argument17 FLY AW作文组第四次作业

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Argument17  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：30分2秒     351 words
从2006年4月25日8时36分到2006年4月25日9时30分
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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Walnut Grove town newspaper.
'Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ—which, like ABC, currently has a fleet of 20 trucks—has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80 percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's performance.'
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The letter asserts that the town should continue using EZ Disposal rather than switch to ABC Waste. To support this view, the letter refers to the frequency of trash collection, additional trucks ordered by EZ, and last year's survey. Unfortunately, none of them can powerfully back it up.

First of all, though EZ collects trash more frequently than ABC, it does not mean that the corresponding service of the former is better than the latter. According to the letter, EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. However, the quantity of trash they collected each time has not been mentioned. Does EZ actually collect more trash than ABC every week? Moreover, does EZ collect trash as carefully as ABC? If in fact, despite collecting frequency, ABC collects more trash each week, and performs more carefully, it is unreasonable to continue using EZ. After all, EZ has recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000.

Besides, the additional trucks ordered by EZ do not mean that EZ's service will be improved. It is unknown whether those trucks will be used to this town. They probably will be sent to other towns or cities. As a result, it is unvaried to associate EZ's additional trucks with this town's benefit from its following trash collection.

Furthermore, the survey illustrated by the letter is not persuasive enough. In spite of the uncertain credibility and representability survey, the information that 80 percent of responders to last year's town survey agreed that they were satisfied with EZ's performance does not mean that EZ will perform better than ABC in the following year. At least, the survey was answered last year, when EZ's monthly fee was $2,000, so no one can ensure that residents will continue to be satisfied with a higher fee. Also ABC's situation has been completely ignored. ABC probably has obtain more percentage of satisfaction in its serving areas.

In conclusion, it is unsubstantiated to claim that EZ's service is better than ABC's, and therefore, it is unwise to persuade the town to switch back to EZ Disposal.

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The letter asserts that the town should continue using EZ Disposal rather than switch to ABC Waste. To support this view, the letter refers to the frequency of trash collection, additional trucks ordered by EZ, and last year's survey. Unfortunately, none of them can powerfully back it up.
简洁明了，批判精确，观点醒目
First of all, though EZ collects trash more frequently than ABC, it does not mean that the corresponding service of the former is better than the latter. According to the letter, EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. However, the quantity of trash they collected each time has not been mentioned. Does EZ actually collect more trash than ABC every week? Moreover, does EZ collect trash as carefully as ABC? If in fact, despite collecting frequency, ABC collects more trash each week, and performs more carefully, it is unreasonable to continue using EZ. After all, EZ has recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000.

Besides, the additional trucks ordered by EZ do not mean that EZ' s service will be improved. It is unknown whether those trucks will be used to(用in) this town. They probably will be sent to other towns or cities. As a result, it is unvaried to associate EZ' s additional trucks with this town's benefit from its following trash collection.

Furthermore, the survey illustrated by the letter is not persuasive enough. In spite of the uncertain credibility and representability（有这个词吗？） survey, the information that 80 percent of responders to last year's town survey agreed that they were satisfied with EZ's performance does not mean that EZ will perform better than ABC in the following year. At least, the survey was answered last year, when EZ's monthly fee was $2,000, so no one can ensure that residents will continue to be satisfied with a higher fee. Also ABC's situation has been completely ignored.（对，这点是不完全比较，一句话带过很好，我漏掉了） ABC probably has obtain more percentage of satisfaction in its serving areas.

In conclusion, it is unsubstantiated to claim that EZ's service is better than ABC's, and therefore, it is unwise to persuade the town to switch back to EZ Disposal.

xmy0523UID: 205186

建议结尾稍微加点东西，怎么加强之类的，这样会锦上添花！
写得非常好，我看了一遍，很受启发！我也写过这篇，自己写得很乱啊！

exp03UID: 2158827

嗯 在二三段多写些假设会不会感觉画蛇添足呢？ 第四段说价格提高很多人会对服务有满意变为不满意这点很好，我没想到。在信中responders这个词可不可以反驳呢？新东方的老师专门说响应者和所有被问卷的人的关系是一个重点，到底是不是呢？
觉得结尾这样就可以了，在写其他如何加强的东西感觉对要讨论的问题毫无作用

zqznedUID: 2114587

关系应该作为一点来讲，至于结尾嘛，有时间多写些也无妨，让阅卷人感觉充实一些

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re
谢谢大家
关键就是写的时候时间不够了，只好草草结尾了事。。。不然就要超时。。。
我觉得关于调查的可信度时可以提的，但是我没提，只是用了In spite of the uncertain credibility and representability（representability这个词是有的，不过word似乎不认罢了），因为我觉得在假设就算结果可信的前提下，反驳掉原文的结论是会更加有力度的，也就是说，因为时间限制，所以要集中力量攻击主要问题，次要问题就一笔带过了

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Argument230  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：0分2秒     0 words
从2006年4月25日21时2分到2006年4月25日21时0分
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The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis.
'Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available.'
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1.        Ten years ago, Transopolis adapted a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway + several factories = crime rates declined + property tax revenues for the entire city increased
2.        Further revitalize the city + some houses and apartment unoccupied = now take similar action in a declining residential area
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1.        Was the conduction of factories a main cause of crime declination and tax increase? Other activities in the comprehensive urban renewal program are neglected.
2.        Areas are different, and times are different. Such action may induce trouble rather than produce profits.

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Argument235  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：0分2秒     0 words
从2006年4月25日21时16分到2006年4月25日21时0分
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The following appeared in a memorandum from the general manager of KNOW radio station.
'Several factors indicate that radio station KNOW should shift its programming from rock-and-roll music to a continuous news format. Consider, for example, the number of older people in our listening area has increased dramatically, while the total number of our listeners has recently declined. Also, music stores in our area report decreased sales of recorded music. Finally, continuous news stations in neighboring cities have been very successful, and a survey taken just before the recent election shows that local citizens are interested in becoming better informed about politics.'
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1.        The total number of older people has increased + the number of listeners has declined + older people like news format = KNOW should increase news format
2.        Sales of recorded music decreased = KNOW should cut rock-and-roll
3.        Continuous news stations in neighboring cities have been very successful = KNOW should increase news format
4.        A survey before recent election shows that people are interested in politics = KNOW should increase news format
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1.        For music: Sales of recorded music decreased does not mean that broadcast music is not welcomed; nothing mentioned about rock-and-roll
2.        For news format: More older people do not equal to more older listeners; success in nearby cities does not indicate local success; the survey before election cannot predict future tendencies

flycc28UID: 2164453

简洁清楚  而我确整了一大堆哦...