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先说审题的问题
长久就看到有人在争论这道题目到底是
单干 v.s. 合作
还是
个性 v.s. 共性
我个人倾向于前一种,并且认为后一种属于偏题
recognize the benefits of individuality
personal economic success requires conformity
按第二种理解翻译过来,承认个性的利益,个人经济成功需要共性.明显觉得不太通顺,有悖常识.
承认个人的利益这个理解显然没问题,
individuality一个常用意思就是个人
对于conformity
刚才又去查了一下韦氏
1: correspondence in form, manager, or character
2: an act or instance of conforming
3: action in accordance with some specified standard or authority
理解成遵从权威规则,引申为合作,之于引申为共性,个人认为完全没有问题.
理解为合作是引申了conformity的意思的过程,理解为共性是引申了conformity的结果.
In an era marked by greatly advanced science and technology, participants of business field gradually are aware of the tendency that they confront competitions every day. (这句话对于主题有用么?从这句看不出你要支持哪个方面) There appears certain powerful product of the same field, certain eminent competitors with more comprehensive knowledge, etc. There is no doubt that in order that all the participating members would survive and thrive, their personal individuality is of so great importance. Meanwhile, no one can deny the fact that conformity sounds to be more indispensable to guarantee their personal economic success. (给出平衡观念.段首两句话太罗唆.)
First and foremost, in nowadays competitive world,(拗口,换次序) essential assessment (不明白非要加个assessment干什么) of individuality is consistently regarded as more and more necessary. Without the unique individuality, how can we imagine the dull market be fraught with monotonous products? (如果没有独特的特性,我们该怎么想象愚蠢的市场会对大量的产品不满.实在没看懂你要说什么) Certainly unimaginable at the mere mention of(我知道错,但是就想把at the mere mention给留着,嘿). (留着我还是看不懂...) A famous fable in Ancient Chinese history, that the shrewd business woman grandma Huang, managed to sell all her watermelon in the summer. There were numerous businessmen and large amounts of melons there, and doubtlessly there aroused certain question that what was her strategy? Simple! Due to her hard and careful daily irrigation and sterilization, her watermelon was much sweeter and delicious (后一个没有写成比较级) than others'. And obviously the sweetness is the remarkable individuality of her melons while the other melons can not offer such a quality. (例子极其失败.首先老美根本不知道黄婆是谁,你要阐释清楚得花掉巨大的篇幅;其次认为'甜'是特质这一点极其荒谬.只能说黄婆的西瓜比别人的甜,程度差别,这一点居然归结到了类型的差别,不能接受.黄婆的瓜是甜的,别人的瓜都是没有味道的?大家都是甜,只能说黄婆的更甜.同样都拥有甜这个属性.再次重申,只是程度差别.) Individuality of such a simple quality could promise the owner so much treasures, not to mention that in today's more brutal and competitive world. Without it, competitors are bound to stumble in the market. (你想说产品必须要有特性才能被市场认同.不过首先段首部分论证就晦涩不清,后面的例子也只能说明质量更好的产品会获胜.和特性无关.)
While it is true that one of the means to guarantee success is individuality, in contrast, for personal economic activity is included in the broader financial environment, a much more concern, conformity, should be taken into account. (漂亮的ts,提出conformity) To students who are familiar with the story of business woman Huang, they can promptly point out that actually she lied to boost her product in order to sell all her melons. (你觉得ets的阅卷官有可能读懂么?) Undoubtedly, when the next summer came, guests who had once cheated by Huang, would never buy her melons and simultaneously would admonish others to avoid to do a transaction with her. (似乎在讲诚信经商的问题) The useful individuality seems to lose its function, but in fact, it was Huang who did not comply with certain policies pertaining to the economic activities. (明白了.你把conformity直接理解成为遵循规章的意思.细想觉得也可行.) During the economic activities, every rational member would rather follow regulations no matter they are demanded by the government or by the sense of conscience. It is widely acknowledged that during the purchasing process, once a businessman violates the market’s criteria, he or she would be doomed to be eliminated from the market sooner or later. (前面都在讲遵守规章,in addition后面想讲讲合作.把conformity两个意思都写了.看上去反而觉得这一段非常乱) In addition, due to more sophisticated financial atmosphere, single businessman would not afford to lead his or her company on their own. They would employ considerable amounts of employees. Therefore, there is no denying that the nice and harmony relationship between the boss and the employees also plays vital roles for achieving the business future prosperity. Once the boss is bereft of respect in the company, besides a more competitive condition to put up with, he or she would unquestionably be beset by such a dilemma that all their employees betrayed them, which would inevitably end their economic success. (整个在讲老板要跟雇员搞好关系.conformity无论怎么理解也跟这个无关啊.)
Therefore, based on the two paragraphs discussed above, it is apparent to conclude that both individuality and conformity are important and meaningful. Moreover, it is more helpful to realize that individuality and conformity does not conflict with each other, contrarily, they can work together wonderfully and smoothly. Turn back to the example of Huang, (同上,老美看不懂) as long as she knows the importance of obeying to the principles of a healthy market, (到这里对于conformity的定义又变成了遵守健康市场的原则.) she would be prone to exert herself to plant her melon more carefully, and communicates with her once competitors to share the experience of how to plant sweeter melons. Eventually, all the former competitors would be guaranteed their overall success of their business.
To sum up, as far as the individuality and conformity are concerned in today's competitive world, any wise and preeminent businessman would be eager to utilize both of these qualities and will look forward to their future prosperity confidently.
看了一半
越看越晕
等会儿再来看
如果还是晕就先睡一觉再看
lz的语言功底很好
不过觉得这篇文章可能要3-了
凌乱
很可惜
看完了
觉得要3-了
字数是很多
语言也不错
不过还是把功夫多下在思路上面吧
写的清楚一点
觉得你对conformity的理解非常混乱
几种观念糅杂在一起
后面完全就不知道你想说什么了
这篇文章死在了conformity上面
批得比较狠
见谅
[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-3-25 03:56 编辑 ] |
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