Issue144 ToHeart互改组

dinddind2003UID: 196353

TOPIC：ISSUE 144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS：465          TIME：0:59:55          DATE：2006-2-2

It is true that the words of critics largely influence people's impression of the art, however, most times critic is a leader who brings the existed hidden value of art to the world, and it is the artist who creates this greatness of lasting value.

Admittedly, critics influence people's evaluation of art. Different people who have various jobs, interests and styles of life put different emphasis on art. Some of them may have little free time spent on digesting art or have little understanding to（of） art. Thus, critics who evaluate works of art take the responsibility to weight the value of art for people. And people are willing to trust what the critics say. For example, when critics praise Mona Lisa is presented well --her hands are alive, expression is flowing out of the picture and clothes seem can be waving in the wind, people may generally take a look at the picture without much thinking then agree those points as long as the evaluation is not too ridiculous.

However, most times critics are leaders who bring the existed hidden value of the art to the world. Usually common people do not have enough database of knowledge to decide whether a piece of art is good or bad, let along can they exactly find the deep value hidden in the art. For example,  sometimes in front of two similar pictures which have sunflowers as their scene --one is nothing special but the other is draw by Van Gogh ;common people may not tell exactly what difference they contain. However, in critics’ eyes, the difference is significant—Van Gogh’s sunflowers betray the artist complex feeling of a long-time depression by the heavy colour. On the other point, as said above, critics have a large influence on people's evaluation of the art. Thus, usually the finding of lasting value of a certain art is relevant to the words of the critics.

In fact, it is the artists who create this greatness of lasting value. The lasting value lies in the art but not the words of the critics. No matter what the critics say, the connotation of the art can not change--the barbarity expressed in the picture will not turn into pity, and the sadness in music will not turn to happiness. We can see this point clearly in the process of the evaluation of Mozart's arts. When he created his music, the critics in that time do not put much concern on them. But the value had born with the music, just waiting for people to find. Then after Mozart’s death, critics retrospect the music, the lasting value was realized. Nevertheless, if Mozart had not created the masterpiece, no aesthetic treasure would leave for critics to comment on.

In sum, although critics play an important part in the finding of lasting value of the art, it is the artists who create the greatness.

[ 本帖最后由 dinddind2003 于 2006-2-4 19:28 编辑 ]

cuteUID: 2152397

如果想说artists创造了价值，不妨多加些篇幅
It is true that(不太有新意) the words of critics largely influence people's impression of the （去掉）art, however, most times （用generally or normaly，mosttimes不能单独）critic （单数可数名词不能单独使用，哥们没听过戴云的课？）is a leader（怎么突然冒出来领导人，莫名其妙） who brings the existed hidden value of art to the world, and it is the artist who creates this greatness of lasting value.

Admittedly, critics influence people's evaluation of art.（第一句不一定是小主题句吗？我正想问） Different people who have various jobs, interests and styles of life life style 就行，但读起来像不同有不同工作的那些人，再改改put different emphasis on art. Some of them may have little free time spent on（in doing或on sth） digesting art or have little understanding to（of）(of吧？) art. Thus, critics who evaluate works of art take the responsibility to weight（要不要用weigh up啊） the value of art for people. And people are willing to trust what the critics say. For example, when critics praise Mona Lisa is presented well （这是从句吗？praise不能跟吧）--her hands are alive（活的？太恐怖了，整个人可以，但手不太好吧）, expression is flowing out of the picture and clothes seem can不能连用！ be waving in the wind, people may generally take a look at the picture without much thinking then不是连词！加and agree those points as long as the evaluation is not too ridiculous.说得好！

However, most times critics are leaders who bring the existed hidden value of the art to the world. Usually common people do not have enough database of knowledge to decide whether a piece of art is good or bad, let along（let alone） can they exactly find the deep value hidden in the art. For example,  sometimes in front of two similar pictures which have sunflowers as their scene（什么意思） --one is nothing special but the other is draw by Van Gogh ;common people普通人是ordinary people may not tell exactly what difference单数可数名词不能单独使用 they contain. However, in critics’ eyes, the difference is significant（虽然很重要，此处用明显较好conspicuous）—Van Gogh’s sunflowers betray（背叛？描绘是portray） the artist complex feeling of a long-time depression by the heavy colour. On the other point, as said above, critics have a large influence on people's evaluation of the art. Thus, usually the finding of lasting value of a certain art is relevant to the words of the critics.

In fact, it is the artists who create this greatness of lasting value. The lasting value lies in the art but not the words of the critics. No matter what the critics say, the connotation of the art can not change--the barbarity expressed in the picture will not turn into pity, and the sadness in music will not turn to用into happiness. We can see this point clearly in the process of the evaluation of Mozart's arts. When he created his music, the critics in that time do not put much concern on them. But the value had（ been）born with the music, just 去掉waiting for people to find. Then after去掉then Mozart’s death, critics retrospect the music, the lasting value was realized. Nevertheless, if Mozart had not created the masterpiece, no aesthetic treasure would leave for critics to comment on.

In sum, although critics play an important part in the finding of lasting value of the art, it is the artists who create the greatness.

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dinddind2003UID: 196353

你修改的很好啊，非常感谢，我认为还值得挑出来的或者要讨论的写在下面了，其他的我全部再文章里作了修改，我自己真的很难看出来呢。

weight（要不要用weigh up啊）
weight 也是称量的意思，不过你的修改一定行

alive（活的？太恐怖了，整个人可以，但手不太好吧
vivid栩栩如生

which have sunflowers as their scene（什么意思）
which present sunflowers只是想说它们都是画向日葵的

betry 有体现的意思，而且其实是挺常用的