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莎拉UID: 2185851

Issue 43. "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

提纲：
立场：坚守道德标准固然重要，但并不必然使一个人成为好leader.
1st para: 表明立场
2nd para:坚守最高道德标准对社会和领导者本人都很重要。首先，坚守最高道德标准，一个领导者会总是把社会福利放在首位，而不是只想着个人利益。（举了曼德拉的例子）其次，对于他本人，也可以塑造一个很好的公众形象，从而得到更多尊敬和支持。（举了Bill Gates的例子）
3rd para:一味追求坚持最高道德标准是顽固不化，不知变通的体现。在外交会晤中，一个国家领导人当然不能向别人透露军事机密，即使要说谎来保密也是应该的。在平常谈判中，谈判者经常会假装生气或故意造成误解来取得更多的利益，这在谈判学中是一种技巧。并不是说要他们不诚实，而是要懂得变通才能为国家和他们所领导的机构谋取利益。
4th para:领导者不是圣人，是有血有肉的普通人。同样有个人欲望和需求。要想要求一个人包括那些领导者总是坚守最高道德标准是非常困难的。他们私人生活中的一些流言蜚语有时候不会对一个工作上真正有能力的领导者造成太大影响，因为很多人都知道要把个人生活方式和领导能力分开。
5th para: conclusion

What are the factors that contribute to becoming an effective leader? Some people claims that charismatic leadership requires the public official to maintain the highest standards of ethics and morality. As far as I am concerned, it is true that effective leaders have to be careful that their behaviors are morally right, but on the other hand, always maintaining the highest ethical and moral criteria does not necessarily make them effective leaders.

To begin with, keeping the highest standards of ethics and morality is important for society and great leaders. For one thing, with moral principles, effective leaders always keep the social welfare rather than his self-interest at the first place. Nelson Mandela is a case in point. He devoted his life to the pursuit of social equality, fighting against the prevailed apartheid policies which were based on racial discrimination. Sentenced to life imprisonment though, he did not give up his dream and finally succeeded. Maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards, Mandela became one of the greatest leaders in the world. For another, meeting the highest standards of morality helps leaders to project a good image of themselves and thus can win people’s support and respect. Successful entrepreneurs who are willing to help poor people are more respectable than those who shortsightedly focus on every dollar they earn but care nothing about others. Bill Gates, for example, is not only famous for his multibillion-business, but also his generous deeds of money donation and establishing charitable organizations. He himself then became the role model of thousands of people because of his success in career and his generosity.

However, stubbornly obeying the highest moral standards without any flexibility can also be a disaster to the leader himself and his citizens or subordinates. On diplomatic occasions, state leaders have to keep confidential military information to themselves, even tell lies sometimes to safeguard their nation’s military security. Telling everything they know is not the wise thing an effective leader should do. In the course of negotiations, some officials might pretend to be angry or deliberately build misunderstanding in order to strive for more benefits for their side, which are the basic strategies for skillful negotiators. These do not mean that they have to be dishonest, but to be effective, leaders have to learn to deal with different situations flexibly. Otherwise, they may not bring benefits but damages to the country or the organizations that they are leading.

Moreover, we have to bear in mind that leaders are not saint. They are just ordinary people with flesh and blood, people who have their own personal desires and human needs. It is extremely difficult for anyone including outstanding leaders to always maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. If a leader is truly competent in his work and skilled in leading others, a few scandals about his private life might not have too much negative influence on his becoming an effective leader. Most people know how to differentiate an official’s leadership from his lifestyles in private.

In conclusion, maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards contributes to effective leadership, but it does not necessarily make one an outstanding leader. To be an effective leader, one has to acquire other skills as well, such as negotiating and organizing with adequate flexibility. People should also give full understanding to leaders who cannot always meet the highest moral standards, for leaders are ordinary people. As long as leaders can fulfill his duty of serving people or leading his subordinates, they can be called effective leaders. (585 words)

苯石UID: 2169611

Issue 43. "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

立场：坚守道德标准固然重要，但并不必然使一个人成为好leader. [同意!]
1st para: 表明立场
2nd para:坚守最高道德标准对社会和领导者本人都很重要。首先，坚守最高道德标准，一个领导者会总是把社会福利放在首位，而不是只想着个人利益。（举了曼德拉的例子）其次，对于他本人，也可以塑造一个很好的公众形象，从而得到更多尊敬和支持。（举了Bill Gates的例子） [比尔的拉链门事件一度沸沸洋洋, 似乎不适合说他有high moral standards]

3rd para:一味追求坚持最高道德标准是顽固不化，不知变通的体现。在外交会晤中，一个国家领导人当然不能向别人透露军事机密，即使要说谎来保密也是应该的。在平常谈判中，谈判者经常会假装生气或故意造成误解来取得更多的利益，这在谈判学中是一种技巧。并不是说要他们不诚实，而是要懂得变通才能为国家和他们所领导的机构谋取利益。


4th para:领导者不是圣人，是有血有肉的普通人。同样有个人欲望和需求。要想要求一个人包括那些领导者总是坚守最高道德标准是非常困难的。他们私人生活中的一些流言蜚语有时候不会对一个工作上真正有能力的领导者造成太大影响，因为很多人都知道要把个人生活方式和领导能力分开。[同意. 我们要允许领导人犯错误. 有时人因为不完整而更受人尊敬.]

苯石UID: 2169611

What are the factors that contribute to becoming an effective leader? Some people claims that charismatic [这个词用得恰当啊.]  leadership requires the public official [复数] to maintain the highest standards of ethics and morality. As far as I am concerned, it is true that effective leaders have to be careful that their behaviors are morally right, but on the other hand, always maintaining the highest ethical and moral criteria does not necessarily make them effective leaders.

To begin with, keeping the highest standards of ethics and morality is important for society and great leaders. For one thing, with moral principles, effective leaders always keep the social welfare rather than his self-interest at the first place. Nelson Mandela is a case in point. He devoted his life to the pursuit of social equality, fighting against the prevailed apartheid policies which were based on racial discrimination. Sentenced to life imprisonment though, he did not give up his dream and finally succeeded. Maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards, Mandela became one of the greatest [most respected/revered] leaders in the world. For another, meeting the highest standards of morality helps leaders to project a good image of themselves and thus can win people’s support and respect. Successful entrepreneurs [entreprenues不是public officials.] who are willing to help poor people are more respectable than those who shortsightedly focus on every dollar they earn but care nothing about others. Bill Gates, for example, is not only famous for his multibillion-business, but also his generous deeds of money donation and establishing charitable organizations. He himself then became the role model of thousands of people because of his success in career and his generosity.
[SORRY, 刚才搞错了. 是GATES, 不是CLINTON]

However, stubbornly obeying [OR: succumb to] the highest moral standards without any flexibility can also be a disaster to the leader himself and his citizens or subordinates. On diplomatic occasions, state leaders have to keep confidential military information to themselves, even tell lies sometimes to safeguard their nation’s military security. Telling everything they know is not the wise thing an effective leader should do. In the course of negotiations, some officials might pretend to be angry or deliberately build misunderstanding [mislead their opponents/counterparts] in order to strive for more benefits for their side, which are the basic strategies for skillful negotiators. These do not mean that they have to be dishonest, but to be effective, leaders have to learn to deal with different situations flexibly. Otherwise, they may not bring benefits but damages to the country or the organizations that they are leading.

Moreover, we have to bear in mind that leaders are not saint. They are just ordinary people with flesh and blood, people who have their own personal desires and human needs. It is extremely difficult for anyone including outstanding leaders to always maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. If a leader is truly competent in his work and skilled in leading others, a few scandals about his private life might not have too much negative influence on his becoming an effective leader. Most people know how to differentiate an official’s leadership from his lifestyles in private [private life]. [但是不可否认领导人是公众人物, 他们的一举一动都在人们的注视下, 他们的所做所为也会为人们所评价. 个人的misbehaviors很可能影响到他所在的政党或所代表的政治理念. 阿扁就是一个反面教材. ;P]


In conclusion, maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards contributes to effective leadership, but it does not necessarily make one an outstanding leader. To be an effective leader, one has to acquire other skills as well, such as negotiating and organizing with adequate flexibility. People should also give full understanding to leaders who cannot always meet the highest moral standards, for leaders are ordinary people. As long as leaders can fulfill his duty of serving people or leading his subordinates, they can be called effective leaders.



1. 对于What makes an effective leader作者似乎没有具体说明?
2. 能力 != 道德水准, 民众在选取政治领导人时, 虽然对其有其他方面的期待,
    但更看重的还是领导能力, 参政水平. 道德楷模的作用可以由其他人才担当,
    如教会或社区的负责人.

that's all.

莎拉UID: 2185851

谢谢苯石同学的修改~~~
强烈建议你考10G
以你的水平不考太可惜了

苯石UID: 2169611

过奖了.
帮别人改文章总是比改自己的容易. 人大都看不到, 或不愿意看到自己的缺点.
我昨晚也想练这一篇的, 想想还是算了. 不太好写.

KellyClarksonUID: 2176602

I really like this essay, because its analytical thinking inside. It is probabily the best of all the essays of this topic on the board. Yet, there still are some minor grammar mistakes.

some places you need to make changes:

"On diplomatic occasions, state leaders have to keep confidential military information to themselves, even tell lies sometimes to safeguard their nation’s military security."

first, state leaders are not federal leaders, state officials do not know much of the intelligence of the country. state leaders are called governors.
Second, grammar mistake. Add "and they" in front of "even".




e.g. In the course of negotiations
should be--in the process of a negotiation

莎拉UID: 2185851

thanks for KellyClarkson's appreciation.
it's a great encouragement for me.
i'll try to do better next time~~