issue212 人生价值 FLY AW小组第八次作业 506字 望狠批！

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Issue2: If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable.
1. 目标的定义和价值的定义。
2. 对于个人来说，努力为目标奋斗是值得提倡的。
3. 但是个人要更尊重社会价值的实现。

A person does a thing because one has a worthy goal in the mind. From the fairs of state to everyday lunch, people are busy in achieve their goals. How can one attain an eager worth? Can every means are done to achieve a person’s goal—the fortune, the status, the honor etc? It seems that people should completely consider these questions.

For one, the supreme goal is living in better conditions. Poor work all day long to obtain enough bread for super and get warmer cloth in winter. Farmers agriculture all year along waiting for the harvest in autumn. Researchers consume all their energy on their subjects including brainwork and physical force. Politicians think and perform various resources to balance the world situation and make more benefit for their own country. We can see that no individual in the world is free. They should spend time think about the worth of the goal, choose measure to complete all works quickly, analysis the result they get. A lot of things are done just like a chemist try every possible way to see whether or not can obtain a better outcome. Maybe the chemist is failing one hundred times, once gets the best qualification, all the failures are justifiable to do for the worthy goal.

But now we see too many destroy for people everlasting requirement which is lapse from the goal of society—making a better life for humanity and afterworld. The main problem in modern society is environmental problem. Trees are becoming furniture in the buildings and forests in the past are desert now. Why? That because people’s purpose to decorate living conditions and think it is justifiable to use a mount of log. Air is not so clear and fresh as before and ozone hole occurs on the sky of Antarctic Circle. Why? The managers of all kind of factories eager to achieve the most value from the products, so no waste air and water has been treated with before sent out into air and waters. What is more, for achieving people’s goals quickly, more and more cars are running on the roads whose waste air is rushing out into air every minute accelerating the air destroy on the earth’s. Other environmental problems like water pollution and noising are not writing more here, now we pay attention to the society problem caused by attaining individual goals. For honor and reputation, some scientists give out fictional results to all society that makes extremely bad influence for the improvement of the society. For one country’s constructing, some politics eager to expand ammunition ignoring the peace of all over the world. For more wealth of one people, some capitalist insanely depress the laborage of workers leading a lot of social problem.

How to solve these questions? How to balance the individual goals and social improving? A lot of laws and regulations have been legislated to protect the nature and initial knowledge. Professors are indexing that constructing on the social goals can people’s individual goals be ultimately implemented.
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[ 本帖最后由 exp03 于 2006-6-5 01:25 编辑 ]

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A person does a thing because one has a worthy goal in the mind. From the fairs of state to everyday lunch, people are busy in achieve their goals. How can one attain an eager worth? Can every means are done to achieve a person’s goal—the fortune, the status, the honor etc? It seems that people should completely consider these questions.

For one, the supreme goal is living in better conditions. Poor work all day long to obtain enough bread for super and get warmer cloth in winter. Farmers agriculture all year along waiting for the harvest in autumn. 谓语了?Researchers consume all their energy on their subjects including brainwork and physical force. Politicians think and perform various resources to balance the world situation and make more benefit for their own country. We can see that no individual in the world is free. They should spend time think ing  about the worth of the goal, choose measure to complete all works quickly, analysis the result they get. A lot of things are done just like a chemist try every possible way to see whether or not can obtain a better outcome. Maybe the chemist is failing one hundred times, once gets the best qualification, all the failures are justifiable to do for the worthy goal.

But now we see too many destroy for people everlasting requirement which is lapse from the goal of society—making a better life for humanity and afterworld. The main problem in modern society is environmental problem. Trees are becoming furniture in the buildings and forests in the past are desert now. Why? That because people’s purpose to decorate living conditions and think it is justifiable to use a mount of log.   Air is not so clear and fresh as before and ozone hole occurs on the sky of Antarctic Circle. Why? The managers of all kind of factories eager to achieve the most value from the products, so no waste air and water has been treated with before sent out into air and waters. What is more, for achieving people’s goals quickly, more and more cars are running on the roads whose waste air is rushing out into air every minute accelerating the air destroy on the earth’s. Other environmental problems like water pollution and noising are not writing more here, now we pay attention to the society problem caused by attaining individual goals. For honor and reputation, some scientists give out fictional results to all society that makes extremely bad influence for the improvement of the society. For one country’s constructing, some politics eager to expand ammunition ignoring the peace of all over the world. For more wealth of one people, some capitalist insanely depress the laborage of workers leading a lot of social problem.

How to solve these questions? How to balance the individual goals and social improving? A lot of laws and regulations have been legislated to protect the nature and initial knowledge. Professors are indexing that constructing on the social goals can people’s individual goals be ultimately implemented

根我一样 语法小错误多了点:)
文章得观点似乎不太明白

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A person does a thing because one has a worthy goal in the mind.
There is a goal, with worthy, in one`s mind when people face their life. From the fairs of state to everyday lunch, people are busy in achieve (achieving) their goals. How can one attain an eager worth? Can every means are done to achieve a person’s goal—the fortune, the status, the honor etc? It seems that people should completely consider these questions. (Considered completely, it seems that,   the people who reached the acme or just on the way. Now we also should discuss about it. )
For one, the supreme goal is living in better conditions. Poor work all day long to obtain enough bread for super and get warmer cloth in winter. Farmers agriculture all year along waiting for the harvest in autumn[/i].? (agriculture 是n.呀，是不是改用个动词的说？)Researchers consume all their energy on their subjects including brainwork and physical force. Politicians think and perform various resources to balance the world situation and make more benefit for their own country. We can see that no individual in the world is free. They should spend time think about the worth of the goal, choose measure to complete all works quickly, analysis the result they get. A lot of things are done just like a chemist try every possible way to see whether or not can obtain a better outcome. Maybe the chemist is failing one hundred times, once gets the best qualification, all the failures are justifiable to do for the worthy goal.

But now we see too many destroy for people everlasting requirement which is lapse from the goal of society—making a better life for humanity and afterworld. The main problem in modern society is environmental problem. Trees are becoming furniture in the buildings and forests in the past are desert now. Why? That because people’s purpose to decorate living conditions and think it is justifiable to use a mount of log. Air is not so clear and fresh as before and ozone hole occurs on the sky of Antarctic Circle. Why? (air  pollution and ozone hole, well done, excellent!!! )The managers of all kind of factories eager to achieve the most value from the products, so no waste air and water has been treated with before sent out into air and waters. (工厂污水废物排放，好)What is more, for achieving people’s goals quickly, more and more cars are running on the roads whose waste air is rushing out into air every minute accelerating the air destroy（直接说air pollution ） on the earth’s. Other environmental problems like water pollution and noising are not writing more here,( Other environmental problem such as water pollution and noising also lead to the serious results. Here mentioned them no more .) now we pay attention to the society problem caused by attaining individuals goals. For honor and reputation, some scientists give out fictional results to all society that makes extremely bad influence for the improvement of the society. For one country’s constructing, some politics eager to expand ammunition ignoring the peace of all over the world. For more wealth of one people, some capitalist insanely depress the laborage of workers leading a lot of social problem.

How to solve these questions? How to balance the individual goals and social improving?(well done, openly with questions.) A lot of laws and regulations have been legislated to protect the nature and initial knowledge. Professors are indexing that constructing on the social goals can people’s individual goals be ultimately implemented.
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(总觉得这篇文章分析的有点乱，说不上，好像说的不是很到位，结构上再努力下；))
呵呵，第一次帮别人改作文见谅，见谅::)
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谢谢改我的作文 自己觉得挺得意的 观点明确 没想到还是说得不清楚 这片似乎没有什么好的范文 我再看看 嗯 以后会注意语法错误