Issue51 [Transcend小组]第一次作业 From 荧惑

荧惑UID: 2280559

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Should education be designed to meet the needs and the interests of every different student? I agree that in some special aspects like arts, music and literature, education should be designed to meet individual needs. However, in other aspects, there is no need to specify the education for different persons in basic knowledge.

Admittedly, under some circumstances, education which meets individual personality is effective. The successful man in arts areas is not contributed to what they have learned in common, but what they describe the world in their own. The more unique he has, the more possibility of successful it will. As an example, the Dutch painter Van Gogh left school in his sixteen and self-taught as an artist survive much difficulties, finally his painting brought record prices at auctions. It is hardly to believe that the man could be so special without be took the tortured experience. Not all the artists have to be struggled to be a master. But in arts, the education which does not face to the learner’s own characteristic will kill creative genius of the artist. Because, in painting, music or literature, success is not a continuer of the past learning, but a breakthrough of the existing knowledge.

While in other fields as natural science or social science, learners should be educated to some common knowledge of those aspects. “If I have seen further it is by standing on the shoulders of giants”, as Issac Newton said, the development of science is based on some basic principles which are accepted to all. It is unrealistic that a person masters maths do not know the principle of Newton and Leibniz, a person familiar in physics hardly recongizes theory of relative to physics and a person successed in biology have never learned theory of evolution. Education in science, different from arts, provides the basic knowledge to these fields and is common in every country with every languages. Consequently there is no need providing a personal education in common knowledges.

Another reason why I claim that it is not necessary for general subject to face the individual is we may have a impartiality stardard to judge a student suitable to further study or not. Since education sources is limited, putting the students to have the fittest kinds of study is significant. To have a common content of education before college study will help students to distinguish with others. It is hardly imaging students study different subjects could be ranked in a fair stantard.

At the same time, some individual education to graduate students or persons not only want to obtain knowledge but also to do further research in science is necessary. Similar with arts, researchers in science also need to be creative, patient and have unique views of problems. These abilities are hardly taught in the lessons to pubilc. A graduate student who studies with a qualified professor will be instructed in both what his (or her) research in and how he (or she) research. The suitable attitude to research enlightenes the way to success, rather than the knowledge you have.

In sum, I hold that facing different learners, education should be designed to meet the individual or not.

Argument 147
1.  a survey indicated that players prefer lifelike games, but it does not mean players will buy lifelike games.
2.  Whirlwind advertises lifelike game to people from 10 to25 years old, but it will not automatically lead to a good sale of such game without considers the game quality.
3.  No evidence suggests that it will dramatically in the next few months, the high sale perhaps may come in next year.

Argument 17
1.EZ is more frequent than ABC, but not automatically mean that EZ is better than ABC.
2. EZ has more trunks than ABC, but not automatically mean that EZ is better than ABC.
3. the survey is based on last year, but repesent all the time





[ 本帖最后由 荧惑 于 2007-3-6 00:27 编辑 ]

IloveMorganUID: 2209413

占座,一会回拍.

IloveMorganUID: 2209413

Should education be designed to meet the needs and the interests of every different student? (你的这一句就有问题了，逻辑跨度太大，还没说人们都是怎么看的呢直接就来了一个i agree，有些唐突了吧！呵呵）I agree that in some special aspects like arts, music and literature, education should be designed to meet individual needs. However, in other aspects, there is no need to specify the education for different persons in basic knowledge.（开头还是可以的，直接写出了自己的观点和立场，间接明了）

  Admittedly, under some circumstances, education which（这个多余了，这里是个that从句可以省略的，你把句子再连起来看看） meets individual personality is effective. The successful man in arts（art） areas is not contributed to what they have learned in common, but what they describe the world in their own. The more unique he（he不要） has（is）, the more possibility of successful it will.（这句没看懂，不知道什么意思？） As an example, the Dutch painter Van Gogh left school in his sixteen and self-taught as an artist survive much difficulties, finally his painting brought record prices at auctions. It is hardly to believe that the man could be so special without be took the tortured experience. Not all the artists have to be struggled to be a master. But in arts, the education which does not face to the learner’s own characteristic will kill creative genius of the artist. Because, in painting, music or literature, success is not a continuer of the past learning, but a breakthrough of the existing knowledge.（你要说的是教育的效果，老凡同志那是自学啊，这个这个要考虑一下了，个人感觉这里跑了哦）

  While in other fields as natural science or social science, learners should be educated to some common knowledge of those aspects（those aspect是指什么？）. “If I have seen further it is by standing on the shoulders of giants”, （这个谚语用的好，赞一个）as Issac Newton said, the development of science is based on some basic principles which （这里少主语）are accepted to all. It is unrealistic that a person masters maths（study math好一些，你这个master让人不是很看的懂） do not know the principle of Newton and Leibniz, a person familiar in（familiar的固定搭配是in，不是吧，是with） physics hardly recongizes theory of relative to physics and a person successed in biology have never learned theory of evolution. Education in science, different from arts, provides the basic knowledge to these fields and is common in every country with every languages.（这个句子还算是一个有点gre水平的句子） Consequently there is no need providing a personal education in common knowledges.（本段想法不错，全文按这个水平写才是正规的写法，这个段落基本上合格，但是个别句子一定要慎重推敲）

  Another reason why I claim that it is not necessary for general subject to face the individual is we may have a impartiality stardard（standard） to judge a student suitable to further study or not. Since education sources is limited, putting the students to have the fittest kinds of study is significant（这个应该用不足，你用明显是什么意思）. To have a common content of education before college study will help students to distinguish with others. It is hardly imaging students study different subjects could be ranked in a fair stantard.（又是一个不知所云的段落，这一段应该你想写资源的匮乏导致我们不可能去满足每个人的需要，你东扯扯西扯扯，很多句子我都看不懂你要写什么？呵呵，这个样子可不行啊，要想突破gre作文这一关，这个水平会差很远的）

  At the same time, some individual education to graduate students or persons not only want to obtain knowledge but also to do further research in science is necessary. Similar with arts, researchers in science also need to be creative, patient and have unique views of problems. These abilities are hardly taught in the lessons to pubilc. A graduate student who studies with a qualified professor will be instructed in both what his (or her) research in and how he (or she) research. The suitable attitude to research enlightenes the way to success, rather than the knowledge you have. （这段应该和上一段合一下是不是好些，而且如果你不合的话，索性就把上一段去了，把这一段展开，效果会更好的。）

  In sum, I hold that facing different learners, education should be designed to meet the individual or not.（结尾不好，草草收尾给人一种虎头蛇尾的感觉，更何况你还没有虎头。（纵然看起来象呵呵）以上是我的一点小小看法，有不足之处还希望大家多多交流，共同进步。呵呵）

荧惑UID: 2280559

拍得好, 我根据你的意见做了一些修改~感觉好多了

荧惑UID: 2280559

Issue 51
Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.

经IloveMorgan指正后修改～

Should education be designed to meet the needs and the interests of every different student? In my opinion, in some special aspects as music and literature, education should be designed to meet individual needs. However, in other aspects, there is no need to specify the education for different persons in common knowledge.

Admittedly, in art area, it will be effective if education meets individual personality. The purpose of education is to develope a successful person. And in arts, the respect to the great person is not from what they mastered in common, but what they created in unique.  In other word, the more unique, the more possibility to successful.  As an example, the Dutch painter Van Gogh left school in his sixteen and self-taught as an artist survived so many difficulties, finally his painting brought record prices at auctions. It is hardly to believe that the painting could be so special if he has a ordinary education background. Not all the artists have to be struggled to be a master. But in arts, the education which does not face to the learner’s own characteristic will kill creative genius of artist. Because, in painting, music or literature, success is not a continuer of the past learning, but a breakthrough of the existing knowledge.

While in other fields as natural science or social science, Beginners should be taught to some basic knowledge in common. “If I have seen further it is by standing on the shoulders of giants”, as Issac Newton said, the development of science is based on some basic principles which are accepted to all. It is unrealistic that a person masters maths does not know the principle of Newton and Leibniz, a person is familiar with physics hardly recongizes theory of relative in physics and a person successed in biology have never learned theory of evolution. One of the functions of the education in science, different from arts, is to provide the basic knowledge to these fields and the basic knowledge is all the same. in every country with every languages. Consequently there is no need providing a personal education in for beginners in science fields.

Another reason why I claim that spicify the education is. Education with the same content will be easy to judge whether a student is suitable to have further study. Since education resource is limited, to select the fittest the study to the best education is significant It is necessary for high-level education to have a fairly, operable standard to distinguish the suitable students from others. It is hardly to image that students with different education background master in unquine subjects can be ranked in one standard.

At the same time, individual education to graduate students, the persons not only want to obtain knowledge but also do further research in science, is necessary. Similar with arts, high-level researchers in science also need to be creative, patient and have unique views of problems. These abilities are hardly trained in the lessons in common. While a student who studies with a qualified professor will be instructed in both what his (or her) research in and how he (or she) research. This object of this kind education is to develope a research style wich matches the researcher's own characters. The  suitable attitude to research enlightens the way to success, rather than the knowledge itself.

In sum, I hold that facing different learners, education should be designed to meet the individual or not.

yangxq1001UID: 203663

楼主的例子举得很好啊,请教一下平时是怎么积累素材的?

但是感觉有些段落有点跑题,另外就是全文的主线拎不出来.

荧惑UID: 2280559

汗,没怎么积累...都是动脑筋临时想的...