Arguement97飞跃 dreams 第三次作业

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97.The following appeared in a memo from the manager of television station KICK.
"A nationwide survey reveals that a sizeable majority of men would like to see additional sports programs on television. After television station WACK increased its sports broadcasts, its share of the television audience in its viewing area almost doubled. To gain a larger audience share in our area, and thus increase company profits, KICK should also revise its broadcast schedule to include more sports coverage."
In this memo, the author believes that KICK will increase company profits by doing as the WACK. WACK’s audience doubled because it increased the sports broadcasts according to a national survey which showed that majority of men would like to see sports programs. In my view, I can not agree what the author holds, because the memo fails to give me more clear evidence to prove the idea.

First of all, the survey is made in the national wide, so the validity of the survey is worthy doubt. It is entirely possible that the survey does not include the KICK company’s area. Additionally, the survey only reports that a sizeable majority of men, but what is the number of men actually? The number is not accurate so that I can not believe that the survey reflects the main men’s willing.

Secondly, the conclusion of author is made by an assumption that the KICK’s area is similar to the WACK’s area. Also this memo lacks evidence to tell me that two areas are at the same condition. There are so many differences between two areas, such as economic , population, climate, and etc. How can  the author guarantee that doing the same thing can have the same effect in two different areas.

Finally, even if KICK do as the WACK can increase their audience, but the profits is not only controlled by the incomes the increasing audiences bring, also by the costs. In order to increase the sports program, the KICK company must do series of actions, for example, make new sports program, buy some sports films or videos, and etc. All of the actions will take a lot of money, and the company is quite possible to fall into finance deficit. The company may not recover from it in a short time not to say get profits.

In sum, the memo fails to persuade me because of so many flaws. If the author want to make the memo more believable, he or she should give me more information about the validity of the national survey, the conditions between the WACK and KICK s’ areas, and the incomes will cover the costs.

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In this memo, the author believes that KICK will increase company profits by doing as the WACK. WACK’s audience doubled because it increased the sports broadcasts according to a national survey which showed that majority of men would like to see sports programs. In my view, I can not agree what the author holds, because the memo fails to give me more clear evidence to prove the idea.
开头陈述+表明观点。

First of all, the survey is made in the national wide, so the validity of the survey is worthy doubt. It is entirely possible that the survey does not include the KICK company’s area. Additionally, the survey only reports that a sizeable majority of men, but what is the number of men actually? The number is not accurate so that I can not believe that the survey reflects the main men’s willing.
这段说的是调查的可信度问题，还可以，就是觉得有些地方可以说得再准确一些~~

Secondly, the conclusion of author is made by an assumption that the KICK’s area is similar to the WACK’s area. Also this memo lacks evidence to tell me that two areas are at the same condition. There are so many differences between two areas, such as economic , population, climate, and etc. How can  the author guarantee that doing the same thing can have the same effect in two different areas.（这是个问句吗？）
本段想指出作者错误的认为了两个公司的条件是一样的。感觉这段说的不是很深入，毕竟这应该是一个很重要的错误在这篇ARGU里，可以更展开的说一说。

Finally, even if KICK do as the WACK can increase their audience, but the profits is not only controlled by the incomes the increasing audiences bring, also by the costs. In order to increase the sports program, the KICK company must do series of actions, for example, make new sports program, buy some sports films or videos, and etc. All of the actions will take a lot of money, and the company is quite possible to fall into finance deficit. The company may not recover from it in a short time not to say get profits.
指出公司为了获得更大利益并不一定只是要提高收视率，但我的观点觉得，作者只是认为提高收视率能提高利益。如果从这个角度来批判这么多。。似乎有点牵强，只是我个人的看法，或许这也是一个新颖的批判点。

In sum, the memo fails to persuade me because of so many flaws. If the author want to make the memo more believable, he or she should give me more information about the validity of the national survey, the conditions between the WACK and KICK s’ areas, and the incomes will cover the costs.
总结
感觉你的ARGU找的问题基本都能找到，但给我的感觉还是有些不够深入，如果能每段再加一两句的分析部分的话，感觉会更加深刻和有说服力的。：）