Argument65 [0710G ＋U Aug小组]第15次作业

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The author draws a conclusion that the cheese store should discontinue stocking varieties of imported cheeses instead of stocking domestic cheeses. To support his conclusion, the author indicates that the five domestic cheeses were best-selling at their newest store, and a survey about cheeses says the increasing preference for domestic cheese. In addition, the author asserts that the company expenses will be reduced by the way of stocking domestic cheeses. However, the argument suffers several fallacies, which renders it unacceptable.

To begin with, the author commits a hasty generalization fallacy. The author just indicates that at their newest store, the best-selling cheeses are domestic. We cannot infer that at the other store, domestic cheeses are still best-selling cheeses. For example, although at newest store, domestic cheeses are popular, which may because the residents of that area prefer the domestic cheeses, or may be domestic cheeses in a low price; if the imported cheeses are more popular at other old stores, and it can take more profit for us, then, we cannot consider that we should concentrate on the domestic cheeses.

Secondly, the survey provided by the author is too vague, and we cannot consider it as the evidence to prove the domestic cheeses is more popular than imported cheeses. The author only asserts that the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates the preference for domestic cheeses are increasing. However, how many subscribers take the survey? Can the date of survey represent the attitude of all residents of the country? Furthermore, even though we make an assumption that the result of the survey is valid, we still cannot regard it as a decisive condition to orient the cheese stores’ direction of market.

Thirdly, the author considers that only stocking and selling domestic cheeses can reduce the company expenses and improve the profits, which is unconvincing. As the author points out, limiting inventory is a effective way to reduce company expenses; however, only stocking domestic cheeses and discontinue stocking varieties of imported cheeses will make the merchandise of the company very simplex, which may lead a result that we will lost some clients. After all, the author does not prove the domestic cheeses are the most popular cheese in the country, and no one is willing to buy the imported cheeses.

In sum, the argument is unreasonable as it stands. To strengthen the argument, the author has to provide more evidences to prove that the domestic cheese is really popular at both new stores and old stores; proving the survey from magazine is valid and proper for the store is also necessary. To better evaluate the argument, the author should convince us that the market of the imported cheeses can be given up, which will not harm the company’s profit.

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The author draws a conclusion that the cheese store should discontinue stocking varieties of imported cheeses instead of(这里可不是instead of的关系。作者说只留国产的) stocking domestic cheeses. To support his conclusion, the author indicates that the five domestic cheeses were best-selling at their newest store, and a survey about cheeses says（这个词不好，用show，point out，claim试试） the increasing preference for domestic cheese. In addition, the author asserts that the company expenses will be reduced by the way of stocking domestic cheeses. However, the argument suffers several fallacies, which renders it unacceptable.

To begin with, the author commits a hasty generalization fallacy. The author just indicates that at their newest store, the best-selling cheeses are domestic. We cannot infer that at the other stores, domestic cheeses are still best-selling cheeses. For example, although at newest store, domestic cheeses are popular, which may because the residents of that area prefer the domestic cheeses, or may be domestic cheeses（感觉奇怪，还是说perhaps...may be in a low price顺些） in a low price; if the imported cheeses are more popular at other old stores, and it can take more profit for us, then, we cannot consider that we（都应该是他们，不是我们。arg里面通篇都可以而且应该没有第一人称的。） should concentrate on the domestic cheeses.

Secondly, the survey provided by the author is too vague, and we cannot consider it as the evidence to prove the domestic cheeses is more popular than imported cheeses. The author only asserts that the survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates the preference for domestic cheeses are（is 。主语是preference） increasing. However, how many subscribers take the survey? Can the date（data？） of survey represent the attitude of all residents of the country? Furthermore, even though we make an assumption that the result of the survey is valid, we still cannot regard it as a decisive condition to orient the cheese stores’ direction of market（我认为这个意见不说也罢，你提出 就算承认survey有效，我们也不能用来决策，可是一点分析都没有~这个段就这么完了！还不如不说这个，加个结束句呢。我记得在一个资料上看过，说写作很忌讳在一段里有2个意思，所以，furthermore的时候，还是不要另立观点比较好。）.

Thirdly, the author considers that only stocking and selling domestic cheeses can reduce the company expenses and improve the profits, which is unconvincing. As the author points out, limiting inventory is a effective way to reduce company expenses; however, only stocking domestic cheeses and discontinue stocking varieties of imported cheeses will make the merchandise of the company very simplex, which may lead a result that we will lost some clients. After all, the author does not prove the domestic cheeses are the most popular cheese in the country, and no one is willing to buy the imported cheeses（这里还是要总结一下，把你2个支持句连起来，且能直接对应上你的段首句）.

In sum, the argument is unreasonable as it stands.（我还是觉得这句说成...is not reasonable as it stands 才对） To strengthen the argument, the author has to provide more evidences to prove that the domestic cheese is really popular at both new stores and old stores; proving the survey from magazine is valid and proper for the store is also necessary. To better evaluate the argument, the author should convince us that the market of the imported cheeses can be given up, which will not harm the company’s profit.（总结段不错！）