argument38 [0710G summer] by niuzhist

niuzhistUID: 2363220

TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the
West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to
significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A
study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is
very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for
the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish
can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given
for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid,
a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent
colds and lower absenteeism."
提纲：
1．（论断的前提）即使鱼能防止感冒，但Ichthaid不易可以。
    鱼可以不代表鱼油可以，更不能代表Ichthaid可以，说不定Ichthaid还有副作用。
2．（论据）感冒的人不一定都会去看医生，东西部的环境有差异。
   一次或两次不能代表真正的感冒的次数，东部的地理条件也许本身就不易感冒
3．（论据）旷工的主要原因不一定是感冒
    可能是别的因素的导致的，可能是另一种病，或是旷工因为工作条件危险不想去，
    找借口
WORDS: 516          TIME: 00:39:32          DATE: 2007-7-22 下午 08:08:43
In the author argument ,he comes to conclusion that we should use the
Ichthaid daily, to order to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. To support
his idea, he points out that eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent
colds and the colds are the reason most frequently given for absences .Based
on unfounded evidence and illogical assumption, I am specious of the author's
unconvincing recommendation.
First of all, the number of the people who catch colds does not equal the
number of the people who visit the doctor only once or twice per year. It
is possible that the people who catch cold may not go to see the doctor for
many other factors such as the inconvenient transportation, the high fee of
the medicine and the view that the colds is easily cured by the patients
themselves. It is indeed that the people in nearby East Meria rarely catch
colds, but it does not mean that it is the same case in the West Meria. The
different situations must be taken into account .Perhaps the weather in East
Meria changes rarely and the temperature remains the nearly the same all the
time which results in rare chance of catching colds rather than the rapid
changing of the weather in West Meria. Without ruling out the possibilities
mentioned above, I can not easily be convinced that the author's suggestion
is rational.
Besides, it is hard to say the eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent
colds. There is litter casual relativity between the high fish consumption and
the rare possibility of catching colds.Even if the fish has really a good effect
on preventing colds, we can not come to the conclusion that the fish oil refined
from the fish has the same effect, let alone the Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement
derived from fish oil. There is a chance that the effective ingredients which can
prevent colds has lost in the process of derivation of the Ichthaid. Since the author
do not give a more detailed information about the nutritional supplement, I am not
swayed easily by the author's conclusion that we should recommend the daily use of
Ichthaid.
Thirdly, it is not sure that colds are the reason most frequently given for absences.
The author can not explain the process of getting the data which should be done exactly  
by a survey of the workers and students. It is possible  that the absenteeism is due to
many others problems .Perhaps the workplace is too dangerous to work any more, so the
workers have to make a excuse for absences ,or perhaps another disease attributes  to
the lower absenteeism. Unless the author makes a more particular survey of the cause
of the lower absenteeism, it is hard for me to believe the author's specious view.
To sum up, I can make the conclusion safely that the author's conclusion is unfounded
and illogical .Even though there is a little relation between the colds and the fish ,
I can not  still be convinced by the author's view. In order to make the conclusion more
cogent, the author should give more information about the  
detailed effect of Ichthaid, the real number of people who catch colds in the West Meria
and the cause about the workers' and students' absenteeism。

sunsmile6720UID: 2145643

In the author argument ,he （这里不好直接说他是男的或女的）comes to conclusion that we should use the Ichthaid daily, order省去 to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. To support his idea, he points out that eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds and the colds are the reason most frequently given for absences .Based　on unfounded evidence and illogical assumption, I am specious of the author's
unconvincing recommendation.

First of all, the number of the people who catch colds does not equal the number of the people who visit the doctor only once or twice per year. It is possible that the people who catch cold may not go to see the doctor for many other factors such as the inconvenient transportation, the high fee of the medicine　这个想法好 and the view that the colds is easily cured by the patients themselves. It is indeed that 这里用让步的句式比较好the people in nearby East Meria rarely catch colds, but it does not mean that it is the same case in the West Meria. The
different situations must be taken into account .Perhaps the weather in East Meria changes rarely and the temperature remains the nearly the same all the time which results in rare chance of catching colds rather than the rapid changing of the weather in West Meria. Without ruling out the possibilities mentioned above, I can not easily be convinced that the author's suggestion is rational.

Besides, it is hard to say the eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. There is litter casual relativity （causal relation）between the high fish consumption and the rare possibility of catching colds.Even if the fish has really a good effect on preventing colds, we can not come to the conclusion that the fish oil refined from the fish has the same effect, let alone the Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil. There is a chance that the effective ingredients which can
prevent colds has lost in the process of derivation of the Ichthaid. Since the author do not give a more detailed information about the nutritional supplement, I am not swayed easily by the author's conclusion that we should recommend the daily use of Ichthaid.

Thirdly, it is not sure that colds are the reason most frequently given for absences. The author can not explain the process of getting the data which should be done exactly  by a survey of the workers and students. It is possible  that the absenteeism is due to many others problems .Perhaps the workplace is too dangerous to work any more, so the
workers have to make a excuse for absences ,or perhaps another disease attributes  to the lower absenteeism. Unless the author makes a more particular survey of the cause of the lower absenteeism, it is hard for me to believe the author's specious view.

To sum up, I can make the conclusion safely that the author's conclusion is unfounded and illogical .Even though there is a little relation between the colds and the fish ,I can not  still be convinced by the author's view. In order to make the conclusion more cogent, the author should give more information about the  detailed effect of Ichthaid, the real number of people who catch colds in the West Meria and the cause about the workers' and students' absenteeism。

总体上没有大问题，你的很多想法看了以后让我豁然开朗！很不错，加油，再增加句式的多样性！

schenmobUID: 2329562

In the author argument ,he comes to conclusion that we should use the
Ichthaid daily, to(in) order to prevent colds and lower absenteeism. To support
his idea, he points out that eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent
colds and the colds are the reason(s) most frequently given for absences .Based
on unfounded evidence and illogical assumption, I am specious of the author's
unconvincing recommendation.
First of all, the number of the people who catch colds does not equal the
number of the people who visit the doctor only once or twice per year. It
is possible that the people who catch cold may not go to see the doctor for
many other factors such as the inconvenient transportation, the high fee of
the medicine and the view that the colds is easily cured by the patients
themselves. It is indeed that the people in nearby East Meria rarely catch
colds, but it does not mean that it is the same case in the West Meria. The
different situations must be taken into account .Perhaps the weather in East
Meria changes rarely and the temperature remains the nearly the same all the
time which results in rare chance of catching colds rather than the rapid
changing of the weather in West Meria. Without ruling out the possibilities
mentioned above, I can not easily be convinced that the author's suggestion
is rational.
Besides, it is hard to say the eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent
colds. There is litter casual relativity(relation) between the high fish consumption and
the rare possibility of catching colds.Even if the fish has really a good effect
on preventing colds, we can not come to the conclusion that the fish oil refined
from the fish has the same effect, let alone the Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement
derived from fish oil. There is a chance that the effective ingredients which can
prevent colds has lost in the process of derivation of the Ichthaid. Since the author
do not give a more detailed information about the nutritional supplement, I am not
swayed easily by the author's conclusion that we should recommend the daily use of
Ichthaid.
Thirdly, it is not sure that colds are the reason most frequently given for absences.
The author can not explain the process of getting the data which should be done exactly  
by a survey of the workers and students. It is possible  that the absenteeism is due to
many others problems .Perhaps the workplace is too dangerous to work any more, so the
workers have to make a excuse for absences ,or perhaps another disease attributes  to
the lower absenteeism. Unless the author makes a more particular survey of the cause
of the lower absenteeism, it is hard for me to believe the author's specious view.

To sum up, I can make the conclusion safely that the author's conclusion is unfounded
and illogical .Even though there is a little relation between the colds and the fish ,
I can not  still be convinced by the author's view. In order to make the conclusion more
cogent, the author should give more information about the  
detailed effect of Ichthaid, the real number of people who catch colds in the West Meria
and the cause about the workers' and students' absenteeism。

主要逻辑错误都找出来了 攻击顺序也合理