迟到的四次作业汇总-transcend 小组

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第一次作业
Argument 147 and 17 提纲：

Argument 17:
一，        作者在论述中称有80%的respondent对EZ是满意的，这个调查结果本身是有问题的，不具有代表性。
二，        回收垃圾的次数并不等于服务的质量，并不是说回收次数多就一定让人满意，作者没有考虑到其他影响人们满意度的原因。
三，        EZ新购车辆也不能说明市委就一定要选择EZ，作者没有说EZ为什么购买新车辆，缺乏这个论据，很有可能是因为EZ的设备很老化了，需要更新，所以不得不去购置新设备。



Argument 147:
一，        作者犯了以偏概全的错误，公司面对10-25岁的青少年群体展开调查，这个群体并不能代表10-25以外的群体是否喜欢such video game，调查的展开缺乏随机抽样的迹象，不具代表性。
二，        即便作者可以证明以上结论，他声称对10-25岁人群大力推广，but no evidence to support that players,10-25 years old, will also prefer such video game.
三，        即便作者都可以证明以上的结论，但他忽视了影响 company turn a profit的other factors, such as after service , price of such game,等等，他Without weighing revenue against expense. so,结论下得太早。

第二次作业
Argument 2 and 51:
Argument2 我正好以前练过，所以就直接贴全文了啊，帮忙看看，才学着写，感觉不行。。。

题目：ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."
字数：445          用时：不限时          日期：2007-2-16

In this argument, the conclusion is approbated by the author is that the residents in Deerhaven Acres community also adopt a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting in order to raise property values in Dwwrhaven Acres. To support this recommendation, He cites the fact that another community named Brookville adopt these restrictions seven year ago, finally, the average value of their house has raised by 300%.On the basis of this line of reasoning, He infers that if communities of Deerhaven Acres adopt the same polity, value of their house will as well as increase triple. Careful examination of this supporting evidence, however, reveals that it lends little credible support to the author's claim.

First of all, the author cites the evidence occurred seven years ago do not necessarily indicate that the condition of these days. When sample are used to make general claims about a particular group, the sample should be close enough in time to the generation the are used to support, So that historical changes will not invalidate the generalization. Thus, the strength of author's claim of the property values depends on an analysis about historical changes that the author does not provide.

Moreover, average property values increase triple in Brookville is little indicate the same instance would occur in Deerhaven Acres. It is possible that the Brookville's measure would not suffice to ensure similar success elsewhere---due to the sort of factors mentioned above that might have contributed to the Brookville's success but would not come into play in other cities. Lacking such evidence, I cannot accept the author's conclusion that if Deerhaven Acres' residents adopt the same measures as Brookville’s, the property values in Deerhaven Acres will be raised.

Last but not least, even if the author can substantiate the foregoing assumptions, the author's assertion that property values in Deerhaven Acres will be raised is still unwarranted. the author overlooks the other possibility that one or more factors other than same treatment or the same proclivity were instead responsible for increased value. Perhaps depend on people's taste or booming economy or increase value land and so on. If so, this fact would seriously weaken the author's claim that community adopt a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting in order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres

In sum, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To bolster this recommendation, the author must provides clear evidence that the requirement of person nowadays and the land condition of Deerhaven Acres. To better assess the argument, I also need to know the trend of fashion in Deerhaven Acres. Only in this way, can the argument be more thorough and convincing.

Argument 51:
First, 调查只对two group展开研究，不具代表性，样本太小。
Second,调查对两组病人的具体没有详细说明，也许存在个体差异，比如性别，年龄等。
Third, 即便作者可以证明以上假设，但服用抗生素是适合严重肌肉损伤的病人，而不是all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain.

题外话：我觉得这篇Argument有点答非所问的感觉，开始说是怀疑肌肉扭伤妨碍患者的康复，结论确实说应该用抗生素辅助治疗。还有第2组服用sugar pills，病人以为是服用了抗生素，结果康复周期没有明显缩短，这说明个什么啊？我不知道怎么去批判它，大家发表下自己的意见啊！~~~~~反正这篇文章我没大懂是啥意思，呵呵。

第三次作业
Argument 47 and 140:

Argument 47:
一，        作者犯了非此即彼的错误，认为不是火山爆发就是行星撞地球，难说还有其他原因造成地球气温的下降。
二，        历史记录没有提到强闪光并不能代表就一定不是行星撞击地球导致的温度下降，前面也说了那个时期的历史记录很少被保存下来，也许是因为在历史的变迁中记录遗失等。
三，        记录提到与火山爆发一致的a loud boom,并不能证明就一定是火山爆发，没有提到有目击者，只从声音就断定这是火山爆发是草率的。

Argument 140：
一，        作者称她的班级是全校最大的班级就代表她很受欢迎，这是没有根据的，也许全校就一个botany班，学生没有其他选择只能进她的班级，也许其他有更多人数，只是被分成了更多的班等。
二，        作者没有证据证明论据所说的那样Thomas给学校带来了超过自己底薪的研究经费就代表她有能力，也许其他人带来的研究捐助更多，缺少这样的证据，作者说Thomas有teaching and research ability is unwarranted.
三，        即便作者可以证明以上假设是成立的，他忽略了其他影响教授留校的因素，比如住房问题，个人发展等，也许其他学校给的salary更高，光靠提高10000元和提升并不能达到作者的目的。


第四次作业
Argument 65 and 117

Argument 65:
一，        Evidence 中的new stores 的销售情况不具有代表性，它的时效性存在问题，因为它是新店，它的销售情况在一定程度上不能反映进口cheeses的销售情况，应该再观察一段时间再作定论。
二，        调查的对象是对cheeses of the world magazine 的订阅者，这个调查对象范围太小，没有说明除了这些人群以外的购买者的意见，不具代表性。
三，        即便作者能证明以上结论，他也不能说increase profit 的方法就是减少stocking, 他忽略的其他影响profit的factors，比如其他商品的销售情况等。


Argument 117:
这篇作文正好我练过，所以就不写提纲了，直接贴全文了啊！~~~谢谢


题目：ARGUMENT117 - The following is a memo from the business manager of Valu-Mart stores.

"Over 70 percent of the respondents to a recent survey reported that they are required to take more work home with them from the workplace than they were in the past. Since Valu-Mart has not seen impressive sales in its office-supply departments in the past, we should take advantage of this work-at-home trend by increasing at all Valu-Mart stores the stock of home office machines such as printers, small copy machines, paper shredders, and fax machines. We will also increase stock of office supplies such as paper, pens, and staplers. With these changes, our office-supply departments will become the most profitable component of our stores."
字数：509          用时：不 限时        日期：2007-2-26

In this argument, the conclusion is approbated by the author that Valu-Mart (VM) company would increase their stock of office supplies such as paper, pens and home office machines such as printer, copy machine and shredders and so on in order to improve their profits. To support this recommendation, he cites a survey report that over 70% of the respondents are required to take work in home more than the past period; he also cites a fact that VM has not seen markedly sales in its office-supply department in the past. On the basis of this line of reasoning, the author infers that VM will turn a profit in its office-supply department if it adopts the author's advice. Examination of this supporting evidence, however, reveals that it lends little credible support to the author's claim.

First of all, 70 percent respondents do not necessarily indicate that all people as a group also take more work home than they were in the past. From the survey quote in the argument, however, we find no sign of such procedures for random sampling and have good reason to doubt if the sample is representative enough to reflect the general condition of all workers as a whole, Lacking such evidence, it entirely possible that there are only 50 people participate the survey, the 70% respondents is not representative, thus, the author claims that VM ought to take advantage of this work-at-home trend to turn a profit is unwarranted.

Moreover, even if the author can substantiate the people are more busy than the past, it is little indication that such people surely purchase the home office machine by themselves, there is no evidence to support that all or most of them need the office machine such as printer or copy machine when they work, Lacking such evidence, perhaps when workers want to print or copy paper, they accomplished it in the office, they only complete their work on the computer in home, or perhaps their works are not need office machine at all, If this is the case, the recommendation acquision would not serve VM' s goal, let alone turn a profit depend on office-supply department.

Last but not least, even if the author can justify the foregoing assumption, he also overlooks the possibility that one or more factors other than increase stock of office machine at all VM stores were instead due to achievement of company. For instance, perhaps company's repute, people's attitude to its after service, the quality of its machines and other myriad factors would affect its achievement. These facts would seriously weaken the author's claim that if the office-supply department of VM sell office machine, it will become the most profitable component of their stores.

In sum, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To make it logical acceptable, he must provide clear evidence that the way of the survey was conduced and the number of people working in home and they really need office machine. To better assess the recommendation, I would need to know some concrete condition about the VM Company, Only in this way, Can the argument be more thorough and convincing.





题目：ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
字数：664          用时：不限时          日期：2007-3-8

As for education, is an important part of the country, the quality of education system of a country is directly indicate the synthetical power of the country, I agree the author that education would be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each students, then perhaps more effective than apply other ways. Nevertheless, a contrary view would reveal a fallacy that education undue freedom be designed to meet students’ needs and interests; we must not allow the occurrence of such fact. Otherwise, education will squander resource of country even retard the development of society.

The first reason for sustain author’s claim that in order to promote students’ academic performance and morale, the education sometimes must be designed to meet students’ needs and interests. There is a sentence to describe its correctness as “interests are the best teacher in the world”. Its mean that one person only interesting in doing something, and then he will do his best to do it, the result—always unexpected. A good instance to support it is Edison. Edison, is an inventor and chemist who is very stupid and his family is quite poor in his childhood so as to he discontinue his studying after a short period of elementary school life. But he is very interesting in chemistry experiment.It is precisely this interesting, he finally become a famous chemist and inventor in the world. Another example is experience of a scientist named Charles Darwin whose grandfather and father are doctors in his boyhood and they are anticipate he become an eminent doctor when he grow up. Nevertheless, Darwin dislikes the physic but showing strong interests and incomparable gift for natural science and finally become a famous scientist who publishes the book named《Darwinism》resounded through the world. So, cater for students’ interest plays a role in effectiveness of education. Design of education ignores to cultivate students’ interests and needs, I think it is failing.


However, Education is designed to meet the individual interests and needs ought to have a limitation. Unduly cater for students’ hobby and needs would bring us opposites effectiveness. If everything is designed only cater for ours hobbies and needs, and then it will create unbalance of distribution of society, just imagine what would happened if everyone like to participate the job which need shorter period and not so toilsome and have a better future comparatively but there is no body to join in the job which less salary and worse environment and so on.. if this is the case, it must impede the development of society. It must bring some serious social environment—such as resource waste, the unbalance of finance expense, labor force is overbalance. Thus, the design of education only on basis of some limitation, after this to meet individual interests and needs, it must be truly effective.


Last, how to logical design the education not only meets to individual interests and needs but also do not excessive cater for demand of students is become a very important problem. When the government constitute the policy of education, education design would reinforce the establishment of basal subjects in order to make most of the students can take a job on some basal positions which the country demanded. It is everybody’s obligation, In addition, on the basis of these measures, also develop the individual interests and try to best to satisfy their needs in order to cultivate the talents who have capacity to develop science and discovery. These talents ought to have high leader ability and strong interesting on their subjects. Only in this way, integrate limitation and encouragement, the education will be truly effective when it is design to meet individual interests and needs.

In sum, nowadays is a complex social as a group, education becoming a non-overlook problem, if expert intend to make it more effective when it is designed, they must remember the principle as a thing turns into its opposite if pushed too far(物极必反,不会写), then the goal of education can show its transcend functions.


其他三篇issue我想看看范文摸索下套路再写 这样写太痛苦了 而且写到后面我已经不知道在写什么了 想到什么就写什么,感觉很失败了 ......明天交上第四次作业的issue吧.

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看了你最后一篇issue，你的问题比较严重（ sorry to say this）。
建议：从如何写完整一个句子入手，基本语法要牢记在心。
         尽量用有把握的词。
希望你的下一篇能更好。:handshake

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别把句式搞得太复杂，一方面漏洞百出，一方面别人也不容易理解，多写简单句~:loveliness: 加油！