issue123 可怕，求救,自己改了一遍 各位来拍

cane004UID: 2110633

issue123 三小时完成可字数...大家帮忙给个主意，3.8考
It is possible to identify a person's politics within a very short time
of meeting him or her. Everything about people-their clothes, their friends
, the way they talk, what they eat-reflects their political beliefs.
通过和一个人短时间的接触来了解它的政治信仰是有可能的。和人们有关的一切--人
们穿什么样的衣服、结交什么样的朋友、如何说话、吃什么东西--都能够反映出他们
的政治信仰。

出现频率 总频：36 05年9月：7         05年8月：12         06年2月：2

全盘否定. 3楼有我自己修改后的，帮忙看看

a. 政治信仰影响人的言行,但不会影响一个人的外表。1) 穿衣风格是受个人品位喜好决定的，不会因为他是republician member 就会像Geroge Bush一样穿成牛仔;2) 不同政治信仰的人也会成为朋友，共产党的周恩来与国民党的张学良做了lifelong的朋友. 3) 人的言谈方式指什么声音的大小，缓急？这些和政治信仰有可能有关吗 4） 政治信仰不像宗教信仰那样影响人类的饮食习惯。
b.让步更不用说这种内在的东西会短时间的为表象所反映
c. 像了解一个人的政治信仰要通过一些深入的谈话，例如对一些尖锐政治问题的看法；观察其日常行事原则，比如一个人如果非常在意政府政策是否环保， 那他很可能是绿党支持者。而且这要通过一个较长的时间才能看出。

Recently, a view that the people's political beliefs will be reflected by their superficial characteristics including the clothes they ware, the way they talk, the food they eat and the friends they make, within a quite short time.  What a simple method to identify a person's politics? Is that assured and feasible? Carefully analysis that, I cannot agree with the point.

Admittedly, political beliefs do affect many aspects of people, such as life attitude and work ardor, but it is not equal to saying that we can judge one's political inclination by his appearance. Choosing of clothing is determined by his interest or occupation. For instance, a Republican member will not wear like a cow boy as George Bush did to indicate his political identity. Yet, people with different political beliefs might be bosom friends. Zhou En-lai, a leader of Communist Party, and Zhang Xue-liang, a general of Kuomintang Party, are lifelong friends. Furthermore the way people talk which may broadly refer to the voice volume, the talking speed and the body gesture when talking, is apparently have no relationship with politics. In addition, political beliefs are not likely to influence people's dietetical habit as religion beliefs.

Even assuming people's political beliefs have some obscure connection with foregoing factors, It is impossible to realize their political beliefs within a short time. In common sense, people behave prudentially and politely in the first contact with strangers. Despite in various political beliefs, their manners are all the same. Thus, the conclusion deducted from the contact will be ill-convinced.

To understand people's political beliefs, a further contact and deep touch should be proposed. In fact, a conversation on poignant political event often indicates one's political inclination. And one's act principals will be credible evidence for identifying political beliefs. A environment-regard person, who is more concerns with pollution problem, might be a bolster of Green Party in all probability.

In conclusion, political beliefs render no infection on people's superficial features, such as apparel, talk style, dietetic habit and associate friends. To recognize a person's political inclination, a time-consuming and full-scale understanding of the inquirer is needed.

[ 本帖最后由 cane004 于 2006-2-28 11:53 编辑 ]

RamUID: 2181763

楼主写的不错，帮忙顶一下，等高手来改改看吧！

cane004UID: 2110633

Recently, a view that the people's political beliefs will be reflected by their superficial characteristics, including the clothes they ware, the way they talk, the food they eat and the friends they make, which can probably expressed in a short meeting. What a simple method to identify a person's politics? Is that assured and feasible? Carefully analysis that, I negative to agree with this point.

Admittedly, roaring political zealousness does affect many aspects of people’s daily life. Being a communist in China means being a public servant. And Communist Party represents the most extensive and comprehensive plebeians. Therefore, a communist is more likely to behave in salvation affairs to help necessitous people, struggling in the line of death and alive, to be educated necessary skills to feed themselves or even make wealth, rather than concerning with their own business. Take Lei Feng, a communist and a common soldier of Chinese Army, as an example, he did lots of good things to help solving other’s problems in no recompense, such as  caring for elders, lending a hand to new soldiers and retrench personally for collectivity. Those behaviors are broadly praised by general people, and justified as reflections of communist beliefs.

Although political beliefs deeply influence people’s behavior such as life attitude and work ardor mentioned above, but it is not equally to saying that we can judge one's political inclination by his appearance. Choosing of clothing is determined by personal interest or occupation. For instance, a Republican member will not wear like a cow boy as George Bush did to indicate his political identity. Yet, people with different political beliefs might be bosom friends. Zhou En-lai, a leader of Communist Party, and Zhang Xue-liang, a general of Kuomintang Party, are lifelong friends. Furthermore the way people talk which may broadly refer to the voice volume, the talking speed and the body gesture when talking, is apparently have no relationship with politics. In addition, political beliefs are not likely to influence people's dietetical habit as religion beliefs.

Even assuming people's political beliefs have some obscure connection with foregoing factors, it is impossible to realize their political beliefs within a short time. In common sense, people behave prudentially and politely in the first contact with strangers. Despite in various political beliefs, their manners are all the same. Thus, the conclusion deducted from the contact will be ill-convinced.

To understand people's political beliefs, a further contact and deep touch should be proposed. In fact, a conversation on poignant political event often indicates one's political inclination. And one's act principals will be credible evidence for identifying political beliefs. An environment-regard person, who is more concerns with pollution problem, might be a bolster of Green Party in all probability.

In conclusion, political beliefs render no infection on people's superficial features, such as apparel, talk style, dietetic habit and associate friends, but have effect on people’s inner characters, such as life attitude, and work ardor. To recognize a person's political inclination, a time-consuming and full-scale understanding of the inquirer is needed.

加了一段，大家帮忙改这个

xfxfeUID: 2151227

Recently, a view that the people's political beliefs will be reflected by their superficial characteristics, including the clothes they ware, the way they talk, the food they eat and the friends they make, which can probably expressed in a short meeting这句话谓语是什么？可以在a view前面加上there is. What a simple method to identify a person's politics? 这句话是感叹的意思么？ Is that assured and feasible? Carefully analysis that, I negative to agree with this point.

Admittedly, roaring political zealousness does affect many aspects of people’s daily life. Being a communist in China means being a public servant. And Communist Party represents the most extensive and comprehensive plebeians. Therefore, a communist is more likely to behave in salvation affairs to help necessitous people, struggling in the line of death and alive, to be educated necessary skills to feed themselves or even make wealth, rather than concerning with their own business. 这句里面的两个them和themselves指的是不同的人吧，但是读取来容易混淆，能不能改一下句型表达避免歧义？我还没想到 Take Lei Feng, a communist and a common soldier of Chinese Army, as an example, he did lots of good things to help solving other’s problems in no recompense, such as  caring for elders, lending a hand to new soldiers and retrench personally for collectivity. Those behaviors are broadly praised by general people, and justified as 用regarded as是不是更好？reflections of communist beliefs.

Although political beliefs deeply influence people’s behavior such as life attitude and work ardor mentioned above, but although和but是不是不能同时用？it is not equally to saying that we can judge one's political inclination by his appearance. Choosing of clothing is determined by personal interest or occupation. For instance, a Republican member will not wear like a cow boy as George Bush did to indicate his political identity. Yet, people with different political beliefs might be bosom friends. Zhou En-lai, a leader of Communist Party, and Zhang Xue-liang, a general of Kuomintang Party, are lifelong friends. Furthermore the way people talk which may broadly refer to the voice volume, the talking speed and the body gesture when talking, is apparently have no relationship with politics. In addition, political beliefs are not likely to influence people's dietetical副词dietetically habit as religion beliefs.

Even assuming people's political beliefs have some obscure connection with foregoing factors, it is impossible to realize their political beliefs within a short time. In common sense, people behave prudentially and politely in the first contact with strangers. Despite in various political beliefs, their manners are all the same. Thus, the conclusion deducted from the contact will be ill-convinced.

To understand people's political beliefs, a further contact and deep touch should be proposed. In fact, a conversation on poignant political event often indicates one's political inclination. And one's act principals will be credible evidence for identifying political beliefs. An environment-regard person, who is more concerns with pollution problem, might be a bolster of Green Party in all probability. 因为都是讲时间的问题，可以考虑把b3和b4合并起来，也可以显得从正反两个方面的论述更加全面一点

In conclusion, political beliefs render no infection on people's superficial features, such as apparel, talk style, dietetic habit and associate friends, but have effect on people’s inner characters, such as life attitude, and work ardor. To recognize a person's political inclination, a time-consuming and full-scale understanding of the inquirerto that people is needed.

感觉你b1和b2的两个例子举的很中国啊，如果增加一点全面的例子就更好了。
水平有限，你批判着看看哦。我是菜鸟，呵呵
:)

WeOnUID: 2110447

Recently, a view that the people's political beliefs will be reflected by their superficial characteristics, including the clothes they ware(wear), the way they talk, the food they eat and the friends they make, which can probably be expressed in a short meeting. What a simple method to identify a person's politics?(缺动词) Is that assured and feasible? Carefully analysis that, I negative to agree with this point.( After Carefully analysis, I am negative to agree with this point)

Admittedly, roaring political zealousness does affect many aspects of people’s daily life. Being a communist in China means being a public servant. And Communist Party represents the most extensive and comprehensive plebeians. Therefore, a communist is more likely to behave in salvation affairs to help necessitous people, struggling in the line of death and alive, to be educated necessary skills to feed themselves or even make wealth, rather than concerning with their own business.(这句感觉有问题) Take Lei Feng, a communist and a common soldier of Chinese Army, as an example, he did lots of good things to help solving other’s problems in no recompense, such as  caring for elders, lending a hand to new soldiers and retrench personally for collectivity. Those behaviors are broadly praised by general people, and justified as reflections of communist beliefs.

Although political beliefs deeply influence people’s behavior such as life attitude and work ardor mentioned above, but it is not equally to saying(say) that we can judge one's political inclination by his appearance. Choosing of clothing is determined by personal interest or occupation. For instance, a Republican member will not wear like a cow boy as  George Bush did to indicate his political identity. Yet, people with different political beliefs might be bosom friends. Zhou En-lai, a leader of Communist Party, and Zhang Xue-liang, a general of Kuomintang Party, are lifelong friends. Furthermore the way people talk which may broadly refer to the voice volume, the talking speed and the body gesture when talking, is apparently have no relationship with politics. In addition, political beliefs are not likely to influence people's dietetical habit as religion beliefs.

Even assuming people's political beliefs have some obscure connection with foregoing factors, it is impossible to realize their political beliefs within a short time. In common sense, people behave prudentially and politely in the first contact with strangers. Despite in 去掉various political beliefs, their manners are all the same. Thus, the conclusion deducted from the contact 什么意思？ will be ill-convinced.

To understand people's political beliefs, a further contact and deeper touch should be proposed. In fact, a conversation on poignant political event often indicates one's political inclination. And one's act principals will be credible evidence for identifying political beliefs. An environment-regard person, who is more concerns concerned with pollution problem, might be a bolster of Green Party in all probability.

In conclusion, political beliefs render no infection on people's superficial features, such as apparel, talk style, dietetic habit and associate 有问题 friends, but have an effect on people’s inner characters, such as life attitude, and work ardor. To recognize a person's political inclination, a time-consuming and full-scale understanding of the inquirer 用错了吧？is needed.

总体感觉楼主的结构还是很清楚的，但是有不少的语法错误，不知道是打错了还是什么原因！
继续加油！