Issue48大家来批批吧!一直没有太大的进步啊,好急啊.

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

ÌâÄ¿£ºISSUE 48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
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Nowadays we often refer to some great individuals who have done some significance and to some extent the role of people has been ignored. In my point of view, both individuals and groups of people should be emphasized.

As we know, some individuals have placed great importance in development of the history and have brought great benefit to our world. For example, in science, it is those famous scientists that put up new ideas and did enormous researches, as a result of which make our society quickly developed. The most famous physicist, Albert Einstein is one of those great individuals who had brought great success to our world. The most famous theory, Relativity Theory has turned our point toward materials and broad our sight to microcosmic space. It has not only made a step to physics but also to other fields. With this new theory, study on atomics becomes more accurate and easier. Albert Einstein’s dedication to our world cannot be ignored, and there are still many great individuals who have also made great contributes in other areas. So the role they place cannot be ignored and the study of history should place much emphasis on those individuals.

Also, contributes of groups of people whose identities may have not been well clarified, but are very important in significant events should also been emphasized. We all know this famous sentence, once said by Newton, "If I can see further, it is because I am standing on shoulders of people". That emphasizes great importance of people. Surely, significant is based on the wise of many common people, their power and their diligence. One the most famous architectures, Great Wall can best illustrate that. "Person who has not climbed Great Wall is not a true man". Everybody knows the greatness of Great Wall. But many persons may not realize how it is built. It is a result of humorous persons' hard work. It will be not too aggrandize to say that it is a building mix with tons of blood, since many people have died for building this great architecture. Groups of people's dedication on significant should not be ignored, since they have placed too much hard work on it and when we are enjoying the work they have done we should try to remember them.

Less emphasis on either side of individuals and groups of people may not just to any side. No individual can be successful without any help from groups of people. We may only see who has recently worked out some new items and not remembered who is praised, which makes a false cognition that only the individual has done all the research. But close survey and evidence shows that it is not true. Groups of people who have not been reported also work hard on it and made some findings on it. Although the core development in the research may be contributed to the individual but a lot of heavily works are due to groups of people. Without them, only the individual can only hold the new ideas and some small part of the research, but difficult to make it realized. So the dedications of both of great individuals and groups of people should be emphasized.

To sum up, I think great individuals often make success based on a lot of work of groups of people and groups of people are often guided by some great individuals. The intersect work from great individuals and groups of people has finally developed to significance. So we should know what great individuals have done and groups of people have worked in our society.

dongboUID: 2197407

我也是啊，感觉写得很多了，但是没有什么提高了，不知道为什么？
痛苦之中！！！！！

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

chemlili1999UID: 2230636

我觉得你仅仅列举例子是没法深入的，适当讨论一下原因，好处，之类的就有血有肉了。呵呵！好佩服你能写这么多呢，我才能写450多一点。大家一起加油！

lxmsosUID: 2133854

Please pay attetion to your grammer! I will give you 4.5!
I think the main problem is that some sentences cannot be well understood due to the grammer problems.
eg.
But many persons may not realize how it is (was) built. It is a result of humorous (Why humorous? you may want to say enormous?)  persons' hard work. It will be not too aggrandize  (this is a verb)  to say that it is a building mix (mixed) with tons of blood, since many people have died for building this great architecture. Groups of people's dedication on significant ( this is an adj.) should not be ignored, since they have placed too much hard work on it and when we are enjoying the work they have done we should try to remember them.

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

谢谢帮我挑出毛病 一定好好努力