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Nowadays media like movies and televisions is everywhere in our daily lives. As a consequence, it has drastically influenced our family and social behavior. However, as to the question that by which means does media made it, people have different opinions and much discussions.

  As far as I am concerned, I think that media has influenced our behavior mostly by deciding which issues are important for us, and further, making us believe that these issues are really important compared to others. News that be considered significant are often given more time to broadcast. Others that are “not so important ” only deserve a brief. We take what televisions give us without second thought. As a result, we can only be aware of what media want us to know. Media is the filter of world affairs which might attract us and somehow change the way we think and behave.

  Yet another way televisions and movies influence our behavior is that they have the mysterious capability to impress and move us and therefore change our way of behavior. These media tools can converse our values, our views and so on. We all have the experience when we saw a movies or something like that, it reminds us of someplace we have once been to or someone we have not kept in touch for years, or simply is so moving that make us dig deep in thought in silence, and then make some crucial decisions. One of my best friend decide to be a teacher only because that famous movie “the dead poems”.

  Furthermore, I hold the belief that televisions and movies have their effects on our behavior by always provide us with some “hot issues” to discuss about. Most of us will not be able to go to the outer world themselves, we get to acknowledge the world through television sets and DVD readers. These keep telling us what is going on all over the sphere. Therefore, out eyesight is almost determined by what is on show, no matter whether they are real or have been decorated.

  In conclusion, media like movies and televisions is having more and more power over our daily behaviors through those 6 o’clock news, exclusives, and films etc. We should maintain a critical thinking before totally accept what televisions and movies have told us to be more competent in behaving ourselves.


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woodygtUID: 2136751

Nowadays media like movies and televisions is everywhere这个是个副词，可以做表语吗？ in our daily lives. As a consequence, it has drastically influenced our family and social behavior. However, as这个as放在这里是什么意思啊？ to the question that by which means does media made it, people have different opinions and much many discussions.

As far as I am concerned, I think that media has influenced our behavior mostly by deciding which issues are important for us, and further, making us believe that these issues are really important compared to others. News that be considered significant are often given more time to broadcast. Others that are “not so important ” only deserve a brief. We take what televisions give us without second thought. As a result, we can only be aware of what media want us to know. Media is the filter of world affairs which might attract us and somehow change the way we think and behave.

Yet another way televisions and movies influence our behavior is that they have the mysterious capability to impress and move us and therefore change our way of behavior这个可以这么说吗？. These media tools can converse our values, our views and so on. We all have the experience when we saw a movies or something like that, it reminds us of someplace we have once been to or someone we have not kept in touch for years, or simply is so moving that make us dig deep in thought in silence, and then make some crucial decisions. One of my best friend decide to be a teacher only because that famous movie “the dead poems”.感觉你很喜欢用that但是这个东西太多了的话读起来也不是很舒服，我觉得有的时候可以省略，有的时候可以适当的换一下。

Furthermore, I hold the belief that televisions and movies have their effects on our behavior by always provide us with some “hot issues” to discuss about. Most of us will not be able to go to the outer world themselves怎么变成them了？, we get to acknowledge这个地方我觉得你用错了，acknowledge是承认，感谢的意思，我觉得你这里要表达的不是这个意思 the world through television sets and DVD readers. These keep telling us what is going on all over the sphere这个词用的也挺诡异的，有这个用法吗？. Therefore, out eyesight is almost determined by what is on show, no matter whether they are real or have been decorated这个和real够不成对比.

In conclusion, media like movies and televisions is having more and more power over our daily behaviors through those 6 o’clock news, exclusives, and films etc. We should maintain a critical thinking before totally accept what televisions and movies have told us to be more competent in behaving ourselves. 这个不是你应该得出的结论，题目问的是how，你答出reason就可以了，这个结论离题目远了点。

思路很不错，但是感觉有些长句子不是很容易读懂，我觉得还是应该在追求句式变化的同时注意保持表达的清晰。

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终于被我写出来了！
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[ 本帖最后由 woodygt 于 2006-4-20 21:15 编辑 ]

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are important for us, and further, making us believe that these issues are really important compared to others. News that be considered significant are often given more time to broadcast. Others that are “not so important ” only deserve a brief. We take what televisions give us without second thought. As a result, we can only be aware of what media want us to know. 这段我怎么觉得哪里看到过==bMedia is the filter of world affairs which might attract us and somehow change the way we think and behave.

  Yet another way televisions and movies influence our behavior is that they have the mysterious capability to impress and move us and therefore change our way of behavior. These media tools can converse our values, our views and so on. We all have the experience when we saw a movies or something like that, it reminds us of someplace we have once been to or someone we have not kept in touch for years, or simply is so moving that make us dig deep in thought in silence, and then make some crucial decisions. One of my best friend decide to be a teacher only because that famous movie “the dead poems”.

  Furthermore, I hold the belief that televisions and movies have their effects on our behavior by always provide us with some “hot issues” to discuss about. 这个不是范文里的原话么Most of us will not be able to go to the outer world themselves, we get to acknowledge the world through television sets and DVD readers. These keep telling us what is going on all over the sphere. Therefore, out eyesight is almost determined by what is on show, no matter whether they are real or have been decorated. p x[T:c

  In conclusion, media like movies and televisions is having more and more power over our daily behaviors through those 6 o’clock news, exclusives, and films etc. We should maintain a critical thinking before totally accept what televisions and movies have told us to be more competent in behaving ourselves.


我觉得这篇文章好拿6分了，句子很老到的，跟范文有一拼，不过引用的时候能不能用自己的话转述，不要照抄范文？

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Nowadays media like movies and televisions is everywhere in our daily lives. As a consequence, it has drastically influenced our family and social behavior(behaviors). However(有转折吗?), as to the question that by which means does media made it, people have different opinions and much discussions.

As far as I am concerned, I think that media has influenced our behavior mostly by deciding which issues are important for us, and further, making us believe that these issues are really important compared to others(呵呵,这句好长,而且有些奇怪哦). News that be(is) considered significant are often given more time to broadcast. Others that are “not so important ” only deserve a brief. We take what televisions give us without second thought. As a result, we can only be aware of(take in mind) what media want us to know. Media is the filter of world affairs which might attract us and somehow change the way we think and behave.

  Yet(去掉) another way televisions and movies influence our behavior is that they have the mysterious capability to impress and move us and therefore change our way of behavior. These media tools can converse our values, our views and so on. We all have the experience when we saw a movies or something like that, it reminds us of someplace we have once been to or someone we have not kept in touch for years, or simply is so moving that make us dig deep in thought in silence, and then make some crucial decisions. One of my best friend decide to be a teacher only because that famous movie “the dead poems”.

  Furthermore, I hold the belief that televisions and movies have their effects on our behavior by always provide(providing) us with( 去掉) some “hot issues” to discuss about. Most of us will not be able to go to the outer world themselves(ourselves), we get to acknowledge the world through television sets and DVD readers. These keep telling us what is going on all over the sphere. Therefore, out eyesight is almost determined by what is on show, no matter whether they are real or have been decorated(是不是可以更强调下我们怎么discuss的?).

In conclusion, media like movies and televisions is having more and more power over our daily behaviors through those 6 o’clock news, exclusives, and films etc. We should maintain a critical thinking before totally accept what televisions and movies have told us to be more competent in behaving ourselves.

结构还是很完整的,论证上再稍加强会更好!

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