Issu210【07-10G Superstar大帖】7.21 by Huaxinluobo

huaxinluoboUID: 2326780

Do people in today’s society not have freedom of choosing their career based on natural interest and talent, as the speaker asserts? Initially I tend to agree with it for my own empirical experiences, but after reflection I find the claim problematic in some aspects: in many circumstances people are still free to choose career, and unlike the speaker’s implication, freedom of choosing one’s career is now always beneficial to both individuals and society.

At first blush, pragmatic concerns have a greater influence on people’s choice of future career, especially students that are already in or about to attending collages and universities. There several reasons that can explain this. In a society where commercial success and material are put so much emphasis as ours, for many individuals, a high income are sometimes necessary for a happy life. We are facing more temptation than ever before, new technology does not only improve our living condition, but also provides us more allurements. We are always be surrounded by ads of new clothes, bigger house, advanced electronic products, and faster cars. So, it is reasonable for anyone to looking forward to higher payment and better job to meet one’s needs. Another reason may lies in the high tuition fro university and collage education. Graduates need to get more lucrative job to pay for their fees in school. So, the speaker’s claim holds merit to some extent.

However, after scrutiny I think pragmatic considerations are in many case not the determining factor for one to choose career, even to those whose job is easy to get and highly paid. For example, today’s IT industry is enjoying a rapid growth and income in the industry is higher than most endeavors. So, as the speaker asserts, those who want to enter the industry may make their choice based on considerations like salary, ease of getting a job and so forth. But it is not the case. Many of employees in the industry, especially those most competent ones, are not drawn by money but instead, by their interests. It is a well known fact that many students in school show interest in computer and pursue fro a career in IT industry for interest more than material. In most cases, the freedom of choosing a career is not eliminated but only restricted, by which I mean most job hunter make their choices on the balance of personal interest and pragmatic concerns.

There is another thing I need to point out: lacking of total freedom in choosing career is not always detrimental, but in contrary, beneficial to both individuals and society. For example, boys in high schools usually show interest in sports while girls interested in acting or art, and consequently they may dream about being a famous star in sports or entertainments. Without total freedom in choosing future career, or in other words, without restriction from pragmatic considerations, youngsters may blindly file in into the commercial world of sports and entertainment. However, unfortunately, the limited market in the fields do not demand a large amount of stars and after years many youngster may begin to find them wasting time while some endeavors in society such as engineering, scientific research may run lack of talents, which is both detrimental to society and individuals.

To sum up, I can only partially agree with the speaker that pragmatic concerns restricts our freedom in choosing career but it goes too far to conclude that hardly can anyone choose career freely and in some circumstance I think lacking of absolute freedom is beneficial and necessary.

laura001UID: 2295927

"Most people choose a career on the basis of such pragmatic  considerations as the needs of the economy, the relative ease of finding a  job, and the salary they can expect to make. Hardly anyone is free to  choose a career based on his or her natural talents or interest in a  particular kind of work."


Do people in today’s society not have freedom of choosing their career based on natural interest and talent, as the speaker asserts? Initially I tend to agree with it for my own empirical experiences,(你说根据你的经验,我还以为你要举个自己例子或什么,可是后面也没有细说,就一个个人经验,太泛了.建议别这么写) but after reflection I find the claim problematic in some aspects: in many circumstances people are still free to choose career, and unlike the speaker’s implication, freedom of choosing one’s career is now always beneficial to both individuals and society.

At first blush, pragmatic concerns have a greater influence on people’s choice of future career, especially students that are already in or about to attending collages and universities. There several reasons that can explain this. In a society where commercial success and material are put so much emphasis as ours, for many individuals, a high income are sometimes necessary for a happy life. We are facing more temptation than ever before, new technology does not only improve our living condition, but also provides us more allurements. We are always be surrounded by ads of new clothes, bigger house, advanced electronic products, and faster cars. So, it is reasonable for anyone to looking forward to higher payment and better job to meet one’s needs. Another reason may lies (不加S)in the high tuition fro (错字,后面就不挑错字了,自己WORD里检查了)university and collage education. Graduates need to get more lucrative job to pay for their fees in school. So, the speaker’s claim holds merit to some extent. 这段主要讲为什么大家会考虑实际的因素

However, after scrutiny I think pragmatic considerations are in many case not the determining factor for one to choose career, (能不能直接把影响的其他因素直接说出来,不要让读者自己猜测)even to those whose job is easy to get and highly paid. For example, today’s IT industry is enjoying a rapid growth and income in the industry is higher than most endeavors. So, as the speaker asserts, those who want to enter the industry may make their choice based on considerations like salary, ease of getting a job and so forth. But it is not the case. Many of(不要OF) employees in the industry, especially those most competent ones, are not drawn by money but instead, by their interests. (看到这里才发现影响的其他因素有哪些)It is a well known fact that many students in school show interest in computer and pursue fro a career in IT industry for interest more than material. In most cases, the freedom of choosing a career is not eliminated but only restricted, by which I mean most job hunter make their choices on the balance of personal interest and pragmatic concerns.

There is another thing I need to point out: lacking of total freedom in choosing career is not always detrimental, but in contrary, beneficial to both individuals and society.(这个文章不是要你觉得人们这样做好不好,你可以把这段改成是根据自己兴趣选工作的坏处) For example, boys in high schools usually show interest in sports while girls interested in acting or art, and consequently they may dream about being a famous star in sports or entertainments. Without total freedom in choosing future career, or in other words, without restriction from pragmatic considerations, youngsters may blindly file in into the commercial world of sports and entertainment. However, unfortunately, the limited market in the fields do not demand a large amount of stars and after years many youngster may begin to find them wasting time while some endeavors in society such as engineering, scientific research may run lack of talents, which is both detrimental to society and individuals.

To sum up, I can only partially agree with the speaker that pragmatic concerns restricts our freedom in choosing career but it goes too far to conclude that hardly can anyone choose career freely and in some circumstance I think lacking of absolute freedom is beneficial and necessary.


总结:
1,把文章放到WORD里面就会发现些错字.语法上没有细抠.就只讲对这文章的感受了哦.
2,觉得你文章在写的时候,有点偏到讲找工作是不是自由这个层面来了.
3  你的提纲是1)人民为什么会考虑实际的因素多; 2) 考虑实际这方面不是决定因素; 3)人们有足够自由选择行业不好
不知道我有没有理解错你文章的提纲? 感觉和题目不是很扣紧,有点散漫. BODY3 我觉得与文章关系不太大.
你文章可以就根据实际和个人兴趣来写, 根据自己兴趣找工作的好处,坏处; 根据实际找工作的好处,坏处.

个人意见仅供参考. 如果方便的话,下次能否附上题目和提纲. 加油哦!

[ 本帖最后由 laura001 于 2007-7-23 02:50 编辑 ]