Argument140 【0710G-挑战极限小组大帖】我的第十一篇ARGU

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT140 - The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."
WORDS: 435          TIME: 00:51:23          DATE: 2007-7-27 0:52:31

This argument is well presented, but not thoroughly well reasoned. The author recommanded that the professor should receive a salary raise and a promotion to avoid her leaving for another college. The reason why Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University seems logical and reasonble at first, whereas, has several flaws.

First and foremost, the presumption author proposed to us is not able to be established convincingly. The author failed to make me convinced that Professor Thomas is a popular teacher among students,although her class was the largestest at the uiniversity. There may be some other alternatives including the fact that botany is the major lesson of most student at the university or this class ought to be taken necessarily.

On the other hand, it is mentioned in the argument that she brought more money in research grants than her salary in the last two years. However, this proof, having nothing to do with her teaching and research abilities, largely undermines the credibility of thie passage. Thus, it is possible that she did not acquire as many research outcomes as the money she invested into the research grants. Consequently, the author is failing to make me convinced about the professor's abilities.

Second, even provided that this professor did possess the teaching and research ability and she is popular with the student. Whereas, ought she to receive what she deserved? There is no infomation about other teachers' performance in this passage provided to us to compare. Perhaps the other teachers' ability and popularity were more distinguished than her. If Professor Thomas reveives a salary raise and promotion, what we shoud do to other qualified teachers.

In addition, the author has failed to consider that a raise and promotion, which may be the major part in our workplace, however, may not be the real reason if she makes up her mind to leave this university. It is apparent that a comfortable work environment as well as friendly interperson relation and a good prestige of the university and so forth are all probable the factor determining professors' leave. Accordingly, the author is too hasty to make the conclusion that without a raise and promotion the professor would leave.

In brief, the argument does not serve reasonable as it should be. To better improve the passage, the author needs to provide more information about Professor Thomas's performance which can demonstrate her teaching and research ability for being qualified with the Department Chairperson. And besides, before any final decisions are made about this professor's raise and promotion, other professors' situations are also should be investigated to compare.

[ 本帖最后由 scarf83 于 2007-7-27 00:55 编辑 ]

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This argument is well presented, but not thoroughly well reasoned. The author recommanded(recommended) that the professor should receive a salary raise and a promotion to avoid her leaving for another college. The reason why Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University seems logical and reasonble(reasonable) at first, whereas, has several flaws.

First and foremost, the presumption author proposed to us is not able to be established convincingly. The author failed to make me convinced that Professor Thomas is a popular teacher among students,although her class was the largestest(largest) at the uiniversity.(university) There may be some other alternatives including the fact that botany is the major lesson of most student at the university or this class ought to be taken necessarily.

On the other hand, it is mentioned in the argument that she brought more money in research grants than her salary in the last two years. However, this proof, having nothing to do with her teaching and research abilities, largely undermines the credibility of thie(this) passage.（为什么无关的原因没写出来） Thus, it is possible that she did not acquire as many research outcomes as the money she invested into the research grants. Consequently, the author is failing to make me convinced about the professor's abilities.

Second, even provided that this professor did possess the teaching and research ability and she is popular with the student. Whereas, ought she to receive what she deserved(这个词有待商榷，既然是“应得的”，就不应该怀疑了，换成what the recommendation suggests可能好些)? There is no infomation(information) about other teachers' performance in this passage provided to us to compare. Perhaps the other teachers' ability and popularity were more distinguished than her. If Professor Thomas reveives(receives) a salary raise and promotion, what we shoud(should) do to other qualified teachers.

In addition, the author has failed to consider that a raise and promotion, which may be the major part in our workplace, however, may not be the real reason(加薪和升职不是她离开的原因而是她留下的原因，这句话没写好) if she makes up her mind to leave this university. It is apparent that a comfortable work environment as well as friendly interperson(interpersonal) relation and a good prestige of the university and so forth are all probable the factor(复数？) determining professors' leave. Accordingly, the author is too hasty to make the conclusion that without a raise and promotion the professor would leave.

In brief, the argument does not serve reasonable as it should be. To better improve the passage, the author needs to provide more information about Professor Thomas's performance which can demonstrate her teaching and research ability for being qualified with the Department Chairperson. And besides, before any final decisions are made about this professor's raise and promotion, other professors' situations are also should be investigated to compare.

基本的要素都涵盖了

[ 本帖最后由 SavileRow 于 2007-8-14 18:44 编辑 ]