argument53 【急速末班车】第二次作业

duanjie99UID: 202383

The author assert that infancy would be shy and this shyness will continue into later life as the increasing levels of melationin. To support his or her argument, the author cited a survey which researched a group of 25 infants. The argument contain several logical flaws, which render it unconvincing.

First of all, the research on infants contain only 25 samples. It is not enough to discover the point. At the same time, the author didn't give us any details about how to pick the samples. Perhaps, most of 25 infants are come from the same place, where the people live there are more sky than other according to the custom. Without eliminating this possibility, the author can not relay on the survey to conclude that shyness caused by the level of melatonin.

Secondly, being canceived in early autumn have something to do with the mother's production of melatonin. As mentioned above , it is possible that researchers refer to more samples which are conceived in early fall. It is also likely that mother's production of melatonin are a catalyzer to conceive that more infants will be conceived in the fall, also more these infants, who showed signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stinuli. According to melatonin would naturally increase in response to decreased daylight, it is not difficult to the fact that mother product more melatonin in winter than in autumn, especially in early autumn.

In addition, the author failed to convince that there is cause-effect relationship between those infants show a signs of mild distress and they will show signs of shy in their teenage. We don't know the percentage of ordinary people who shy in their teenage. Moreover, researchers cannot simply assume that this shyness would continue into latter life of the group of children. No evidence prove that. Thus, lacking reliable evidences of more production of mothers cause the shyness of child, it is difficult to accept the conclusion made by author.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stand. To bolster it the argument's author must provide more confident evidences to clarify the relationship between level of melatonin before birth and shyness during fancy and the later life. The author also should exclude other factors such as the season, other kind of hormone which may effect this shyness.

qiwei19852003UID: 2228793

The author assert that infancy would be shy(这个词的主语是什么?infancy是孩童的意思么, 请考虑)  and this shyness will continue into later life as the increasing levels of melationin. To support his or her argument, the author cited a survey which researched a group of 25 infants. The argument contain several logical flaws, which render it unconvincing.

First of all, the research on infants contains only 25 samples. It is not enough to discover the point(别扭）. At the same time, the author didn't give us any details about how to pick the samples. Perhaps, most of 25 infants are come from the same place, where the people live there are more sky （这个词不行吧）than others according to the custom.(看不懂） Without eliminating this possibility, the author can not relay on the survey to conclude that shyness caused by the level of melatonin.

Secondly, being canceived in early autumn(这样写给人的感觉是没主语, 请三思) have something to do with the mother's production of melatonin. As mentioned above , it is possible that researchers refer to more samples which are conceived in early fall. It is also likely that mother's production of melatonin are a catalyzer to conceive that more infants will be conceived in the fall, also more these infants, who showed  signs of mild distress when exposed to unfamiliar stinuli.(那不还是紧张么?) According to melatonin would naturally increase in response to decreased daylight, it is not difficult to the fact that mother product more melatonin in winter than in autumn, especially in early autumn.(这句和前面有什么关系?)

In addition, the author failed to convince that there is cause-effect relationship between those infants show a signs of mild distress and they will show signs of shy in their teenage. We don't know the percentage of ordinary people who shy in their teenage. Moreover, researchers cannot simply assume that this shyness would continue into latter life of the group of children. No evidence prove that. (不如把这句融入前面)Thus, lacking reliable evidences of more production of mothers cause the shyness of child, it is difficult to accept the conclusion made by author.

In sum, the argument is unpersuasive as it stand. To bolster it the argument's author must provide more confident evidences to clarify the relationship between level of melatonin before birth and shyness during fancy and the later life. The author also should exclude other factors such as the season, other kind of hormone which may effect this shyness.
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我感觉楼主常常是代词指代不清
那本1918年老美的写作书可以看看
以上谨个人观点

[ 本帖最后由 qiwei19852003 于 2006-8-11 14:19 编辑 ]