Issue48 勇往直前小组第五次作业nbta03

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TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

Step into a library, come to the shelves of autobiography,  a chain of famous names are printed on the spine of books in front of you. Innumerable individuals of great character call up our attention when looking back to the history. Partly same as to the speaker's opinion, progress in history is by no means achieved only by the great few. Common people also play a undeniable part in that. However, both of the them push the wheels of history rather than either part.

Admittedly, heroes appears in every era, the maker of most significant events and trends. They make significant contributions to human history, which can never be forgotten, when difficulties lie in the way. It is usually several individuals  that lead us a peaceful life, make the human being surroundings a civilization,  develop a new epoch of history.  For example, George Washington lead the people of America to establish a kingdom of freedom, equality and democracy. Abraham Lincoln wiped off the chains, slavery, on negroes. Martin Luthor King scrambled for the rights, not  being judged by the color of skin but the content of character, for black.  All these great events will not be forgotten by the human, as the achievement of great individuals.

However, the world consists of so many people that several individuals are insufficient to change it. Too much has been emphasized on the famous few when we study history. A bunch of branches will make a fire, while one piece may not. One person's power is limited in face of a group. Without the participation of more common people, whose identities have long been forgotten, lots of miracles of human history could not be achieved and history can hardly advance. Taking the most outstanding man-made miracle, the Great Wall, one of the mere two constructions, which can be seen in the outer space, into account, the Great Wall is considered as the achievement of the Chin Shihhuang, first emperor who unifies the entire China. However, everyone knows that hundreds of thousands of people were gathered to build the miracle for a decade. We can pick up similar  examples everywhere in history. The use of majority of people would never be neglected in history.

As to that a machine never works by a sole motor, without components of bearings, srew, nuts, human history never progress without either of great leaders and common people. Only the combination of the two power makes a great goal realized. The foundation of new China cannot leaves either Chinese people or chairman Mao. Everyone is an essential part of a certain great achievement that could not be treated unfairly.

To sum up, history is shaped by all human being involving great individuals and common people. It is key individuals' visions of future and common majority's great power make history in a significant progress so that neither of them should be overlooked.

提纲：
54"History teaches us only one thing: knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today."
1历史的经验和教训可以帮助我们在以后遇到类似情况的时候提供借鉴和参考，防止范同样的错误，一战二战对于人类环境发展和建设的消极意义
2然而世界是迅速发展着的，不能以过去的眼光来看待未来，未来会有新的标准
3应该吸取历史的精华，结合实际，理性灵活的对待未来


120"So much is new and complex today that looking back for an understanding of the past provides little guidance for living in the present."
类似同上…

221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history."
又是类似


190"As long as people in a society are hungry or out of work or lack the basic skills needed to survive, the use of public resources to support the arts is inappropriate—and, perhaps, even cruel—when one considers all the potential uses of such money."
1在某些时候，艺术让步，首先解决人们的基本生存问题是必要的，人们不可能离开物质而存在
2人的需求不光是物质追求，精神享受也是不可或缺的，艺术作为精神上的追求在人类文明发展中显得同样重要
3艺术可以作为人们精神上的寄托。消除紧张， 增进劳动效率

[ 本帖最后由 nbta03 于 2007-7-25 01:00 编辑 ]

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（加上When we就不会显得很突兀了）Step into a library, come to the shelvesof autobiography（改成历史类书籍更贴切）,  achain of famous names are printed on the spine of books in front of you.（把前面这几句去掉可能显得更简洁明了）Innumerable individuals of great charactercall up our attention when looking back to the history. Partly same as to thespeaker's opinion, progress in history is by no means achieved only by thegreat few. Common people also play a(an) undeniablepart in that(delete). However, both of the(delete) them push the wheels of history ratherthan either part.Admittedly, heroes appears(appear) in every era, the maker of mostsignificant events and trends. They make significant contributions to humanhistory, which can never be forgotten, when difficulties lie in the way. It isusually several individuals that lead us a peaceful life, make the humanbeing surroundings a civilization,  develop a new epoch ofhistory.  For example, George Washington lead the people of America toestablish a kingdom of freedom, equality and democracy. Abraham Lincoln wipedoff the chains, slavery, on negroes. Martin Luthor King scrambled for therights, not  being judged by the color of skin but the content ofcharacter, for black(这种断句有点不规范).  All these great events will not be forgotten by the human,as the achievement of great individuals.However, the world consistsof so many people that several individuals are insufficient to change it. Toomuch has been emphasized on the famous few when we study history. A bunch ofbranches will make a fire, while one piece may not. One person's power islimited in face of a group. Without the participation of more common people,whose identities have long been forgotten, lots of miracles of human historycould not be achieved and history can hardly advance. Taking the mostoutstanding man-made miracle, the Great Wall, one of the mere twoconstructions, which can be seen in the outer space, into account, the GreatWall is considered as the achievement of the Chin Shihhuang, first emperor whounifies the entire China.However, everyone knows that hundreds of thousands of people were gathered tobuild the miracle for a decade. We can pick up similar  exampleseverywhere in history. The use of majority of people would never be neglectedin history.As to that a machine neverworks by a sole motor, without components of bearings, srew, nuts, humanhistory never progress without either of great leaders and common people. Onlythe combination of the two power makes a great goal realized. The foundation ofnew Chinacannot leaves either Chinese people or chairman Mao. Everyone is an essentialpart of a certain great achievement that could not be treated unfairly. To sum up, history is shapedby all human being involving great individuals and common people. It is keyindividuals' visions of future and common majority's great power make historyin a significant progress so that neither of them should be overlooked.
这个题目写偏了，题目说及历史研究过多关注少数人，而忽视了在历史上起决定性作用的群众，你应该在文章的后面部分回到历史研究上来，论证这一观点（赞成或反对）。你只是论证了历史不是由少数人而是由多数人决定的，写偏了。

提纲差不多拉