【三组TWE五一特训-】TOPIC 9--------第一次写 阿 请大家使劲拍砖。。。。

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【三组TWE五一特训-】TOPIC 9--------第一次写 阿 请大家使劲拍砖。。。。

9. Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Where should we live? A fair proportion of people contend that it is better to live in a small town. Other people, nevertheless, prefer to stay in a big city. As far as I am concerned ,I side with the latter. Of the countless reasons or facts that can strengthen my viewpoint, I will present the most consequential and conspicuous ones here.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that the city is the symbol of human civilization, and there are plenty of facilities for living, recreation and health care. Therefore living there is more convenient than living in small towns. For instance we can buy everyday necessities easily and at a low price. Furthermore people concern more about their health and safety than other things in their lives. Accordingly, so great is people's passion for health that they are becoming more dependent on the medical facilities and emergency services, which are easily accessible in big cities than in small towns. Therefore the most striking conclusion is obvious that life is easier in big cities.

In addition, there are more job opportunities readily available in big cities and the qualities of position are much higher as well. In addition, the pay is more decent. A recent statistical report from the government have demonstrated that approximately more than 76.5 percent of people want to pursuit a job in big cities due to the profound salary,  high status and a bright future of self-development .

Last but not least ,we can take part in a variety of events in big cities. Human being likes to live together and need to interact with one another. In big cities, where the population density is high, citizens can attend plenty of social activities, such as sports events ,concerts and so forth. At the same time, more recreational places in big cities, such as opera houses, movie theaters, clubs and swimming pools are appearing to urban people .In small towns, however, the live could be dull and quite. Living alone with few activities can easily cause mental disease.

In conclusion, I strongly hold that living in big cities is much better than living in countryside because of the advanced facilities and social activities in cities. Moreover, the autos and highways enable citizens to enjoy the natural and quiet surroundings in small towns.

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谢谢大家阿
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总体，赞！学到了一些模板，前面写得不错，到后面就有点……不知是否赶时间的过。
几个小的语法错误：
autos-->autoes
pursuit-->pursue
profound salary-->profound在这便用的不妥吧，直接用decent pay好了
结尾段最后一句完全可以去掉，前面论证也没有提及，突然跑出来这一句太唐突

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plural autos
[countable]
a car
imported autos the auto industry auto insurance