issue64 BaXia小组第二次作业-一般

michelle1021UID: 195011

The speaker asserts that many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make use of it. While I concede that certain forms of success can not be fully making use of, I agree with the speaker in this point. However, there are other situations when people know how to make full use of it, at least in some business and political areas.

Admittedly, when many people still question what the success is, others already put their hearts to achieve their own success. In political area, when Lincoln still on his way to be a leader, someone else was already a good leader. But this didn't demonstrate those leaders made full use of it, in contrary, they just got a good chance to attain their estates. The same thing also happened on many artists, who made plans to be succeed, but they were so powerless and narrowly realize how to make the best use of it, then they failed to catch up with their contemporaries.

Nonetheless, the failure examples discovered everywhere that can not be used to cover other exceptional figures who did know how to make the best use of attaining success. Take Edison for example, he knew he wanted to success and passionately did every experience whether those results were good or bad, he was engaged in inventing new things, then success appreciated him and let him achieve those great things which influenced us so much.

Even assuming that in business realm, quite universally discovered, many merchants accomplished every step they made before and certainly made the best use of it. Bill Gates may not be regarded as a complete business man, but he bear so much to be the richest man in the world, until now, he still hole every chance and try his best not losing any opportunities. People who like him know properly how to attain success and know how to make the best use of it. Although there is only one Bill Gates in this world, but I do believe in the existence of many others, who succeed in their realm respectively, have the recognition of making full use of plans.

In sum, I agree the speaker's assert that many people know how to attain success but few of them make the best use of it in the long run. However, we still can discover that those "few" are indeed not few, people not success does not mean they did not make full use of their plan to success, maybe the chance and luck still not come, after all, success is a complex thing varying according to many different factors.

天才之梦UID: 2159126

The speaker asserts that many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make use of it. While I concede that certain forms of success can not be fully making use of, I agree with the speaker in this point. However, there are other situations when people know how to make full use of it, at least in some business and political areas.

Admittedly, when many people still question what the success is, others already put their hearts to achieve their own success. In political area, when Lincoln still on his way to be a leader, someone else was already a good leader. But this didn't demonstrate those leaders made full use of it, in contrary[in contrast], they just got a good chance to attain their estates. The same thing also happened on many artists, who made plans to be succeed, but they were so powerless and narrowly realize how to make the best use of it, [and]then they failed to catch up with their contemporaries.

Nonetheless, the failure examples [can be]discovered everywhere that can not be used to cover other exceptional figures who did know how to make the best use of attaining success. Take Edison for example, he knew he wanted to success and passionately did every experience whether[no matter] those results were good or bad, [.] [H]e was[ totally] engaged in inventing new things, then success appreciated him and let him achieve those great things which influenced us so much.

Even assuming that in business realm, quite universally discovered, many merchants accomplished every step they made before and certainly made the best use of it. Bill Gates may not be regarded as a complete business man, but he bear so much to be the richest man in the world, until now, he still hole every chance and try his best not losing any opportunities[opportunity]. People who [are ]like him know properly how to attain success and know how to make the best use of it. Although there is only one Bill Gates in this world, but I do believe in[in好像不能加吧，意思好像不一样] the existence of many others, who succeed in their realm respectively, [and] have the recognition of making full use of plans.

In sum, I agree the speaker's assert that many people know how to attain success but few of them make the best use of it in the long run. However, we still can discover that those "few" are indeed not few, that people not success[ing] does not mean they did not make full use of their plan to success, maybe the chance and luck still [does ]not come, after all, success is a complex thing varying according to many different factors. [最后这一段的句子有点乱]

Anny.Y.WangUID: 2178596

issue64 BaXia小组第二次作业-一般

The speaker asserts that many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make use of it. While I concede that certain forms of success can not be fully making use of,(有点怪怪的) I agree with the speaker in this point. However, there are other situations when people know how to make full use of it, at least in some business and political areas.（我们俩的想法是一样的哦）

Admittedly, when many people still question what the success is, others already put their hearts to achieve their own success. In political area, when Lincoln still on his way to be a leader, someone else was already a good leader. But this didn't demonstrate those leaders made full use of it, in contrary, they just got a good chance to attain their estates. The same thing also happened on many artists, who made plans to be succeed, but they were so powerlessly and narrowly realize how to make the best use of it, then they failed to catch up with their contemporaries.

Nonetheless, the failure examples discovered everywhere that can not be used to cover other exceptional figures who did know how to make the best use of attaining success.(前后是太好象不对劲呀) Take Edison for an example, he knew he wanted to success(这是名词吧) and passionately did every experience whether those results were good or bad, he was engaged in inventing new things, then success appreciated him and let him achieve those great things which influenced us so much.

Even assuming that in business（economical） realm, quite universally discovered, many merchants accomplished every step they made before and certainly made the best use of it. Bill Gates(我也举的是他) may not be regarded as a complete business man, but he bear（bear 使用过去时态还是现在时态？） so much to be the richest man in the world, until now, he still hold every chance and try his best not losing any opportunities. People who like him know properly how to attain success and know how to make the best use of it. Although there is only one Bill Gates in this world, but I do believe in the existence of many others, who succeed in their realm respectively, have the recognition of making full use of plans.

In sum, I agree the speaker's assert that many people know how to attain success but few of them make the best use of it in the long run. However, we still can discover that those "few" are indeed not few, people not success（people who donnot success） does not mean they did not make full use of their plan to success(succeed), maybe the chance and luck still(do) not come, after all, success is a complex thing varying according to many different factors.

蛮好的，真是佩服，上次黑棋猫猫说我跑题了，不知道这会怎样，找不到写issue 的感觉呀！大家一定要帮帮我呀！！谢谢啦！！

freud5027UID: 2165870

The speaker asserts that many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make use of it. While I concede that certain forms of success can not be fully making use of, I agree with the speaker in this point. However, there are other situations when people know how to make full use of it, at least in some business and political areas.

Admittedly, when many people still question what the success is, others already put their hearts to achieve their own success. (这句话可以是过渡句，但作为这段的Topic Sentence，好像还不够合适。)In political area, when Lincoln still on his way to be a leader, someone else was already a good leader. But this didn't demonstrate those leaders made full use of it, in contrary, they just got a good chance to attain their estates. The same thing also happened on many artists, who made plans to be succeed, but they were so powerless and narrowly realize how to make the best use of it, then they failed to catch up with their contemporaries.(例子很好，简单易懂)

Nonetheless, the failure(failing) examples discovered everywhere that can not be used to cover other exceptional figures who did know how to make the best use of attaining success. Take Edison for example, he knew he wanted to success and passionately did every experience whether those results were good or bad,(还没点出他如何利用自己已经获得的成果，创造更多的东西) he was engaged in inventing new things, then success appreciated him and let him achieve those great things which influenced us so much.

Even assuming that in business realm, quite universally discovered, many merchants accomplished every step they made before and certainly made the best use of it. Bill Gates may not be regarded as a complete business man, but he bear so much to be the richest man in the world, until now, he still hole every chance and try his best not losing any opportunities. People who like him know properly how to attain success and know how to make the best use of it. Although there is only one Bill Gates in this world, but I do believe in the existence of many others, who succeed in their realm respectively, have the recognition of making full use of plans.(我觉得还可以具体些，比如他利用微软的影响力，作了些什么)

In sum, I agree the speaker's assert that many people know how to attain success but few of them make the best use of it in the long run. However, we still can discover that those "few" are indeed not few, people not success does not mean they did not make full use of their plan to success, maybe the chance and luck still not come, after all, success is a complex thing varying according to many different factors.
总体评价：文章的衔接过渡很好，逻辑也比较清楚，值得学习！

黑崎猫猫UID: 209414

下次记得写提纲^ ^

The speaker asserts that many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make use of it.改一下句式比较好 While I concede that certain forms of success can not be fully making use of, I agree with the speaker in this point. However, there are other situations when people know how to make full use of it, at least in some business and political areas.

Admittedly, when many people still question what the success is, others already put their hearts to achieve their own success. (好像和例子结合得不够紧密，作主题句不够有力和点题)In political area, when Lincoln still on his way to be a leader, someone else was already a good leader. But this didn't demonstrate those leaders made full use of it, in contrary, they just got a good chance to attain their estates. The same thing also happened on many artists, who made plans to be succeeding, but they were so powerless and narrowly realize how to make the best use of it, then they failed to catch up with their contemporaries.

Nonetheless, the failure examples discovered everywhere that can not be used to cover other exceptional figures who did know how to make the best use of attaining success. Take Edison for example, he knew he wanted to success and passionately did every experience whether those results were good or bad, he was engaged in inventing new things, then success appreciated him and let him achieve those great things which influenced us so much.（不错的例子）

Even assuming that in business realm, quite universally discovered, many merchants accomplished every step they made before and certainly made the best use of it. Bill Gates may not be regarded as a complete business man, but he bear so much to be the richest man in the world, until now, he still hole every chance and try his best not losing any opportunities. People who like him know properly how to attain success and know how to make the best use of it. Although there is only one Bill Gates in this world, but I do believe in the existence of many others, who succeed in their realm respectively, have the recognition of making full use of plans.

In sum, I agree the speaker's assert that many people know how to attain success but few of them make the best use of it in the long run. However, we still can discover that those "few" are indeed not few, people not success does not mean they did not make full use of their plan to success, maybe the chance and luck still not come, after all, success is a complex thing varying according to many different factors.

写得不错，我觉得你是写得最切题的一个。在写的时候我还是不是很清楚题的意思。
例子用得有些普遍，要注意有可能会撞车