smile小组 第三次作业 issue38

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In the modern world , the statues（stature) of books in information-transformation and learning has been chanllenged by TV as it(指代不明） is more and more popular among people.It seems that people would rather spend more time on TV rather than on books, whether for entertainment, like watching a TV episode, for information  resources  like watching the latest news , or for education , like watching the Discovery channel. However , it does not necessarily lead to the conclusion that the books is less important than before as one can learn as much by watching television.（最后这句话明显是argu中的套话，看看https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=461123&highlight=这里面有issue 与 argu 的区别）（其实开头除了这句话其他的背景描述都挺好的）First, it is not always the truth that you can learn as much from TV as from books .. The information from the TV is  in the forms of videos and sounds ,which are usually packed with much more information than mere texts, and also our brains receive information presented in these forms relatively easier. That explains why you could learn to cook the chicken much faster by watching a TV cooking program than by following the instruction of a cooking book. Both ways give you the steps of the process, but  in addition the TV offers you the image of the food ,the sound when it is cooked and often the cook’s  commitment. These additional information helps one to understand the progress better and more efficiently , so you can learn as much from the TV as from the books accompanied with convenience. However , we can not learn a lot when exposed to too much information. Nowadays ,the amount of information TV offers us is often more than enough, usually stuck with the “trash information”, (分词的主语已经换了，从information到tv)such as  the commercials and soap operas, distracting us from the valuable information we ought to focus on and wasting our time.

Furthermore, there are some information that TV is unable to convey ,that is ,the information related with abstract concepts and thoughts. For example, by watching the TV episode, Pride and Prejudice, one can get a general view of the story and characters, but only through referring to books can he get access to the deeper meanings the author , Jane Austin ,placed within her work. Like the famous openings of the book, “It is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.”, expressing her views on marriage with a humorous tone , is difficult to translate in to images to put into screens ,so that one could only acquire it from the books. So it is with the science  concepts, one can watch a TV program to grasp a general idea of what the special theory of relativity is mainly about and several main conclusions, but the core information like the formulas and the process of reasoning lies only within texts in books. (这句话有些看不懂了，科学概念？这段中的例子不错，语言描述很到位，也很能证明论点，相当好啊）

In conclusion, the books are still one of the important sources of the learning ,especially as to those dealing with the abstract ideas .

总体而言， 作者是没有提出自己的论点，只是单纯的批判稳中的论点，写得有些像argu了，但文章内容还是很丰富的，如果把开头（提出自己论点）改一下，结尾再深化一下，就比较好啦。
我是觉得深化主题挺难的。。。
还有，写长句时注意点主语的变化。。。

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In the modern world , the statues of books in information-transformation and learning has been chanllenged by TV as it（这个it指代错了，本句主语是book） is more and more popular among people.It seems that people would rather spend more time on TV rather than on books, whether for entertainment, like watching a TV episode, for information  resources  like watching the latest news , or for education , like watching the Discovery channel.最好不要这样写，结构不复杂，还乱 However , it does not necessarily lead to the conclusion that the books is less important than before as one can learn as much by watching television.

First, it is not always the truth that you can learn as much from TV as from books .. The information from the TV is  in the forms of videos and sounds ,which are usually packed with much more information than mere texts, and also our brains receive information presented in these forms relatively easier.同一个句子里面不要来回换主语 That explains why you could learn to cook the chicken much faster by watching a TV cooking program than by following the instruction of a cooking book. Both ways give you the steps of the process, but  in addition the TV offers you the image of the food ,the sound when it is cooked and often the cook’s  commitment. These additional information helps one to understand the progress better and more efficiently , so you can learn as much from the TV as from the books accompanied with convenience. However , we can not learn a lot when exposed to too much information. Nowadays ,the amount of information TV offers us is often more than enough, usually stuck with the “trash information”, such as  the commercials and soap operas, distracting us from the valuable information we ought to focus on and wasting our time.前一大半在论述与TS相反的内容。我不知道你怎么看，我觉得你的TS实际上就是在提反面的观点。not always不等于sometimes.

Furthermore, there are some information that TV is unable to convey ,that is ,the information related with abstract concepts and thoughts. For example, by watching the TV episode, Pride and Prejudice, one can get a general view of the story and characters, but only through referring to books can he get access to the deeper meanings the author , Jane Austin ,placed within her work. Like the famous openings of the book, “It is a truth universally acknowledged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.”, expressing her views on marriage with a humorous tone , is difficult to translate in to images to put into screens ,so that one could only acquire it from the books. So it is with the science  concepts, one can watch a TV program to grasp a general idea of what the special theory of relativity is mainly about and several main conclusions, but the core information like the formulas and the process of reasoning lies only within texts in books.  


In conclusion, the books are still one of the important sources of the learning ,especially as to those dealing with the abstract ideas .仓促了些