快要考了，红肉那篇，感觉要吐了，高手来给我点指导吧

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感觉思路越写越乱，都要吐了，高手们来看看给我点指导吧，多谢了。。。。:vomit:


题目：ARGUMENT142 - The article entitled 'Eating Iron' in last month's issue of Eating for Health reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease. Further, it is well established that there is a link between large amounts of red meat in the diet and heart disease, and red meat is high in iron. On the basis of the study and the well-established link between red meat and heart disease, we can conclude that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.
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Lacking of adequate evidence and convincing deduction, the argument is in hasty of making the conclusion that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease.
First, the study given in the argument has no guarantee.  The argument provides a article entitled 'Eating Iron' reported that high levels of iron in the diet could lead to an increased risk of heart disease without no details about the situation about the article's quality, we have to doubt the authenticity of it, and the reliability of the study, perhaps it is a hast conclusion from only a initial experience.
What's more, even we concede the study is of no problem, the continue evidence that so-called well established is insufficient. a link between red meat and heart disease only can prove there must be something can lead to or impelled the deterioration heart disease, and what the first study told us is that high levels of iron is collected in the diet which lacks in the second, as a common sense, after the red meat cooked , the factors become uncertain, it might be the case that an unhealthy cook way like fried lead to the new factor which causes the heart disease, moreover, we eat many kinds of meat and vegetables in one meal, we cannot ensure the iron is killer or only one to heart disease,  even in red meat, perhaps there is another metallic element like zinc, or calcium which also have the effects.

Last, the arguer made a false deduction , even if the two correlations are well-established, we still cannot  deduce that the arguer’s conclusion.
Moreover, the conclusion lacks one condition that is in the diet.
限时没写完，如果这样写i
一个是让步承认铁导致，也可能是别的食物中的铁
二个是直接否认不一定是铁导致的，因为别打得食物中可能含有别的物质对心脏产生的危害更严重
可以么。。。

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