knowledge makes what we see broader, because it bring information not only in universe but also in microcosmic field . For example, study of astronomy brings us to the planets and universe. While in the past we just thought stars in the dark sky are little and shining, now, we know that in fact they are huge and covered with dust and dirt, not beautiful at all. Also, by study physics, we shift attention to tiny particles, learning that matters consist from(of) separate particles. Molecule is not the smallest unit of matters, but atoms consist with a molecule(不懂!consist with 意思是"与...一致"). Thus, after studying academic disciplines, we stretch eyes to broader field, from universe to microcosmic field

Meanwhile, pursuit of knowledge makes our eyes not only broader but also deeper. We begin explore the deep essence of things using relative information. For instance, when studying chemistry, we pay our attention on chemical constitution and structure of matters. We know water in our daily life is consisted with(...water consist of ...) H and O. Also, after study medicine, we realize the existence of bacteria and virus, even(可是这句话在内容上好象并不存在递进关系,所以感觉勉强!) the actual cause of some diseases. In addition, we know that the process of recovering is the process of antibody struggling with antigen and then people can develop some medicine strengthen(这句话不对!不是所有的疾病都涉及到抗原抗体的!). Studying of discipline informs us the knowledge on the deeper field than what we used to know only by physical observation.

In addition, academic knowledge changes some misunderstanding in the daily observation only by eyes. For example, people usually feel that the earth is flat. In fact, it is not, determined by Magellan, who traveled around the earth and was back to where he left at last.(挺好的例子!) Also, in the astronomy classes, teacher tells us that the sun lies on the center(of the solar system), which the earth circle around it. And these are different from what we feel, because we see the sun rise and down(sink,down不是动词!) everyday and thought that the earth is the center. In a word, through education, we change some prospects(?) that we used to think right but actually are wrong.  

In sum, as all discussed above, I conclude that because of studying discipline, we make our eyes broader, deeper and correct some misunderstanding in the past, different from past.

我的连接,求互拍!
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... ghlight=issue%2B177

monkeydryUID: 183691

我想的提纲,供你参考一下:
1.学习使人看待事物的态度更科学,不迷信:闪电,龙卷风等
2.学习使人看待对待事物的态度更全面,环境保护全球生态圈等
3.学习使人看到事物现象内在的本质:国际关系等

飞啊~飞UID: 2121330

hehe,谢谢楼上的!!!