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题目：ARGUMENT171 - The following appeared in a memo from the marketing director of Bargain Brand Cereals.

"One year ago we introduced our first product, 'Bargain Brand' breakfast cereal. Our very low prices quickly drew many customers away from the top-selling cereal companies. Although the companies producing the top brands have since tried to compete with us by lowering their prices, and although several plan to introduce their own budget brands, not once have we needed to raise our prices to continue making a profit. Given our success selling cereal, Bargain Brand should now expand its business and begin marketing other low-priced food products as quickly as possible."
字数：353          用时：2:04:01          日期：2007-3-5

This argument relies on a series of unproven assumptions, which together undermine its conclusion that Bargain Brand (BB) should expand its business and begin marketing other low-priced food products immediately. One such assumption is that all things remain unchanged compare with one year ago. The mere fact that they introduced a successful budget band BB one year ago can hardly suffice to supply that they will also introduce other low-priced food products successfully. For the memo says, top brands are lowering their prices and budget brands might be introduced by other companies, these all will impede upon BB's business. Thus, I would need to know whether the condition of competition suit to introduce new budget brands now before I could accept or reject the director's proposal.

Even assuming that BB's success is due to low price, why other budget brands not have the same success, are there other factors such as beautiful packing, good taste, attractive advertisement play an important role in BB's success. Besides, whether BB will make a more sagging profit than before by raising its price. Without ruling out these reasons why BB is popular, the director cannot convince me that budget brands will still be accepted by most customers.

Even if it is right to introduce a new budget brand of breakfast cereal, it is unfair to assume that other budget food will be successful. For example fried food,
it must be very unadvisable to begin marketing it , since cereal's popular is due to the more and more grave problem of corpulence. It is also possible that breakfast cereal is just fit modern life of busy work which don't apply to other delicious food of low price. Therefore, before I could agree with the proposal, I would need to examine the advantage between cereal and the new food.

In sum, the argument relies on what might amount to a poor analogy between BB introduced one year ago and other new budget brands, as well as a sweeping generalization about budget brands' success. As a result, without the additional information indicated above, I find the argument unconvincing at best.

虽然是照着葫芦画的，还是用了很久，要努力哦！

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arguement171 [AW狂人社]第一次作业simahui


题目：ARGUMENT171 - The following appeared in a memo from the marketing director of Bargain Brand Cereals.

"One year ago we introduced our first product, 'Bargain Brand' breakfast cereal. Our very low prices quickly drew many customers away from the top-selling cereal companies. Although the companies producing the top brands have since tried to compete with us by lowering their prices, and although several plan to introduce their own budget brands, not once have we needed to raise our prices to continue making a profit. Given our success selling cereal, Bargain Brand should now expand its business and begin marketing other low-priced food products as quickly as possible."
字数：353          用时：2:04:01          日期：2007-3-5

This argument relies on a series of unproven assumptions, which together undermine its conclusion that Bargain Brand (BB) should expand its business and begin marketing other low-priced food products immediately. One such assumption is that all things remain unchanged compare with one year ago. The mere fact that they introduced a successful budget band BB one year ago can hardly suffice to supply that they will also introduce other low-priced food products successfully. For the memo says, top brands are lowering their prices and budget brands might be introduced by other companies, these all will impede upon BB's business. Thus, I would need to know whether the condition of competition suit to introduce new budget brands now before I could accept or reject the director's proposal.

Even assuming that BB's success is due to low price, why other budget brands not have the same success, are there other factors such as beautiful packing, good taste, attractive advertisement play an important role in BB's success. Besides, whether BB will make a more sagging profit than before by raising its price. Without ruling out these reasons why BB is popular, the director cannot convince me that budget brands will still be accepted by most customers.

Even if it is right to introduce a new budget brand of breakfast cereal, it is unfair to assume that other budget food will be successful. For example fried food,
it must be very unadvisable to begin marketing it , since cereal's popular is due to the more and more grave problem of corpulence. It is also possible that breakfast cereal is just fit modern life of busy work which don't apply to other delicious food of low price. Therefore, before I could agree with the proposal, I would need to examine the advantage between cereal and the new food.

In sum, the argument relies on what might amount to a poor analogy between BB introduced one year ago and other new budget brands, as well as a sweeping generalization about budget brands' success. As a result, without the additional information indicated above, I find the argument unconvincing at best.


评;我觉得你的开头听特别的,不是经典的那种方式, 挺有个性的.
    整篇使用"even if "把各个论点依次引出,觉得挺不错的. 基本没看到语法错误.
   总体感觉比issue 写的好.

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谢拍！写的太久了·