Argument146 有一个重要的问题需要向大家请教 【黄金十二宫】

永远的圣者UID: 2182901

The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

"The librarians in our town's school system have reported that the number of trips that our students make to their school library on a voluntary basis has decreased significantly in recent years. For example, the average seventh-grade student visited the school library five times last year, but four of those visits were part of required classroom activities. This shows that our students are reading less than in the past. To address this problem, our town needs to improve the atmosphere of the libraries so that they will be comfortable places in which to work. If students view the libraries as uncomfortable, then they are unlikely to want to spend much time there."

1.        去图书馆次数的减少不能说明学生们减少了学习的机会
2.        没有证据证明学生们read less
3.        图书馆应当在馆藏图书的质量上下功夫，图书馆的环境并不是最重要的因素
4.        得到read less的调查本身没有说服力

我所说的重要问题：
大家应当从我的提纲中看出我所想驳斥的有一些超出了argument本身，我想问大家这样写是否可以？
看了我们小组其他人写的文章，他们找到的几个最大的问题基本上就是去掉了我提纲中的第一个分论点另外的几个论点。本身来说，那几个论点本身就可以涵盖A中的绝大部分问题。
但是我写这个分论点（我放在第一段是因为我认为这个原因是最重要的）是因为我认为：
arguer说了这么一大段话最终是为了让学生们want to spend more time there，但是这也许对学生没有更多的帮助，因为“学生们可以在别的地方学习”；我说要做的就是说明上面这一点，这样即使arguer在其中所的都可以被证明是valid，由于他的前提是错误的，所以始终是错误的。
但是我也有一些疑虑：
就是ETS是否已经假定reading就是最好的让学生进步的方法，以致于我说要说明的问题本身就没有说明的必要或者说这一点根本就不应当出现在这个已经约束了范围我们所要写的A之内？
这个问题我一直无法确定，希望大家告诉我你们的看法，当然，文章写的不好，希望你们狂拍……

This editorial is not well reasoned since the arguer confuses improving of the students in the town with increasing of the time they go to the school libraries. At the same time, some related details are not cogent enough. I will discuss each of these questionable facets in turn.

Primarily, the author apparently concludes the students in the town study less, or at least, have less opportunity to study due to the decrease of the time students go to the school libraries in the report. However, there is only a specious relation between them. In this era of IYFT, students can learn more in many different ways except for going to libraries. TV and Internet have been pointed out as two main sources for the students to get information not only in physics, math or other subjects they may study in schools, but also politics or society they should know in the rapid-changing world. Students can easily have self-improvement through watching some scientific program, such as National Geography, or logging on The Economist website to read the analyses of the politics and business. Further more, students can also learn more in their primary knowledge source 'school'. Supposing the schools in the town improve their teaching quality by giving the students more classes, distributing more homework, or encouraging them to take part in study-related activities, it is reasonable for the students to have less time to go to the school libraries though the quality of the studying can still be warranted.

At the same time, the conclusion that the students are reading less than in the past is also groundless even if reading is thought to be a unique method to obtain knowledge. Students have many ways to read. Firstly, they can borrow books. If the number and the deadline of borrowing are not strictly restricted, the students can take large numbers of books home and have a gormandize of reading by annual five times’ borrowing. Secondly, they may go to the municipal libraries in spite of the school libraries since the latter tend to be smaller, and students may not find too many books they need there. In addition, the students can gain books in many other ways, such as buying books in the bookstore, borrowing books from their friends, and even reading E-book.

In such situation, it may require the libraries in the town to make a relative improvement to help students to get further progress rather than merely ameliorate the environment of the libraries. One method might be that libraries should buy latest books or some books that can hardly be obtained by the students, e.g. scientific magazines and encyclopedias. The atmosphere of the libraries may close related to students’ inclination to the libraries, but compared to the quality of the libraries it may not seem that important.

Finally the report the newspaper excerpted is not valid since only seventh-grade students are being counted. It is highly possible that the seventh-grade students have to take part in more activities or have special-studying training in school which is obstacle for them to have time to go to the school libraries. If the arguer wants this conclusion more persuasive, he should make a more all-concluded survey.

The original intention of the arguer to think of the students are good, however it may be a wrong way to relate it to the report that is presented in the argument. It needs more conscious concern to make sure that the students in our town really receive a good support.

fmac97UID: 2164711

你的第一条写得有些多了，
注意argument不同于issue，不要过多的表达自己的观点或推论。
（关于这一点，我想你最好再好好研究一下ETS的官方说明）

ps: 你的 id 太有意思了。

[ 本帖最后由 fmac97 于 2006-7-2 14:19 编辑 ]

永远的圣者UID: 2182901

看来是disagree with the position了
(回去仔细看ETS说的那些）
注：You will need to consider the logical soundness of the argument rather than to agree or disagree with the position it presents.

ps：id是有点儿傻

大洋彼岸的梦想UID: 2209150

我赞同你的说法，我第一点也是驳的这个，不过文中说的是reading，而不是学习。可以说去图书馆少不意味着读书少，但如果扯到学习上好象有点远吧。。。

永远的圣者UID: 2182901

看来是这样的，回去再改一改