issue147,求拍

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147. "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
传统和现代化是水火不容的。人们必须二者选一。

I strongly disagree with the statement that tradition and modernization are incompatible that people can only choose one between them, as the speaker asserts. Modernization is anything but a process of irrationally discarding tradition. Also, tradition and modernization can get benefit from each other.

Obviously, the speaker has misapprehended the concept of tradition and modernization. Tradition is neither backward-looking notion nor hangover of time. Tradition is the mores, values, ideas and etc come down from generation to generation, lots of which have significant and instructive meaning in today’ life. Modernization refers to the industrialization, democratization, urbanization, and high development in technology and culture. Apparently, modernization is not a course of abandoning all tradition and, on the contrary, it need to succeed the fine tradition with new element. For example, the theory and practice of ancient city planning provide abundant experience for the layout of modern city. Guan Zhong, a famous statesman of ancient China, had suggested that the layout of a city should consider the combination of political regulation and economic development, whose view still has instructive meaning for today’s city planning. Also, some local drama, dress, and relic can not only enrich the spirit life of modern people, but also push forward the urbanization of the area, for their distinctive characters will bring in a lot of visitors which will promote the development of various aspects of that area.

On the other hand, modernization will in turn make contribution to the survival and prosperity of tradition. For instance, modern technology can help to preserve culture relic from ruining and eroding. Also, modern people can appreciate Peking Opera, the most influential and representative opera in China, in a modern odeum with phonogenic facilities. And people can widespread their local or ethnical rites and rituals through television or other video products.

However, I concede that there do exist some old conventions and values. Sucth as blind worship and the view that men were excelling than women, values alike are so obsolete and fallible that they may negatively influence the advance of modernization. Hence, tradition as mentioned above should be cast away absolutely. At the meantime, people should not blindly abandon all traditional content on the pretext of modernization but keep instructive old values and preserve significant culture to better the process of modernization.

In sum, tradition and modernization are not mutually exclusive and they can both benefit from each other. The speaker has unfairly generalized the concepts and made an arbitrary assertion. People can better the world through driving forward modernization and selectively keeping tradition.

morallreyUID: 2191298

I strongly disagree with the statement that tradition and modernization are incompatible that people can only choose one between them, as the speaker asserts. Modernization is anything but a process of irrationally discarding tradition. Also, tradition and modernization can get benefit from each other.（开头段，最好不要用I strongly disagree，I favor之类的字眼，aw的一个原则是要保证客观，公正）   
       Obviously, the speaker has misapprehended the concept of tradition and modernization. Tradition is neither backward-looking notion nor hangover of time. Tradition is the mores, values, ideas and etc come down from generation to generation(此句有两句谓语动词，可改为coming down), lots of which have significant and instructive meaning in today’ life. Modernization refers to the（the在此多余） industrialization, democratization, urbanization, and high development in technology and culture. Apparently, modernization is not a course of abandoning all tradition and（该为but）, on the contrary, it need（s） to succeed the fine tradition with new element（s）. For example, the theory and practice of ancient city planning provide abundant experience for the layout of modern city. Guan Zhong, a famous statesman of ancient China, had suggested that the layout of a city should consider the combination of political regulation and economic development, whose view still has instructive meaning for today’s city planning. Also, some local drama, dress, and relic can not only enrich the spirit（ual） life of modern people, but also push forward the urbanization of the area, for their distinctive characters will bring in a lot of visitors which will promote the development of various aspects of that area.

On the other hand, modernization will in turn make contribution to the survival and prosperity of tradition. For instance, modern technology can help to preserve culture relic from ruining and eroding. Also, modern people can appreciate Peking Opera, the most influential and representative opera in China, in a modern odeum with phonogenic facilities. And people can widespread （widespread是adjective，用spread或disseminate） their local or ethnical rites and rituals through television or other video products.

However, I concede that there do exist some old conventions and values. Sucth （such） as blind worship and the view that men were excelling（似乎没这个词） than women, values alike are so obsolete and fallible（应用fallacious） that they may negatively influence the advance of modernization. Hence, tradition as mentioned above should be cast away absolutely. At （in）the meantime, people should not blindly abandon all traditional content on the pretext of modernization but keep instructive old values and preserve significant culture to better the process of modernization.

In sum, tradition and modernization are not mutually exclusive and they can both benefit from each other. The speaker has unfairly generalized the concepts and made an arbitrary assertion. People can better the world through driving forward modernization and selectively keeping tradition.

     楼主要记住最好不要一些表示自己观点的词句（开头和第四段都有这种现象），这样显得不客观，ets很忌讳这点，最好是引用他方观点比如专家，报告等这样显得更据说服力。

     其次，楼住的语句要注意富于变化一些，虽然单词背得不错。有些单词是用得很好，象better，mutually exclusive等

    最后，谢楼主拍砖，以后多请楼主提意见。:handshake

[ 本帖最后由 morallrey 于 2006-7-20 18:09 编辑 ]

xinxinwUID: 2144273

I strongly disagree with the statement that tradition and modernization are incompatible that people can only choose one between them, as the speaker asserts. Modernization is anything but a process of irrationally discarding traditionspeaker好像没有这么assert，是lz的主观想法了。题目中的incompatible应该是客观发展的结果. Also, tradition and modernization can get benefit from each other.

Obviously, the speaker has misapprehended the concept of tradition and modernization. Tradition is neither backward-looking notion nor hangover of time. Tradition is the mores, values, ideas and etc come down from generation to generation, lots of which have significant and instructive meaning in today’ life. Modernization refers to the industrialization, democratization, urbanization, and high development in technology and culture. Apparently, modernization is not a course of abandoning all tradition and, on the contrary, it need to succeed the fine tradition with new element. For example, the theory and practice of ancient city planning provide abundant experience for the layout of modern city. Guan Zhong, a famous statesman of ancient China, had suggested that the layout of a city should consider the combination of political regulation and economic development, whose view still has instructive meaning for today’s city planning. Also, some local drama, dress, and relic can not only enrich the spirit life of modern people, but also push forward the urbanization of the area, for their distinctive characters will bring in a lot of visitors which will promote the development of various aspects of that area.

On the other hand, modernization will in turn make contribution to the survival and prosperity of tradition. For instance, modern technology can help to preserve culture relic from ruining and eroding. Also, modern people can appreciate Peking Opera, the most influential and representative opera in China, in a modern odeum with phonogenic facilities. And people can widespread their local or ethnical rites and rituals through television or other video products.举例之后应该有相应的总结分析

However, I concede that there do exist some old conventions and values. Sucth as blind worship and the view that men were excelling than women, values alike are so obsolete and fallible that they may negatively influence the advance of modernization. Hence, tradition as mentioned above should be cast away absolutely. At the meantime, people should not blindly abandon all traditional content on the pretext of modernization but keep instructive old values and preserve significant culture to better the process of modernization.应该将第一个意群在展开说，第二个意群有了第一段的说明就显得多余了

In sum, tradition and modernization are not mutually exclusive and they can both benefit from each other. The speaker has unfairly generalized the concepts and made an arbitrary assertion. People can better the world through driving forward modernization and selectively keeping tradition.

句式还有在复杂一些的空间。

看看我的吧
http://edu.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=498523&extra=page%3D1

midiyangUID: 2203266

谢谢两位帮我拍文哦:D

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苯石UID: 2169611

用词有特点， 读着也蛮通的