Issue38 G-89-互助社-8.4日同主题写作 交晚了点

ryanqUID: 154025

Issue38
In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books.
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The author contends that reading books can not provide as much information as watching television thus it is not as important as before. In my opinion, as a more recent invented form of media, television have many exclusive advantages books do not have which brings its audience new way of getting information. While at the same time, it is doomed to have some disadvantages which can be get from books. In fact, televisions and books are two completely different mass media and can not win over each other.

In the first place, televisions can provide knowledge and information which books can not give. A straight advantage is that it can offer a moving stuff mixed with sound in the scene. For this reason, cartoon is always more popular among the children than caricature. And when we teach a lesson requiring the technique of action such as cooking, the effect from watching the process from television is definitely better than the description of steps from books, just as a Chinese old says," One picture is worth a thousand words." Moreover, the speed and length of distance in transferring information by television is absolutely greater than books. Tue to these merits, remote teaching program and broadcasting turn to be real. So many merits we can get from television which books do not hold.

On the other hand, still books possess some unique advantages in transferring information which television does not have. We all know that after reading a novel, people's impression varies though the words on it is the same because each individual leads a different life. And if this novel is adapted to be a movie, it is quite possible that audiences regard the movie as a failure because the director has his own understanding of the novel which can be different from them. Reading books gives us a space to imagine. We can dream the most beautiful things from these words while television is unable to do. Enchantment of the words is right here.

What's more, when it comes to researching in specific area, hardly can the television can give researchers some useful information. Today's television, to a large extent, is a tool for recreation. People watching television to get relax, not to receive useful information. Concerning the financial need, scarcely can the TV station arrange programs on knowledge of specific area. Besides, even if there are some tutorial programs, no body can guarantee it is shown at the time you are in front of the TV and you need the piece of information on the show. At the light of this situation, I would rather go to library to find books that I want instead of wasting time on the television.

To sum up, as a more recent invented form of media, television has many advantages books do not have. While at the same time, it is doomed to fail in some situation like much of useless information provided and fixed timetable for the program. In contrast, books are arranged well and quite flexible. Therefore, television is still not a consummate channel to get knowledge. The book has its unsubstituted place in media. Both are unable to win over each other.   
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polymathUID: 179557

今天太忙了！没有顾得帮你看看！继续加油！帮你顶起来！:)

zrreignUID: 179980

占个座拉，吃完饭来改

zrreignUID: 179980

The author contends that reading books can not provide as much information as watching television thus it is not as important as before. 连用两个as..as并没有照应的效果，反而累赘In my opinion, as a more recent用current把 invented form of media, television have many exclusive advantages books do not have which brings用复数，因为你的which代的是advantages its audience a new way of getting information. While at the same time, it is doomed to have some disadvantages which can be get这是什么？ from books. In fact, televisions and books are two completely different mass medias and can not win over each other.

In the first place, televisions can provide knowledge and information which books can not give. A straight 这不是直接的意思advantage is that it can offer a moving stuff mixed with sound in the scene. For this reason, cartoon is always more popular among the children than caricature. And when we teach a lesson requiring the technique of action 这个表达不好such as cooking, the effect from watching the process from television is definitely better than the description of steps from books, just as a Chinese old says," One picture is不要 worth a thousand words." Moreover, the speed and length of distance in transferring information by television is absolutely greater than books. Tue to these merits, remote teaching program and broadcasting turn to be real用true或者reality. So many merits we can get from television which books do not hold.

On the other hand, still books possess some unique advantages in transferring information which television does not have. We all know that after reading a novel, people's impression varies though the words on it is the same because each individual leads a different life. And if this novel is adapted to be a movie, it is quite possible that audiences regard the movie as a failure because the director has his own understanding of the novel which can be different from them. Reading books gives us a space to imagine. We can dream the most beautiful things from these words while television is unable to do既然加了do就要有介词，不然就别加. Enchantment of the words is right here太口语了.

What's不要缩写 more, when it comes to researching in specific area, hardly can the television can 错了give researchers some useful information. Today's television, to a large extent, is a tool for recreation.观点不错，换下表达方式 People watching television to get relax这是动词, not to receive useful information. Concerning the financial need, scarcely can the TV station arrange programs on knowledge of specific area. Besides, even if there are some tutorial programs, no body can guarantee it is shown at the time 要thatyou are in front of the TV and you need the piece of information on the show. At the light of this situation, I would rather go to library to find books that I want instead of wasting time on the television.这段两个倒装句很不错。那个at the light of 我不知道，请问一下可以这样用马？

To sum up, as a more recent invented form of media重复一模一样的不好, television has many advantages books do not have. While at the same time, it is doomed to fail in some situation like much of useless information provided and fixed timetable for the program. In contrast, books are arranged well and quite flexible. Therefore, television is still not a consummate channel to get knowledge. The book has its unsubstituted place in media. Both are unable to win over each other.  


结尾不好，简直是抄第一段。中间很多句式过于简单了。我很喜欢你的观点，这么干的话题也可以很到位，想得很多，但你可以说深一些的，不要浮光掠影！一起加油吧！

ryanqUID: 154025

哇，批得好狠。先谢过。以下几个地方需要讨论:

One picture is不要 worth a thousand words."

网上查了一遍，的确是安我那么说的。

What's不要缩写 more

这个是要缩写的吧，不信你google一下

At the light of this situation, I would rather go to library to find books that I want instead of wasting time on the television.这段两个倒装句很不错。那个at the light of 我不知道，请问一下可以这样用马？

应该不能这样用