issue185[Jet]小组第一次作业

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字数：606        时间：08.1.29.
  The speaker contents scandals overweight the speakers and reformers because it transcends the ways in which speakers or reformers drew public’s attention, I insofar agree according to some specific examples, however, the speaker overstates the priority scandals towards people under some circumstances in which undue skepticism might be counterproductive.
  I will first turn to the word “scandal” which defined to be “the very common thing done by the very uncommon people”, sounds to be as attractive as a golden apple out of one red apple falling off the tree, we all love, eat, laugh, and even choked when we eat, but undeniably a famous person’s love affairs can be print into the front headlines while we are dating with someone we love at a prosperous street when thousands of people around without even a little attention. In this case, scandals around these up-in-the-air people can tick our clock to see some problems that live along with everyone and society yet lack awareness, if you can’t deduce it from daily principles, Monica Lewinsky scandal would be an excellent example, both setting down ex-president Bill Clinton and his secretary which call our great attention on its effect on several aspects, the first concern is about whether it taught teenagers that even the important can lie and get away, why couldn’t they, and that’s the issue of influence of those elite upon the young generation, I think even the scandal has already faded away, this problem will also be exposed to be a big social problems. The second is the problem of the irresponsibility of nowadays’ media. Totally ignoring the results, they manage to dig deep into every angle of affairs just for the sake of money and interests which could bring a lot trouble to the civilization of our society. What’s more, if you are responsible enough to stand in front of the public to make declaration, I am afraid you will be turned out of the doors for the“Facts speak louder than words”
  However，scandals are not always omnipotent potion that can drive us to the exact problems that throw thread to our daily lives. Sometimes they only abstract us into a really superficial world in which we care about superstar’s sex scandals or which high-scale woman go to the beauty parlor to change nose or face. I admit that these scandals can add color to our boring routines everyday (but set up a definite word”sometimes”to some people), but to some extent, it can be regard as offensive action that invade their privacy. Besides, scandals are not taking human’s consciousness as the shift，they could happen at any time and any place，so in some circumstances, we can not count on those uncertainties to discovery how serious some sort of problems are, but speakers and reformers can, do you still remember how did Martin Luther King give us the world famous speech “I Have A Dream” that lead to a predominant movement at that very key point? And can you still catch up with every word that Mother Teresa says that change the people’s attitude towards inner ship of human-beings? They are all great speakers, they are all excellent reformers. They all stand out to say something when we really need them, when some social problems have already became tit for tat！
  In sum，what I want to make quite clear is that the only thing that counts in this issue is whether or not we can see or be aware of some problems which have been concealed a long time within society, there is no some sort of priority towards the ways!

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issue185[Jet]小组第一次作业

字数：606        时间：08.1.29.
The speaker contents（content是使满足的意思可以这样使用吗？而且后面要加that!不然就两个动词啦） scandals overweight the speakers and reformers because it transcends the ways in which speakers or reformers drew public’s attention, I insofar agree according to some specific examples, however, the speaker overstates the priority scandals towards people under some circumstances in which undue skepticism might be counterproductive.
I will first turn to the word “scandal” which defined to be “the very common thing done by the very uncommon people”, sounds to be as attractive as a golden apple out of one red apple falling off the tree, （这句不太懂，在我看来的意思是一个金苹果从一个红苹果中掉下树）we all love, eat, laugh, and even choked when we eat, but undeniably a famous person’s love affairs can be print into the front headlines while we are dating with someone we love at a prosperous street when thousands of people around without even a little attention.（语法不太对，我改成paying no attention）In this case, scandals around these up-in-the-air people can tick our clock to see some problems that live along with everyone and the（还是冠词的问题） society yet lack awareness, if you can’t deduce it from daily principles, Monica Lewinsky scandal would be an excellent example, both setting down ex-president Bill Clinton and his secretary which call our great attention on its effect on several aspects, the first concern is about whether it taught teenagers that even the important（important是不是可以形容词做名词用呢？我不确定） can lie and get away, why couldn’t they, and that’s the issue of influence of those elite（elites） upon the young generation, I think even the scandal has already faded away, this problem will also be exposed to be a big social problems（删除a）. The second is the problem of the irresponsibility of nowadays’ media. Totally ignoring the results, they manage to dig deep into every angle of affairs just for the sake of money and interests which could bring a lot （加of） trouble to the civilization of our society. What’s more, if you are responsible enough to stand in front of the public to make declaration, I am afraid you will be turned out of the doors for the“Facts speak louder than words”
However，scandals are not always omnipotent potion that can drive us to the exact problems that throw thread to our daily lives. Sometimes they only abstract us into a really superficial world in which we care about superstar’s（复数比较好，superstars‘） sex scandals or which high-scale woman（这里不应该有which，woman应为women） go to the beauty parlor to change nose or face（their noses or faces）. I admit that these scandals can add color to our boring routines everyday (but set up a definite word”sometimes”to some people), but to some extent, it can be regard as offensive action that invade their privacy. Besides, scandals are not taking human’s consciousness as the shift，they could happen at any time and any place，so in some circumstances, we can not count on those uncertainties to discovery how serious some sort of problems are, but speakers and reformers can, do you still remember how did Martin Luther King give us（语法问题，how Martin Luther King gave us） the world famous speech “I Have A Dream” that lead to a predominant movement at that very key point? And can you still catch up with every word that Mother Teresa says that change the people’s attitude towards inner ship of human-beings? They are all great speakers, they are all excellent reformers. They all stand out to say something when we really need them, when some social problems have already became tit for tat！
In sum，what I want to make quite clear is that the only thing that counts in this issue is whether or not we can see or be aware of some problems which have been concealed a long time within the society, there is no some sort of priority towards the ways!


1.例证很丰富，值得学习
2.有些论述意思表达的不清楚，我觉得头几篇文章先不要太讲究文采还是把内容讲清楚比较好

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谢谢你帮我改的作文哦～

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