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47"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."

Although sometimes the pursuit of intellect has been hidden by the pursuit of economic profit, human being never discards it or even place less emphasis on it. The pursuit of intellect has been suggested by the development of human being's society and the advance of human being themselves.

In the first place, the development of natural science and social science is a manifestation of the progress of the intellect. The science, either the natural science or social science, is the cognition of human being towards the natural world or the society. Therefore, without the flying development of cognitive skills, it is absolutely impossible that the natural science and social science could gain such great progresses. Taking the development of computer science and technology in the 20th century for example, the volume from big to small, the computing capacity from weak to powerful, without human being's intellect progress, such scientific and technologic advancement could not occur at all. From this perspective of view, we must admit that society has placed enough emphasis on the intellect.

In the second place, the human being's advancement indicates the progress of human being's intellect. The change of human being's life style may be a most excellent example to illustrate this issue that human beings also give more concern to themselves. At the beginning, when the material resources are not rich enough, people always place the most emphasis on the pursuit of material resources. Yet, when the material resources are comparatively sufficient, human being gradually concern more about themselves. And the world-shaking changes have occurred to the human being's lifestyle accordingly, from high intensity to more leisure, from the pursuit of quantity to that of quality. These changes have indicated the variety of attitude and the development of cognitive skills that human being take towards themselves.

Admittedly, the pursuit of intellect sometimes has been hidden by the pursuit of the maximum economic profits.

In sum, society has placed sufficient emphasis on the intellect which is indicated by the development of science and human being themselves, although sometimes such emphasis has been covered by the pursuit of economic profits.

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47"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
限制时间写的吧，我觉得似乎短了点，注意不要盲目限时
Although sometimes the pursuit of intellect has been hidden by the pursuit of economic profit, human being never discards it or even place less emphasis on it. The pursuit of intellectintelligence has been suggested这个词的意思是？ by the development of human being's society and the advance of human being themselves.这句话感觉有点问题，最好改进下

In the first place, the development of natural science and social science is a manifestation of the progress of the intellect. The science,either natural or social either the natural science or social science和前面重复了, is the cognition of individualshuman being towards the material/objective worldnatural world or the society. Therefore, without the flyinghigh-speed development of cognitive skills, it is absolutely impossible that theto promote natural science and social science. Taking the development advancement of computer science and technology in the 20th century for example, the changing volume from big to small, the computing capacity from weak to powerful, without human being's intellect progress, such scientific and technologic advancement could not occur at all. From this perspective of view, we must admit that society has placed enough emphasis on the intellect.这个段落说了下智力发展的重要性，但是要注意下语言，不要经常用重复的词语，你的TS是说了自然和社会两个方面，应该具体说下智力发展对于这两个方面的作用

In the second place, the human being's advancement indicates the progress of human being's intellect. The change of human being's life style may be a most excellent example to illustrate this issue that human beings also give more concern to themselves. At the beginning, when the material resources are not rich enough, people always place the most emphasis on the pursuit of material resources. Yet, when the material resources are comparatively sufficient, human being gradually concern more about themselves. And the world-shaking changes have occurred to the human being's lifestyle accordingly, from high intensity to more leisure, from the pursuit of quantity to that of quality. These changes have indicated the variety of attitude and the development of cognitive skills that human being take towards themselves.

Admittedly, the pursuit of intellect sometimes has been hidden by the pursuit of the maximum economic profits.

In sum, society has placed sufficient emphasis on the intellect which is indicated by the development of science and human being themselves, although sometimes such emphasis has been covered by the pursuit of economic profits.

我觉得这个文章你没有认真的对待，至少写的是不全面的，同时第二和三段有点跑题了，作者要我们讨论的是社会对于智力的发展是不是有重视，但是你的行文都在写智力的重要性，没有和社会联系起来。我觉得限时是可以的，但是要做好后面的修改工作