issue154 关于教育的文章(words:500)

gaojiehahaUID：2149729

提纲：
1．教育是个重要而复杂的系统，它由家庭、社会和学校三者构成
2．学校教育很关键
――学校根据大脑结构等指定教学方案，教育者都是理论和实践的专门人才，人在学校受到较科学和系统的教育
3．家庭教育是基础和补充
――家长的一言一行都是孩子模仿的对象
――很多习惯、性格在家庭形成
――通过家长灌输好好学习的思想，孩子在学校学习更有效
4．社会教育是学校教育和家庭教育的保障
――为学校提供资金
――提供公共设施
――社会的言论影响教育
5．总结家庭、社会、学校的关系
正文：
Education is one of the key words in our time. A man without an education is considered deprived of one of the greatest opportunities. Because of the importance and complexities of education, it is a huge system consisting of families, communities and schools. Each of them has a great effect on education. It cannot imagine what will the education be if one of them is absent.
School education is crucial to everyone. A systematic and reasonable education is involved there. The arrangement of curriculums and schedules at school is set according to the cerebral structure and growth of human being and needs of the society. Teachers and professional educators are received special trainings about educating and engaged in education for many years. They have a series theories and abundance experiences about how to educate. Therefore, the education at school is scientific and reasonable. People can acquire knowledge in the school designedly. So the school can decide the degree of the education.
Family education is the foundation and the supplement of the school education. Parents act an important part in everyone's early education, and the early education effects school education heavily. Children like to imitate, and parents are imitated mostly. If parents have good behavior, children will act well. To the growth of everyone, families are the first schools; parents are the first teachers. Many habits, character and morals are formed at people's early stage. If good habits and characteristics formed early, it will have a good basis for one to receive education continuously. Additionally, if parents emphasis the importance of knowledge to the children, and ask them to comply the regulations at school, school education will be more effectively because of the good action of children.  
Communities supply the condition for education and have a large effect on people's mind. First, communities and governments give financial support for schools to maintain the operating of school, including equipments in school, research funds and salaries of teachers. Second, communities hold some public establishment for the development of people, such as public library, public gymnasium, museums and so on. People broad their eyes there; acquire knowledge in a easy atmosphere. Especially for adults who do not go to school to acquire knowledge, it satisfies them to have continuous education. Third, ideas fashioning in communities effect people greatly. For example, if mass media announce twenty-first century is the century of people with ability, people will attach importance to acquire knowledge. So, the effect of communities cannot be ignored in education.
Accordingly, parents, communities and professional educators are connecting together to comprehensive education. Education in the families is the foundation of the education. Whether the education is good or bad effects the future education directly or indirectly. Education at school is the key for all life education. A large percent of education is acquired at school. Communities are the guarantee for education at school and family.
In sum up, family, communities and schools all involved in education is the most effective way for educating.

[ Last edited by gaojiehaha on 2005-12-15 at 09:09 ]

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tomatopotatoUID：129913

Education is one of the key words in our time. A man without an education is considered (to be) deprived of one of the greatest opportunities. Because of the importance and complexities of education, it is a huge system consisting of families, communities and schools. Each of them has a great effect on education. It (we)cannot imagine what will the education be if one of them is absent.
School education is crucial to everyone. A systematic and reasonable education is involved there. The arrangement of curriculums and schedules at school is set according to the cerebral structure and growth of human being and needs of the society. Teachers and professional educators are received(应该主动语态)special trainings about educating and engaged in education for many years. They have a series 哦发of theories and abundance experiences about how to educate. Therefore, the education at school is scientific and reasonable. People can acquire knowledge in the school designedly. So the school can decide the degree of the education.（感觉没有长句，短句太多）
Family education is the foundation and the supplement of the school education（好）. Parents act an important part in everyone's early education, and the early education effects school education heavily. Children like to imitate, and parents are imitated mostly（这个感觉有点不妥，但不知道咋改）. If parents have good behavior, children will act well. To the growth of everyone, families are the first schools; parents are the first teachers. Many habits, character and morals are formed at people's early stage. If good habits and characteristics formed early, it will have a good basis for one to receive education continuously. Additionally, if parents emphasis the importance of knowledge to the children, and ask them to comply the regulations at school, school education will be more effectively. because of the good action （重复）of children.  （我觉的应该直接删除）
Communities supply the condition for education and have a large effect on people's mind. First, communities and governments give financial support for schools to maintain the operating of school, including equipments in school, research funds and salaries of teachers. Second, communities hold some public establishment for the development of people, such as public library, public gymnasium, museums and so on. People broad their eyes（expand their horizon） there; Acquire knowledge in an easy atmosphere. Especially for adults who do not go to school to acquire knowledge, it satisfies them to have continuous education. Third, ideas fashioning in communities effect people greatly. For example, if mass media announce twenty-first century is the century of people with ability, people will attach importance to acquire knowledge. So, the effect of communities cannot be ignored in education.(结构非常清晰)
Accordingly, parents, communities and professional educators are connecting together to comprehensive education. Education in the families is the foundation of the education. Whether the education is good or bad effects the future education directly or indirectly. Education at school is the key for all life education. A large percent of education is acquired at school. Communities are the guarantee for education at school and family.
In(好像没有，或者是to) sum up, family, communities and schools all involved in education is the most effective way for educating.
感觉提纲好详细，行文非常有又条理。但是感觉词汇不是很出采。这方面可以努力一下！

gaojiehahaUID：2149729

1、considered 后的 to be 被省略掉了，这样在语法上是可以的
2、we也可以，但it不可以吗？比较模糊··
3、应该改主动语态，接受
4、of ，粗心大意把他给忘了
5、接受意见，没有长句。这点要向tomatopotato学习，拜读tomatopotato的大作，里面很多长句，能透露点写长句的经验吗？:handshake
6、Children like to imitate, and parents are imitated mostly这句话我去网上问问意见
7、应该删，是比较多余，写的时候脑子都写糊涂了，嘻嘻````:p
8、本来是想写broad their minds的，笔误。expand their horizon学习一下

ps:向tomatopotato提个建议：
         改的时候可以把要改的部分用彩色标出来。这样更一目了然一些
         最后，对tomatopotato的悉心修改表示本人忠心的感谢:victory:

tomatopotatoUID：129913

唉，不一定都是我错了