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Amelia1214UID: 2228270

题目：ARGUMENT12 - The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Alta Manufacturing.

"During the past year, Alta Manufacturing had thirty percent more on-the-job accidents than nearby Panoply Industries, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts believe that a significant contributing factor in many on-the-job accidents is fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Alta and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that our employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
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In this argument, the vice presidet of Alta Manufacturing(AM) advocates that the work shifts should be shortened in order to lessen the number of on-the- job accidents. This claim is based on the assumption that the higher percentage of on-the-job accidents is due to inadequate sleep and tiredness among workers, which is the result of the unreasonable arrangment of working hours. This view is reasoned from comparing AM with Panoplu Industries(PI),which is another factory nearby. While this argument has some merits, several critical fallacies seriously undermine the line of reasoning.

In the first place, the arguer failed to give us detailed information about AM and PI. Without giving the properties of the two factories, the feasibility of the comparision between AM and PI is questionable. If AM has a large number of machines that must be operated with much more carefulness, or suppose that, AM is a factory that manufactures machine tools, while the PI is modern textile mill which has achieve automatization, as a result undoubtedly PI lead to the small possibility of the occurrence of the on-the-job accidents.  It is also possible that AM is a macro factory and it has thousands of workers, while the number of workers of PI is much smaller,so we should not curious about AM has a greater accident number. In other words, it is unwise to make such a false analogy.

In the second place, although fatigue and inadequate sleep may cause in-the-job accidents, the arguer didn't present convincing evidence that could lend direct support ot what the arguer assumes. It is likely that the workers don't strictly follow the rules and restrictions when at work. It  is also likely that the managers haven't pay attention to the safety problem and take effective actions timely. What's more , perhaps, there are some defects of the machines that induce the accidents. Anyway, the possibility of the reason is various and we can't decide which one is the real one according to the evidence provided. Even if the accidents is the result of short of sleep, can we conclude that it is caused by the unreasonable arrangement? Of cause not. Maybe some of the workers have heavy housework to do besides job, while others may spend their time on entertaiment such as dancing, watching movies and so on, so they also can't have enough time to sleep.

Last but not least, there are some other factors the arguer haven't taken into account.
For one thing, if the manager shorten the work shifts, whether the time would be used to sleep is unknown. Therefore, it is really not a effective solution. For another, shortening the work shifts might bring some problems to the factory. For instance, the productivity maybe declined, which would exert negative effects on the benifit.  

To sum up, the reconmmendation is not persuative as it stands. To make it acceptable, the arguer should provide more facts the prove that fatigue and sleep deprivation result in the accidents. To solidify the argument, more investigation should be maken and more information should be collected. In a word, the arguer must presents evidence to rule out all the above-mentioned possibilities that might weaken the argument.

leonnieUID: 2216142

In this argument, the vice presidet of Alta Manufacturing(AM) advocates that the work shifts should be shortened in order to lessen the number of on-the- job accidents. This claim is based on the assumption that the higher percentage of on-the-job accidents is due to inadequate sleep and tiredness among workers, which is the result of the unreasonable arrangment of working hours. This view is reasoned from comparing AM with Panoplu Industries(PI),which is another factory nearby. While this argument has some merits, several critical fallacies seriously undermine the line of reasoning.

In the first place, the arguer failedfails to give us detailed information about AM and PI. Without giving the properties of the two factories, the feasibility of the comparision between AM and PI is questionable. If AM has a large number of machines that must be operated with much more carefulness, or suppose that, AM is a factory that manufactures machine tools, while the PI isa modern textile mill which has achieve automatization, as a result, undoubtedly PIwould undoubtedly lead to the smalllower possibility of the occurrence of the on-the-job accidents.  It is also possible that AM is a macro factory and it has thousands of workers, while the number of workers of PI is much smaller,so we should not curiousbe surprised about AM has a greater accidentaccidental number 或者直接用higher incidence. In other words, it is unwise to make such a false analogy.

In the second place, although fatigue and inadequate sleep may cause in-the-job accidents, the arguer didn'tdoesn’t present convincing evidence that could lend direct support otto what the arguer assumes. It is likely that the workers don't strictly follow the rules and restrictions when at work. It  is also likely that the managers haven't paypaid,感觉用过去式就可以了 attention to the safety problem and taketaken effective actions timely. What's more , perhaps, there are some defects of the machines that induce the accidents. Anyway, the possibility of the reason is various and we can't decide which one is the real one 可以省略 according to the evidence provided. Even if the accidents isare the result of short of sleep, can we conclude that it is caused by the unreasonable arrangement? Of cause not. Maybe some of the workers have heavy housework to do besides job, while others may spend their time on entertaiment such as dancing, watching movies and so on, so they also can't have enough time to sleep.可以加一个总结句

Last but not least, there are some other factors the arguer haven't taken into account.
For one thing, if the manager shorten the work shifts, whether the time would be used to sleep is unknown. Therefore, it is really not aan effective solution. For another, shortening the work shifts might bring some problems to the factory. For instance, the productivity maybe declined, which would exert negative effects on the benifit.  


To sum up, the reconmmendation is not persuative as it stands. To make it acceptable, the arguer should provide more facts theto prove that fatigue and sleep deprivation result in the accidents. To solidify the argument, more investigation should be maken and more information should be collected. In a word, the arguer must presents evidence to rule out all the above-mentioned possibilities that might weaken the argument.

Amelia1214UID: 2228270

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