argument51(Aero小组)

wenwenwen4444UID: 2377774

51.The following appeared in a medical newsletter.
"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some
patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis
has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of
patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle
injuries by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took
antibiotics regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time
was, on average, 40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in
the second group, all being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician,
were given sugar pills, although the patients believed they were taking
antibiotics. Their average recuperation time was not significantly
reduced. Therefore, all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain
would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment."

The author of this medical newsletter recommends that the whole patients diagnosed with muscle strain would be better to take antibiobics during their treatment. To support this recommendation the author pionts out a suspicion of doctors that the secondary infections may impact negtively on the healing after sever musle strain. Furthermore, a study of two groups of patients has proved that suspicion. However, close scruting of this evidence reveals that it lends little credible support for the author's recommendation.

First of all, the argument rests on the assumption that there is nothing distincness between the test group and control grould except the medine providing. Nevertheless the arguer ignores other relevant factors beween the two groups concerning the age, physical condition, the proportion of males and femails and so forth. It is entirely possible that the test group is composed of young pepole about 25 years while the other group contains people about 60 years old. If this is the case, obviously,  people who are more stronger in the test group recuperate quicker and better than people in the control group. Thus, without ruling out the that possibility above, it is difficult to assess the merit of the arguer's recomendation.

In addition, the author fails to eliminate the possibility that maybe the two groups are not in the same stage of the illness. If the people in the control group are more severe than people in the test group, the average recuperation time for test gourp would certainly less than that for the other. In this case, the result of this study would be useless.

Moreover, the different professional background of these two doctors also weaken the reliability of the study. It is likely that patients are treated other method such as rubdown in the test group but not in the control group. Therefore this posibility also make the recommendation dubious.
Finally, the author mistakenly assumes that what is true of individuals in the study which only stand for one small part is also true of the whole patients suffering from muscle strain.

In conclution, the recommendation is simply unconvincing. To convince me that the antibiotics are effective in the treatment of severe patients ill in muscle strain, the author should rule out any factors that would impact the reliability of the study. Even this is the case, it is still unsubstantiated that the antibiotics would be helpful for all the muscle strain patients.                  

[ 本帖最后由 wenwenwen4444 于 2008-2-14 19:54 编辑 ]

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The author of this medical newsletter recommends that the whole patients diagnosed with muscle strain would be better to take antibiotics during their treatment. To support this recommendation the author points out a suspicion of doctors that the secondary infections may impact negtively on the healing after sever musle strain. Furthermore, a study of two groups of patients has proved that suspicion. However, close scruting of this evidence reveals that it lends little credible support for the author's recommendation.（整句模板，容易雷同）First of all, the argument rests on the assumption that there is nothing distincness between the test group and control grould except the medine providing. Nevertheless the arguer ignores other relevant factors beween the two groups concerning the age, physical condition, the proportion of males and femails and so forth. It is entirely possible that the test group is composed of young pepole about 25 years while the other group contains people about 60 years old. If this is the case, obviously,  people who are more stronger in the test group recuperate quicker and better than people in the control group. Thus, without ruling out the that possibility above, it is difficult to assess the merit of the arguer's recomendation.（又是整句模板）In addition, the author fails to eliminate the possibility that maybe the two groups are not in the same stage of the illness. If the people in the control group are more severe than people in the test group, the average recuperation time for test gourp would certainly less than that for the other. In this case, the result of this study would be useless.(这一段也是用来说明调查样本的不可比性，个人觉得与第一段连起来更连贯些)Moreover, the different professional background of these two doctors also weaken the reliability of the study. It is likely that patients are treated (in) other method such as rubdown in the test group but not in the control group. Therefore this posibility also make the recommendation dubious.Finally, the author mistakenly assumes that what is true of individuals in the study which only stand for one small part is also true of the whole patients suffering from muscle strain.(这段又回到了样本上，放在最后显得很孤立)
个人觉得study的例子可以一段表示，紧凑些，反而还有些其他地方可以攻击，比如antibiotics不是唯一的或最好的办法，因为它本身也存在缺陷――副作用，造价高。。。，还有其他解决办法，对肌肉拉伤的病人或者休息就最好拉In conclution, the recommendation is simply unconvincing. To convince me that the antibiotics are effective in the treatment of severe patients ill in muscle strain, the author should rule out any factors that would impact the reliability of the study. Even this is the case, it is still unsubstantiated that the antibiotics would be helpful for all the muscle strain patients.

wenwenwen4444UID: 2377774

第一次用模版，试试看呵，感觉用了它限制了自己要写的东西了，都说不清楚，不用模版嘛自己写又显得不地道。
嗯，逻辑错误还有不少。谢谢呵。明天回拍。

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bigyanUID: 2382427

The author of this medical newsletter recommends that the whole patients diagnosed with muscle strain would be better to take antibiobics during their treatment. To support this recommendation the author pionts out a suspicion of doctors that the secondary infections may impact negtively on the healing after sever musle strain. Furthermore, a study of two groups of patients has proved that suspicion. However, close scruting of this evidence reveals that it lends little credible support for the author's recommendation.First of all, the argument rests on the assumption that there is nothing distincness between the test group and control grould except the medine providing. Nevertheless the arguer ignores other relevant factors beween the two groups concerning the age, physical condition, the proportion of males and femails and so forth. It is entirely possible that the test group is composed of young pepole about 25 years while the other group contains people about 60 years old. If this is the case, obviously,  people who are more stronger in the test group recuperate quicker and better than people in the control group. Thus, without ruling out the that possibility above, it is difficult to assess the merit of the arguer's recomendation.In addition, the author fails to eliminate the possibility that maybe the two groups are not in the same stage of the illness. If the people in the control group are more severe than people in the test group, the average recuperation time for test gourp would certainly less than that for the other. In this case, the result of this study would be useless.Moreover, the different professional background of these two doctors also weaken the reliability of the study. It is likely that patients are treated（加个with） other method such as rubdown in the test group but not in the control group. Therefore this posibility also make the recommendation dubious.Finally, the author mistakenly assumes that what is true of individuals in the study which only stand for one small part is also true of the whole patients suffering from muscle strain.（这段也太短了吧，而且没明白什么意思，可以想办法和并到上面去）In conclution, the recommendation is simply unconvincing. To convince me that the antibiotics are effective in the treatment of severe patients ill in muscle strain, the author should rule out any factors that would impact the reliability of the study. Even this is the case, it is still unsubstantiated that the antibiotics would be helpful for all the muscle strain patients.                  
总的说来没有什么大的问题，模板也很合适！