issue51 选了个比较奇怪的角度,大家看看可以这样写不

paburawUID: 2204657

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 449          TIME: 上午 01:46:02          DATE: 2006-6-2
Position  教育并不一定要满足人们的兴趣和需要才能真正起到作用，让步：兴趣和需要能让教育更有成效
1 教育并不是一定要符合人们的兴趣才能起到作用，例子，对于司机在上路之前到要通过交通法规的考试
２那些不符合人们的需要和兴趣的教育，其实也是很有作用的
３让步，需要和兴趣的确使教育more effective 但是不是truly effective

The purples of education are to develop the personality of the individual, to the significance of one’s life for himself or others. Therefore I would agree with that education will be more effective, rather than truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

As we know, the function of education is to make people qualifiedly for society, to equip people with knowledge to contribute to our society, and to help people to truly understand the meaning of life. Common sense tells us that society needs its members to be equipped with certain necessary knowledge. The example in the point is that before a driver can drive his\her new car on the road, he or she must pass the traffic knowledge test first. Maybe it is one of the simplest education in the world, but it is so crucial for his\her and others life safety. Obviously, hardly no one learns traffic knowledge because their interests, rather than the force of the regulations. However, the effect of such education is positive, the awareness of safe driving among drivers absolutely improves, and traffic accident rates thus decrease. Neither Individual needs nor interests make sense here, nevertheless, can you say “no” that such education is actually effective in this case?

Besides, at present, many people might regard that subjects such as history and philosophy are not as important as those practical ones. Since these subjects are compulsory in the senior school, they have no choice but to study them. However, due to the study of these subjects which seem to have no practical functions in modern society, the result is cheerful. History might help them accumulate experience, philosophy might help them complete their characters, and art can help them appreciate the beauty of the world. Even more after the force course, they begin to be interested in certain subjects of them. Although education in here does not serve to meet the individual needs or interests, individual in turn find needs and interests during the procedure of study.

Undeniably, when education is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, the effect will be better. Either needs or interests of individual can become impulse to make people pursue knowledge. The famous Vinci, for example, due to his incredible interests in art, become a great artist. Without the infatuation in art, he would be not spend time pursuing it, and not leave so many wonderful works to make us remember him. Notwithstanding, it is not impossible and also no need to make education to meet everyone's needs and interests. What we should do is to make university provide a variety of course, so that students can learn more according to their interests and needs.:L在写这个之前看了某大牛的文章,关于好好看题目的,还举了那个明星隐私问题的例子,至于在看这个题目的时候,想来想去,居然想成这样了,各位GTER帮忙看看这样可以不,有时间的话也帮忙修改下,请多拍.......
真多虾了.......

renhongrenhongUID: 2192156

楼主的角度确实有独到之处，其实G写作观点并不是最重要的，关键是思辨，是能够自圆其说。但是采取新颖的角度写作有一定的风险，因为很可能论证没有那么充分，更或者说着说着就说到反面去了。我个人认为楼主的写作水平挺高，但是该文论证不是很让人满意，好像审题不是很透彻，issue的意思就是只有当教育符合人们的需要与兴趣才能真正起到作用。而你在论证的时候第一段举司机的例子，以及第二段历史等的例子，其实都从反面证实了上面的issue，因为不管是司机教程还是历史课，虽然听的人没有interest但是却都是符合他们need.

joey.liuUID: 2207101

The purples（purpose） of education are(is) to develop the personality of the individual, to the significance of one’s life for himself or others (The most important function of education is to develop the personality of individual and the significance of his life to himself and others). Therefore（前后看不出因果关系，去掉therefore） I would agree with that education will be more effective, rather than truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

As we know, the function of education is to make people qualifiedly (qualified) for society, (and) to equip people with knowledge to contribute to our society, and to help people to truly understand the meaning of life. Common sense tells us that society needs its members to be equipped with certain necessary knowledge. The example in the point is that before a driver can drive his\her new car on the road, he or she must pass the traffic knowledge test first. Maybe it is one of the simplest education in the world, but it is so crucial for his\her and others life safety. Obviously, hardly no one learns traffic knowledge because their interests, rather than the force of the regulations. However, the effect of such education is positive, the awareness of safe driving among drivers absolutely improves, and traffic accident rates thus decrease. Neither Individual needs nor interests make sense here, nevertheless, can you say “no” that such education is actually effective in this case?(例子不太恰当，虽然不是出于interests, 但是出于needs，因为驾驶培训或交通知识是因为个人需要而设计的，另外首句应该突出本段主题)

Besides, at present, many people might regard that subjects such as history and philosophy are not as important as those practical ones. Since these subjects are compulsory in the senior school, they have no choice but to study them. However, due to the study of these subjects which seem to have no practical functions in modern society, the result is cheerful. History might help them accumulate experience, philosophy might help them complete their characters, and art can help them appreciate the beauty of the world. Even more after the force course, they begin to be interested in certain subjects of them. Although education in（delete “in”） here does not serve to meet the individual needs or interests, individual in turn find needs and interests during the procedure of study. (同一句话前后好像矛盾，改成Although this kind of education fails to attract students’ interests, it teaches you how to read, write and speak intelligently, get along with others, and conceptualize problems)

Undeniably, when education is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, the effect will be better. Either needs or interests of individual can become impulse to make people pursue knowledge. The famous Vinci, for example, due to his incredible interests in art, become a great artist. Without the infatuation in art, he would be not spend (去掉be + would have not spent ) time pursuing it, and not leave (left) so many wonderful works to make us remember him. Notwithstanding, it is not impossible and also no need to make education to meet everyone's needs and interests. What we should do is to make university provide a variety of course, so that students can learn more according to their interests and needs.

建议：
文章逻辑有些问题，也就是“怪”吧。
每段开头句应该把段的中心思想表达清楚，第一段例子不太恰当，第二段论证表达矛盾，
没有结尾总结段。
总之，我认为文章存在很多问题，我不反对思路新颖，但基础是思路明确，表达充分，论证有力，否则效果将适得其反。
一家之言，不对的地方，请指正。

paburawUID: 2204657

谢谢先.....
有些问题自己写完也觉得苍白无力,看来得好好加强努力了,再次感谢大家的意见,特别是
joey.liu 同学的修改,THANKS A LOT

joey.liuUID: 2207101

楼主也帮拍一下！
http://www.gter.edu.cn/bbs/viewt ... &extra=page%3D1