argument17 kb911第三次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT17 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Walnut Grove town newspaper.

"Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ-which, like ABC, currently has a fleet of 20 trucks-has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80 percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's performance."
WORDS: 361          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2007-8-4 16:44:09

The speaker asserts that the Walnut Grove's town council should switch from ABC contract to trash collection services to EZ Disposal with the some reasons he provides, but I don't think the reasons is enough to support the assumption.
At first place, the speaker recommends that we should choose the EZ because EZ collects trash twice a week while ABC collects once. But the speaker does not provide the times of the town needs to collect trashes, may be one time is enough. And the speaker only notes the times but doesn't tell us the quality of the collection. And perhaps the EZ doesn't collect the trashes cleanly but ABC get clearly all the trashes so ABC makes everyone fell happy and reliable.
The fact that EZ have more trucks does not support the speaker well. Because the speaker does not tell us how many trucks we need in the town, maybe there is enough to service the town, and the speaker doesn't provide the evidence that this trucks are plan to used in the town, perhaps EZ was a so large company so it will use more car to other town, the really trucks in Walnut Grove is less than ABC.
Finally, the results of the survey does make us the recommendation should be accepted. First, the statement doesn't provide the number of people take part in the survey and whether the people can represent the whole town's person. Maybe just a little number of people who work for the EZ Company take part in the survey. And maybe just the person who used the service of EZ joined in the survey. At the same time, the speaker does not provide a similar survey of ABC, perhaps the percent of the satisfied will be high than 80 percent.
In sum, as the reasons given by the statement, we can’t the same conclusion as the speaker. May be the ABC provides more satisfied service and the number of trucks doesn't make us believe that we should choose the EZ rather than ABC. To get the conclusion, we need more information that the survey is justifiable and the services provided by EZ are better than ABC.


提纲
A21
First of all, the fact that the alpaca overcoat has not been offered does not mean that the sales will be well
In the second place, there is no evidence that the customers will pay the alpaca overcoat for high price.
Finally, even if the customers will pay the alpaca overcoat for high price, there are no sufficient evidence that the company will get more profit

A199
First of all, the author provides no assurances that the members in the survey are representative.
In the second place, the author’s conclusion that people dining in a group are less likely to feel personally responsible for leaving an adequate or generous tip

A 174
First of all, the author provides no evidence that the survey is on which the argument depends is statistically reliable.
In the second place, there is no sufficient evidence to support that keeping the college all-female will improve morale among students.
Finally, the author can make me convince that the alumni would not support the college financially if the school do not keep the tradition

A 216
First of all, the fact that the housing costs have fallen in last year and the estate tax lower than other area can not support the conclusion well.
In the second place, there is no evidence that the promise made by the mayor will turn to the fact.
In the third place, even is the promise can be practiced , there is insufficient evidence that the retire should choose the town
Finally, the number of the doctor is large do not means the medical service will be better.

A 137
First of all, there is no sufficient evidence that reason for the people don’t play on the river is the water is not clean
In the second place, the plan about the river might can not to be the fact in future.
Finally, even if the river will clean and the people play in the river will more, it does not necessary that the publicly owned lands will be improvement.


[ 本帖最后由 speakless 于 2007-8-22 11:30 编辑 ]

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"Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ-which, like ABC, currently has a fleet of 20 trucks-has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80 percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's performance."
WORDS: 361          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2007-8-4 16:44:09

The speaker asserts that the Walnut Grove's town council （不要用缩写！ Keep it formal!） should switch from ABC contract to trash collection services to EZ Disposal with the some reasons he provides （这个我真的是confused了,试着改一下switch the contract with ABC trash collection services to EZ Disposal with some reasons he provides）, but I don't think the reasons is enough to support the assumption.
At first place, the speaker recommends that we should choose the (去掉the) EZ because EZ collects trash twice a week while ABC collects once. But the speaker does not provide the times of (这个有点太chinglish了吧，改成 how many times) the town needs to collect  (不是town自己collect啊，改成被动吧)trashes, may be one time is enough. And the speaker only notes the times but doesn't tell us the quality of the collection. And （连这么近用and好像不大好哟~换个moreover吧）perhaps the EZ doesn't collect the trashes cleanly （把cleanly改成thoroughly, 另外小哥，trash 是不可数的） but ABC get clearly all the trashes so ABC makes everyone fell happy and reliable （这句实在是太搞笑了呵呵~为什么它打扫干净了人们就快乐了？不大说的过去吧？）.
The fact that EZ have more trucks does not support the speaker（不是speaker,是他的point） well. Because the speaker does not tell us how many trucks we need （我们不要truck，是town自己need, 在主语不知道改用什么好的时候就用被动吧！）in the town, maybe there is enough to service the town, and the speaker doesn't provide the evidence that this trucks （主谓一致啊！） are plan（ed） to (be) used in the town, perhaps EZ was a so large company so (so large a company that) it will use more car to other town(s), the really(real) trucks in Walnut Grove is less than ABC(The number of trucks that will be applied to WG by EZ is actually less than that of ABC.).
Finally, the results of the survey do make us (do not pervasive enough to make us believe that) the recommendation should be accepted. First, the statement doesn't provide the number of people take part in the survey and whether the people can represent the whole town's person. Maybe just a little number (limited number) of people who work for the EZ Company take part in the survey. And maybe just the person who used (have used) the service of EZ joined in the survey. At the same time, the speaker does not provide a similar survey of ABC, perhaps the percent (percentage) of the satisfied will be high (higher) than 80 percent.
In sum, as the reasons given by the statement, we can’t (reach) the same conclusion as the speaker. May be (Maybe) the ABC provides more satisfied service and the number of trucks doesn't make us believe that we should choose the EZ rather than ABC. To get the conclusion, we need more information that the survey is justifiable and the services provided by EZ are better than ABC.

给你的建议： 1. 注意单复数，比较级，词性这些基本问题，为这些丢分实在太冤了！
             2. 不知道是不是因为你是计时写的缘故，我咋觉得sentence fragment 多的不像话呢？如果平时写都是这个情况的话建议你下点句子来背。
             3. 你的表达有很多时候是中式的，可以看的出来思维也完全是中式的，还是要多读读英文的东西啊！可以先从21世纪报看起，这个还是有些地方蛮好看的。

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不知道为什么没有颜色，只能凑合看了，多包涵了小哥^^

WHSYINGUID: 2310541

很有用…………真的多谢你了
感觉语言始终是个大问题
不过最近已经在慢慢改了
一计时写作就有很多问题出现
尤其是在那个界面的时候
感觉很多问题都看不出来

xiaotunbbUID: 2239241

晓得了~
如果是我应该也不怎么反应的过来呵呵，但是要强迫自己无论怎样都得写完整的句子，加油喽！