argument228 [aw狂人社]第三次作业 simahui

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题目：ARGUMENT228 - The following appeared in a newsletter from a political organization.

"In order to promote economic growth in the city, city residents should vote 'yes' on the state government's proposal to build a new expressway linking the outlying suburbs directly to the city center. A direct link to the city center will enable downtown businesses to receive deliveries more frequently, so that downtown retailers will no longer run out of stock and city manufacturers will not be affected by shortages of materials. Booming businesses will attract qualified workers from all over the state, workers who will be able to take advantage of the new expressway to commute to work in our city. In addition to these advantages, hundreds of workers will be employed to build the expressway, further stimulating the local economy!"
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This argument is not cogent because it is relies on several unproven assumptions and many important factors are failed to take in to account. One assumption is that after the new expressway was built, downtown businesses will receive deliveries more frequently. A direct link to the city center can save time of the transport from suburbs to downtown place; it is not equal to in a week downtown businesses will receive more times than before. It is likely that for the advantage of new expressway, they can use a larger truck to deliver; therefore twice a week is adequate while it is no less than four times before. It is also likely that customers who buy things in downtown supermarket now trends to shop in suburbs, because they can get home in time before suburb supermarket closed which is attributed to the convenience of new expressway, so, the downtown supermarkets no more need as many goods as before. Moreover whether downtown retailers run out of stock depend on a lot of factors, such as the predicting of markets, the management of storage. If they make an opposite trends of future markets, obviously, stock will be run out of again.

Even if the expressway does bring frequently deliveries, there is no clear evidence to conclude that no shortage will boom the city's economy. Only might the arguer ensure that retailers can supply sufficient goods for customers and manufacturers do not need to wait for materials. But it is not the cogent reason that customer will patronize frequently or manufacturers will boost their profits. Maybe there is a more famous manufacturer in suburb and clients are more convenience to buy its products now, so the downtown manufacturers receive less order forms. Therefore the downtown businesses might be baffled.

In addition, it is hastily to claim that hundreds of jobs supplied by the new expressway project will further stimulating the local economy. Admittedly, the large project will supply a great number of jobs, at the same time, and add to the tax burden on the local residents. A deficit problem of most family might lead to unwilling to consume, ultimately cause an economic stagnant trend. I cannot agree with the arguer without ruling out the expressway expense problem.

In conclusion, the arguer needs to supply more evidence that expressway will benefit on local retailers and manufactories and clear evidence that the expense of the expressway project will not brake the existed economic system.

simahuiUID: 2208751

自己感觉第一段写偏了，在frequently上面用了太多文字，qualified worker这里没有进行攻击。大家在给挑挑毛病吧