issue186 [superstar小组] 7.25作业 by Huaxinluobo

huaxinluoboUID: 2326780

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Should practicality be seen as out great idol and be provided with all powers and talents, as the speaker asserts? I tend to disagree. While I concede that practicality have ever increasing significance in modern society, too much emphasis on practicality may be detrimental and at the same time attention should be given to the value of things that are not obviously practical.

Admittedly, in most circumstances, for the interest of both individuals and the whole society, pursuit for practicality is reasonable and demanded. In a society where competition is emphasized so intensively as ours, practicality is usually dispensable for anyone or any organization to survive and thrive. In commercial world, practical consideration serves as the most basic principle. It is impossible for any company or firm to develop new products or provide services without considering about the future market, cost and profitability. Companies who provide products for their own interest are most likely destined to failure. For politicians, pragmatic concerns are also crucial in determining their careers and effectiveness. In many case the primary job of politicians, especially political leaders, is to make balance among different interest groups or to satisfy the demands of general public. Politicians who ignore the pragmatic considerations but emphasize ideal plans are in most times risking his/her career and the future of the nation, which is what those leaders of Soviet Union did. In other fields like arts, sciences, education and so forth, practicality is also a important factor to take into account when making decisions.

However, undue emphasis on practicality is more detrimental to society than beneficial. Look back to history it is not hard to find that many great progress and development in human civilization are just made reality by those plans and considerations that seems ideal. And in today’s world, contrary to the speaker’s claim, things that are not obviously practical still have value. For people in business world, particularly those leaders such as top CEOs, only fulfill the goal of maximizing the profit of companies or satisfying the interest of shareholder are not enough. To make a company or firm be able to survive and thrive both in current world but also in future, leaders of companies need to make ideal thinking and planning that may guide the companies future improvement. For example, putting large amount of money on research and developing products that are absolute not harmful to environment seems impractical, especially in countries where no restrictions are enforced. But for one company future competitiveness and social prestige the input is needed and beneficial although they may seems ideal in a long time.

In the arena of politics, idealism has its position too. Although today’s politicians emphasize pragmatic concerns, we can not forget the fact that many social progress and government change are just made true by those whose view we consider impractical. If Mating, Luther, King abandoned his ideal of a society where blacks and white have equal rights, then blacks may still be forced to seat in the back of bus and have no right to vote. If Gandhi yielded to pragmatic considerations decades ago, India may still be colony of Britain and most kids are born to be low classes. Without those ideas that we consider not obviously practical, the world were not as prosperous as now.

In sum, although the claim that emphasis on practicality has merit to some extent, idealism should not be ignored fro it is still beneficial to today’s world.  

liyi2321UID: 2252012

Should practicality be seen as out great idol and be provided with all powers and talents, as the speaker asserts? I tend to disagree. While I concede that practicality have ever increasing significance in modern society, too much emphasis on practicality may be detrimental and at the same time attention should be given to the value of things that are not obviously practical.

Admittedly, in most circumstances, for the interest of both individuals and the whole society, pursuit for practicality is reasonable and demanded. In a society where competition is emphasized so intensively as ours, practicality is usually dispensable（是不是用错了？indispensable?） for anyone or any organization to survive and thrive. In commercial world, practical consideration serves as the most basic principle. It is impossible for any company or firm to develop new products or provide services without considering about the future market, cost and profitability. Companies who provide products for their own interest are most likely destined to failure. For politicians, pragmatic concerns are also crucial in determining their careers and effectiveness. In many case the primary job of politicians, especially political leaders, is to make balance among different interest groups or to satisfy the demands of general public. Politicians who ignore the pragmatic considerations but emphasize ideal plans are in most times risking his/her career and the future of the nation, which is what those leaders of Soviet Union did. In other fields like arts, sciences, education and so forth, practicality is also a important factor to take into account when making decisions.
（首段让步，承认了实用性在现在社会中的作用，两个例子给的很充实。）
However, undue emphasis on practicality is more detrimental to society than beneficial. Look back to history it is not hard to find that many great progress and development in human civilization are just made reality by those plans and considerations that seems ideal. And in today’s world, contrary to the speaker’s claim, things that are not obviously practical still have value. For people in business world, particularly those leaders such as top CEOs, only fulfill the goal of maximizing the profit of companies or satisfying the interest of shareholder are not enough. To make a company or firm be able to survive and thrive both in current world but also in future, leaders of companies need to make ideal thinking and planning that may guide the companies future improvement. For example, putting large amount of money on research and developing products that are absolute not harmful to environment seems impractical, especially in countries where no restrictions are enforced. But for one company future competitiveness and social prestige the input is needed and beneficial although they may seems ideal in a long time.

In the arena of politics, idealism has its position too. Although today’s politicians emphasize pragmatic concerns, we can not forget the fact that many social progress and government change are just made true by those whose view we consider impractical. If Mating（martin。。）, Luther, King abandoned his ideal of a society where blacks and white have equal rights, then blacks may still be forced to seat in the back of bus and have no right to vote. If Gandhi yielded to pragmatic considerations decades ago, India may still be colony of Britain and most kids are born to be low classes. Without those ideas that we consider not obviously practical, the world were not as prosperous as now.
（论述了过分的关注实用性对社会是弊大于利，举的几个例子都很充实，但是这个主题句涉及个比较关系，我感觉针对于你举的例子，主题句如果写成 关注理想和未来更重要，可能更符合你你这些例子，论证也更严密些，同样也是支持了你的观点。）
In sum, although the claim that emphasis on practicality has merit to some extent, idealism should not be ignored fro it is still beneficial to today’s world.
（结尾有点少，可以适当再深化一下主题。）

整体感觉论证的逻辑关系没有问题，而且论证时举了充分的例子支持，结尾如果能在比较说明一下主题可能就更好了。

desirermimiUID: 2108321

Should practicality be seen as out great idol and be provided with all powers and talents, as the speaker asserts? I tend to disagree. While I concede that practicality have ever increasing significance in modern society, too much emphasis on practicality may be detrimental and at the same time attention should be given to the value of things that are not obviously practical. [开头已经形成风格，不错。可以尝试多换些词来创新此提问回答式的开头。]

Admittedly, in most circumstances, for the interest of both individuals and the whole society, pursuit for practicality is reasonable and demanded. In a society where competition is emphasized so intensively as ours, practicality is usually dispensable for anyone or any organization to survive and thrive. [这句话说，“在像我们这样一个竞争被极度强调的社会，对于个人和组织生存来说，实用性是可有可无的。”。是否应该是否定？即不是“可有可无的”？]In commercial world, practical consideration serves as the most basic principle. It is impossible for any company or firm to develop new products or provide services without considering about the future market, cost and profitability. Companies who provide products for their own interest are most likely[be destined to是一个词组，而be likely to 也是一个词组，所以这个句改为are most likely to be destined to failure会比较好吧？否则两个副词，一个修饰前面的动词一个修饰后面么？] destined to failure.[从商业转向政治，中间有个过度词会比较好] For politicians, pragmatic concerns are also crucial in determining their careers and effectiveness. In many case the primary job of politicians, especially political leaders, is to make balance among different interest groups or to satisfy the demands of general public. Politicians who ignore the pragmatic considerations but emphasize ideal plans are in most times risking his/her career and the future of the nation, which is what those leaders of Soviet Union did. In other fields like arts, sciences, education and so forth, practicality is also a important factor to take into account when making decisions.[最后这句话可以不要，因为并没展开论述，或者稍微提带后在最后对全段来个总结。]

However, undue emphasis on practicality is more detrimental to society than beneficial. Look back to history it is not hard to find that many great progress and development in human civilization are just made reality by those plans and considerations that seems ideal. And in today’s world, contrary to the speaker’s claim, things that are not obviously practical still have value. For people in business world, particularly those leaders such as top CEOs, only fulfill the goal of maximizing the profit of companies or satisfying the interest of shareholder are not enough. To make a company or firm be able to survive and thrive both in current world but also in future, leaders of companies need to make ideal thinking and planning that may guide the companies future improvement. For example, putting large amount of money on research and developing products that are absolute not harmful to environment seems impractical, especially in countries where no restrictions are enforced. But for one company future competitiveness and social prestige the input is needed and beneficial although they may seems ideal in a long time.

In the arena of politics, idealism has its position too. Although today’s politicians emphasize pragmatic concerns, we can not forget the fact that many social progress and government change are just made true by those whose view we consider impractical. If Mating, Luther, King abandoned his ideal of a society where blacks and white have equal rights, then blacks may still be forced to seat in the back of bus and have no right to vote. If Gandhi yielded to pragmatic considerations decades ago, India may still be colony of Britain and most kids are born to be low classes. Without those ideas that we consider not obviously practical, the world were not as prosperous as now.[这一段与段二举的政治例子有重复，可以把上面的例子换掉，一起放到这段来单独论述政治。否则有些混乱]
In sum, although the claim that emphasis on practicality has merit to some extent, idealism should not be ignored fro it is still beneficial to today’s world.  [结尾应长些。]

[小结：分别从商业、历史和政治来破题与阐述，思路清晰，论证也较为严密。
行文流畅，建议，在长句中适当穿插短句。
加油！限时作文，很不错！继续加油！]