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TOPIC: ISSUE14 - "It is necessary for everyone to read poetry, novels, mythology and other types of imaginative literature."
WORDS: 481          TIME: 1:00:00          DATE: 2006-7-27

When our minds are full of making more profit, we often ignore the importance of reading literature. Because they are busy in there academic or economic works, some people even do not read any poetry, novels, mythology or other types of imaginative literature. However, these literatures can enhance our imagine abilities, teach the moral that we may be ignored in normal competitions, and help us relax the pressure in the leisure time.

We know that creative ability is one of the most significant aspects in all of the domains. Creative comes from imagining. The authors of literatures are always the people who have the best intelligence on imagining. Hundreds of years ago, they created equipment in their mind which can fly in the sky, now we can go any where in the world by plane. They also thought an animal’s world in the sea and scientists have found another world under water. And they described a minimal world with its own regulars in their minds, with the help of microscope, we find it. We are amazed by the unbelievable imagine abilities of the authors. Therefore, somebody call them the introducer of new researches for they give the ideas to scientists.

Sometimes, we think that the society is too inclement to live. Our competitors want to make our projects unsuccessful by whatever methods. But when you read some literatures, you may find that the worries come from not others but yourself. Literature is often the mirror of a society. They are containing the most typical characters of human. It is normal in the literatures that for more profits people often have the opinion that all the things done by themselves are right, even if sometimes they use some unwarrantable methods. It is wrong to do such bad things. But doing these mistakes is not the natural moral of humanity. Many stories tell us the argument that if one gives others enough space to develop, it is equal to give oneself more chances and time to complete the one’s own works. Only when we look the world with a peaceful, tolerant, and virtuous heart, the world can become beautiful. We are wakening by literatures that the pressure and enemies of oneself comes from the things we do to others not from other things done by our competitors.

Poetries give people quit feeling, novels make us happier and consider the life of ourselves again, and mythology gives hope to our society. People have the habit of reading from ancient time, and think that it is the best way to spend leisure time with families and friends. Until now, I can not forget the happy time during childhood when father told me the story of “Little Red Hat” and “Monkeys Go to The West”.

Thanks to the literatures, we can come out from endless works and find a place in our soul where belongs ourselves.

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Because they are busy in there academic or economic works, some people even do not read any poetry, novels, mythology or other types of imaginative literature.
建议把some people写在前面，后面再用they代替，不要给考官增加阅读难度，呵呵~

However, these literatures can enhance our imagine abilities, teach the moral that we may be ignored in normal competitions, and help us relax the pressure in the leisure time.
exp03为什么到现在还要把名词和形容词混用？moral是形容词，应该是morality才对
另外语法有问题，这句话应该是
However, these literatures can enhance our imagine abilities, teach the morality that we may ignore in normal competitions, and help us reduce(或者allay) the pressure in the leisure time.

Creative comes from imagining.
又混用了吧？creative是形容词，应该是creativity

Hundreds of years ago, they created equipment in their mind which can fly in the sky, now we can go any where in the world by plane.
语法问题，两个分句子间没有连词

And they described a minimal world with its own regulars in their minds, with the help of microscope, we find it.
这个也是一样的问题

其他的类似语法问题就不一一细说了
文章的结构没有什么问题，文笔也不错，跟exp03最初的几篇作文大不一样，可谓“士别三日当刮目相看”，但是文中的we太多，这不符合米国人要求客观的心理，另外you太多，这个比we要严重很多，弄得不好会惹怒考官的
最大的问题还是语法错误，分句间缺少连词，形容词和名词的混用，说过很多次了，尽快改正吧，不然分数会大打折扣的：）