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timboyUID: 193944

38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."

Since the very advent of television, switching the channel to watch the favorite program quickly becomes an essential approach of learning the knowledge. Some television advocates even asserts the “television age” declares the death of ‘book age’. However, at least in a relatively long period, People cannot learn enough knowledge by watching television rather than reading books.

Compared with books, television has distinctive advantage on teaching, for it can display the dramatic picture of the real life and wild area without merely abstract cultivation. The National Geographic magazine can describe the climate of somewhere and the behavior of human or some animal, even carrying some beautiful picture of them. Meanwhile, the National Geographic program in television can describe the climate or the behavior of human as well as books, especially with the moving picture that recreates the behavior of human and wide animals vividly. Apparently, the program will be more impressive than the magazine. And the author's assertion is reasonable from this standpoint.

However, television can not replace the books since with the consideration of lucrative business, television acts as a performer more than a teacher.  After one-day tiring work, in general, many people prefer the entertainment to the educational program. Consequently, the most popular program is always the situation comedy or talk show, at the same time, the educational program is somewhat ignored. As known for all, many television stations gets profit from the advertising, so the program that is not popular such as the educational program will surely be confined. Because of this, obviously, watching television still can not replace reading books in learning knowledge.

Moreover, since many achievement of human kind before the invention of television were recorded in the form of paper, reading books should be a better way of learning the knowledge. The works of ancient famous philosophers, scientists is mostly published in the form of books. Only can people get the original thinking of these great people through reading books since these books is the most complete and objective record of the great thinking of these celebrities. In contrast, when a director tries to display these works in the form of television, hardly can one keep the original thinking of the previous authors because everyone has one’s own Hamlet, who can guarantee the Hamlet in the brain of director is the same one in the heart of the Shakespeare? That’s the reason why some people sometimes complain that the TV program ruins the original content of the great works from our ancestors. From this perspective, reading books are irreplacable if you want to get the first-hand objective and complete material of such great works.

In sum, television does have some special advantages, such as displaying dynamic images， that are more impressive than books. However, watching television cannot replace reading books in the form of learning because the TV program is a business but not a pure educator and also seldom can express the complete and objective mind from the great works before the coming of TV like the books do.

napUID: 196976

第2段我想最好说一下National Geographic的TV版比Magazine提供更vivid,meanwhile好象不太能体现对比

第4段主题句我想最好说明是历史上遗留的书，不知道LZ是不是这个意思。这段有点不太明白

As known for all, many television stations gets profit from the advertising

stations后好象要加单数，get好象太土了，换一个

总体来说逻辑还比较严密

欢迎：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=619971和你的同样主题
和https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=620082

timboyUID: 193944

MANY THANKS FOR NAP'S CORRECTION. I correct it and welcome other comments :)

38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."

Since the very advent of television, switching the channel to watch the favorite program quickly becomes an essential approach of learning the knowledge. Some television advocates even asserts the “television age” declares the death of ‘book age’. However, at least in a relatively long period, People cannot learn enough knowledge by watching television rather than reading books.

Compared with books, television has distinctive advantage on teaching, for it can display the vivid picture of the real life and wild area rather than merely abstract description. For instance, National Geographic magazine can merely illustrate colorful weather and fresh festivals of different peoples in the global in the form of words and pictures. However, in the form of Television show, the National Geographic program can recreates the weather or the behavior of human with  moving picture that make audience's feeling more "real". Apparently, the program on TV will be more impressive than the magazine. The author's assertion is reasonable from this standpoint.

However, television can not replace the books since with the consideration of lucrative business, television acts as a performer more than a teacher.  After one-day tiring work, in general, many people prefer the entertainment to the educational program. Consequently, the most popular program is always the situation comedy or talk show. At the same time, however, the educational program is somewhat ignored. As known for all, many television stations earn profit from the advertisment, so the program that is not popular such as the educational program will surely be confined. Because of this, obviously, watching television still can not replace reading books in learning knowledge.

Moreover, compared with TV, reading books should be a better way of learning the knowledge stemming from the ancient time before the advent of TV . As known for all, the works of ancient famous philosophers, scientists is mostly published in the form of books. Only can people get the original thinking of these great people through reading books since these books is the most complete and objective record of the great thinking of these celebrities. In contrast, when a director tries to display these works in the form of television, hardly can one keep the original thinking of the previous authors because everyone has one’s own Hamlet, who can guarantee the Hamlet in the brain of director is the same one in the heart of the Shakespeare? That's the reason why some people sometimes complain that the TV program ruins the original content of the great works from our ancestors. From this perspective, reading books are irreplacable if you want to get the first-hand objective and complete material of such great works.

In sum, television does have some special advantages, such as displaying dynamic images,that are more impressive than books. However, watching television cannot replace reading books in the form of learning because the TV program is a business but not a pure educator and also seldom can express the complete and objective mind from the great works from ancient time before the time of TV invention.

[ 本帖最后由 timboy 于 2007-3-4 16:28 编辑 ]

bingzeUID: 2285161

Since the very advent of television, switching the channel to watch the favorite program quickly becomes an essential approach of learning the knowledge. Some television advocates even asserts the “television age” declares the death of ‘book age’. However, at least in a relatively long period, People cannot learn enough knowledge by watching television rather than reading books.Compared with books, television has distinctive advantage on teaching, for it can display the dramatic picture of the real life and wild area without merely abstract cultivation. The National Geographic magazine can describe the climate of somewhere and the behavior of human or some animal, even carrying some beautiful picture of them. Meanwhile, the National Geographic program in television can describe the climate or the behavior of human as well as books, especially with the moving picture that recreates the behavior of human and wide animals vividly. Apparently, the program will be more impressive than the magazine. And the author's assertion is reasonable from this standpoint.
However, television can not replace the books since with the consideration of lucrative business, television acts as a performer more than a teacher.  After one-day tiring work, in general, many people prefer the entertainment to the educational program. Consequently, the most popular program is always the situation comedy or talk show, at the same time, the educational program is somewhat ignored. As known for all, many television stations gets profit from the advertising, so the program that is not popular such as the educational program will surely be confined. Because of this, obviously, watching television still can not replace reading books in learning knowledge.电视有商业成分就不能用作教育么?书籍的买卖也是商业.
大家不爱看,不能说明电视不能像书籍一样提供知识. 很多人还不爱看书呢,对吧,不能因此说书籍也不适合用来获取知识.
Moreover, since many achievement of human kind before the invention of television were recorded in the form of paper, reading books should be a better way of learning the knowledge. The works of ancient famous philosophers, scientists is mostly published in the form of books. Only can people get the original thinking of these great people through reading books since these books is the most complete and objective record of the great thinking of these celebrities. In contrast, when a director tries to display these works in the form of television, hardly can one keep the original thinking of the previous authors because everyone has one’s own Hamlet, who can guarantee the Hamlet in the brain of director is the same one in the heart of the Shakespeare读书也一样是一百人一百个哈姆雷特, ? That’s the reason why some people sometimes complain that the TV program ruins the original content of the great works from our ancestors破坏原著不代表电视没有能力反映知识,如果电视制作的精确些,是不是就可以代替书籍了呢? From this perspective, reading books are irreplacable if you want to get the first-hand objective and complete material of such great works. In sum, television does have some special advantages, such as displaying dynamic images， that are more impressive than books. However, watching television cannot replace reading books in the form of learning because the TV program is a business but not a pure educator and also seldom can express the complete and objective mind from the great works before the coming of TV like the books do.
你给我批的我看了,有道理,过会改.我觉得你的问题是:一,缺乏深刻,没有分析出电视机和书籍的本质区别,并且因为这些区别使得电视代替不了书籍.二逻辑上缺乏严密,有几个地方都可以作为ARGUMENT来驳. 三,感觉无骨架,一是没有主题句,二是段落之间的顺序关系有待调整.你第一段说的是电视比书籍生动,第二段说大家不爱看电视,第三段说电视没有书籍精确.
总之,理论论证需要加强,并且要注意没段都要有主题句.

timboyUID: 193944

谢谢修改。我重新修改了一遍，希望能更好。
38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books." Since the very advent of television, switching the channel to watch the favorite program quickly becomes an essential approach of learning the knowledge. Some television advocates even asserts the “television age” declares the death of ‘book age’. However, at least in a relatively long period, People cannot learn enough knowledge by watching television rather than reading books.Compared with books, television has distinctive advantage on teaching, for it can display the vivid picture of the real life and wild area rather than merely abstract description. For instance, National Geographic magazine can merely illustrate colorful weather and fresh festivals of different peoples in the global in the form of words and pictures. However, in the form of Television show, the National Geographic program can recreates the weather or the behavior of human with  moving picture that make audience's feeling more "real". Apparently, the program on television will be more impressive than the magazine. The author's assertion is reasonable from this standpoint.However, we cannot learn more knowledge from television than that from books since television program serves mainly for the popularity while books can meet different people demand. For the sake of the need from popularity thus for more financial support from ads, television programs which can be understood by common people are much likely be released. In contrast, books, which can be written for different demands of potential readers, can supply more complete knowledge compared that from television program. We can indeed learn what's the reletivity is and admire the greatness of Einstein from tv programs for commmon people.  However, after preferring the approach of reading varieties of books, besides what we learn from television program, we can learn what's the principle of the Reletivity, how to prove the rightness of the Reletivity and how to put the theory in practice in both the space exploration and daily living.
Moreover, compared with television, reading books should be a better way of learning the knowledge stemming from the time before the advent of television. As known for all, the works of ancient famous philosophers, scientists is mostly published in the form of books. Only can people get the original thinking of these great people through reading books since these books is the most complete and objective record of the great thinking of these celebrities. In contrast, when a director tries to display these works in the form of television, hardly can one keep the original thinking of the previous authors. Adeversely, one will inevitably add or delete something from one’s subjective comprehension. In this way, what the audience see are the figures in the heart of director rather than these in the heart of the original authors. Seldom can audience, if they choose to learn the ancient works through watching television, see and comprehend the knowledge as much as what from reading the original works from the ancient books. That's the reason why some people, who have already read some ancient great works, sometimes complain that the television program ruins the original content of the great works from our ancestors. From this perspective, reading books are irreplaceable if you want to get the first-hand objective and complete material of such ancient great works.In sum, television does have some special advantages, such as displaying dynamic images which are more impressive than books. However, watching television cannot replace reading books in the form of learning because the television program can only meet the need of and also seldom can express the complete and objective mind from the great works from ancient time before the time of television invention.

bingzeUID: 2285161

In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books." Since the very advent of television, switching the channel to watch the favorite program quickly becomes an essential approach of learning the knowledge(应该是生活方式). Some television advocates even asserts the “television age” declares the death of ‘book age’中国英语不说,还是病句. However, at least in a relatively long period, People cannot learn enough knowledge by watching television rather than reading books.Compared with books, television has distinctive advantage(你先说有些人认为电视机时代取代书时代,然后用however, 这时候你就应该说电视的缺点了. 怎么又说电视优点了?你翻译成汉语,自己体味下,通不通.) on teaching, for it can display the vivid picture of the real life and wild area rather than merely abstract description. For instance, National Geographic magazine can merely illustrate colorful weather and fresh festivals of different peoples in the global in the form of words and pictures. However, in the form of Television show, the National Geographic program can recreates the weather or the behavior of human with  moving picture that make audience's feeling more "real". Apparently, the program on television will be more impressive than the magazine.(电视机比书籍不是仅仅让你有更好的视听感受就完了,那样突出不了电视机的作用,你要写的话就要强调电视机能做到而书籍做不到或者难以做到的东西,) The author's assertion is reasonable from this standpoint.However注意这个词可不是随便用的,一半文章用一遍就够了,先是让步(adimittedly…)然后就是however了, we cannot learn more knowledge from television than that from books since television program serves mainly for the popularity while books can meet different people demand. For the sake of the need from popularity thus(???)for (连用两个for)more financial support from ads, television programs which can be understood by common people are much likely be released(?). In contrast, books, which can be written for different demands of potential readers, can supply more complete knowledge(更多全部的知识?病句) compared that from television program. We can indeed learn what's the reletivity is and admire the greatness of Einstein from tv programs for commmon people(前面有个we了,这句话翻译成汉语,你再看下).  However, after preferring the approach of reading varieties of books, besides what we learn from television program, we can learn what's the principle of the Reletivity, how to prove the rightness of the Reletivity and how to put the theory in practice in both the space exploration and daily living. 这段不少地方不通顺,翻译成汉语都不通顺,更不要说英语了,说服力感觉也不强.Moreover, compared with television, reading books should be a better way of learning the knowledge stemming from the time before the advent of television. As known for all, the works of ancient famous philosophers, scientists is mostly published in the form of books. Only can people get the original thinking of these great people through reading books since these books is the most complete and objective record of the great thinking of these celebrities. In contrast, when a director tries to display these works in the form of television, hardly can one keep the original thinking of the previous authors. Adeversely, one will inevitably add or delete something from one’s subjective comprehension这里和前面有些小重复,并且你没有分析出本质,如果仅仅是电视制作者的主观因素,导致二手资料的不可信,那么电视节目还是可以接受的,我们看的很多书籍的内容不都是二手信息么? . In this way, what the audience see are the figures in the heart of director rather than these in the heart of the original authors这句话看不懂. Seldom can audience, if they choose to learn the ancient works through watching television, see and comprehend the knowledge as much as what from reading the original works from the ancient books. That's the reason why some people, who have already read some ancient great works, sometimes complain that the television program ruins the original content of the great works from our ancestors. From this perspective, reading books are irreplaceable if you want to get the first-hand objective and complete material of such ancient great works.In sum, television does have some special advantages, such as displaying dynamic images which are more impressive than books. However, watching television cannot replace reading books in the form of learning because the television program can only meet the need of and also seldom can express the complete and objective mind from the great works from ancient time before the time of television invention.

这篇文章字数不少,可是不见得管用.一, 分析的不深入,观点没有洞察力.二表达欠妥. 感觉还没有上篇文章好,楼主若是不信,逐字翻译成汉语,看看逻辑是否通顺,说服力强不强,你自己都可以给你打分了.

kexinyupiaoUID: 2250204

抱歉回拍的有些迟了阿……学校的网络……呵呵~
38"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was. People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."

Since the very advent of television, switching the channel to watch the favorite program quickly becomes an essential approach of learning the可以去掉 knowledge. Some television advocates even asserts assert the “television age” declaresdeclare我对这句挺困惑的，assert是不是要跟should联用的，should可以省略的？以前学的语法都忘记了…… the death of ‘book age’. However, at least in a relatively long period, People cannot learn enough knowledge by watching television rather than reading books. 建议改为强调书的重要性

Compared with books, television has distinctive advantage on teaching, for it can display the dramatic picture of the real life and wild area without merely abstract cultivation. The National Geographic magazine can describe the climate of somewhere and the behavior of human or some animals, even carrying some beautiful picture of them. Meanwhile, the National Geographic program in television can describe the climate or the behavior of human as well as books, especially with the moving picture that recreates the behavior of human and wide animals vividly. 感觉以上这两句差不多 Apparently, the program will be more impressive than the magazine. And the author's assertion is reasonable from this standpoint.

However, television can not replace the books since去掉 with the consideration of lucrative business, television acts as a performer more than a teacher.  After one-day tiring work, in general, many people prefer the entertainment to the educational program.很有道理 Consequently, the most popular program is always the situation comedy or talk show, at the same time, the educational program is somewhat ignored. As known for to all, many television stations gets profit from the advertising, so the program that is not popular such as the educational program will surely be confined. Because of this, obviously, watching television still can not replace reading books in learning knowledge.

Moreover, since many achievement of human kind before the invention of television were recorded in the form of paper, reading books should be a better way of learning the knowledge. The works of ancient famous philosophers, scientists is mostly published in the form of books. Only can people get the original thinking of these great people through reading books since these books is the most complete and objective record of the great thinking of these celebrities.建议改为Only through reading books can people……倒装不错~ In contrast, when a director tries to display these works in the form of television, hardly can one keep the original thinking of the previous authors because everyone has one’s own Hamlet, who can guarantee the Hamlet in the brain of director is the same one in the heart of the Shakespeare? That’s the reason why some people sometimes complain that the TV program ruins the original content of the great works from our ancestors. From this perspective, reading books are irreplaceable if you want to get the first-hand objective and complete material of such great works.

In sum, television does have some special advantages, such as displaying dynamic images that are more impressive than books. 强调句~ However, watching television cannot replace reading books in the form of改为in the light of  learning because the TV program is a business but not a pure educator建议换一个词 and also seldom can express the complete and objective mind from the great works before the coming of TV like the books do.

写得不错~句式也很丰富~向LZ学习~