【火箭小组】第三次作业Issue136

闹闹喵UID: 2500331

我是完全赞成题目的观点的，所以写的没油没盐的:(


We make choices ever since the day we're born. The "having no choice" circumstance is rare, almost doesn't exist. Most of the time, people tend to use it as an excuse for their timidity, hesitation, selfishness, fatuity and other reasons which cannot be talked about aboveboard. However, in my opinion, whether there will be a choice depends on whether you want to make a choice or not.

The most ordinary reason that gives people the illusion of having no choice is probably that they don't realize there's an alternative. Man can easily get blinded and anxious, when being forced to make a decision for issue which is not a certainty, especially without enough observation and analysis of it. Tragedy happened when Lao She, one of Chinese greatest literators who wrote Teahouse and Cat City, ended his life by stepping into the water of Taiping Lake. The tortures brought by the bigots who idolize Chief Mao during the Culture Revolution destroyed him, turned him into an gloomy and desperate old man, so desperate that he saw no faith, no choice but suicide to escape from the Hell called reality. Only if he stay calmed and hospitable would he realize he can choose to live on and live alive again like Ba Jin, famous as he is but more faithful, when the Culture Revolution ended in less than 10 years later. Most of the time, we become hopeless and refuse to take observations from other aspects, and our own experiences block us from making innovations, thus we make ourselves having no choices.  

And even we do have an alternative, we sometimes pretend not to see it，when choosing it means taking more burden, more responses, more hardness which we don't want to bear.  I pick up chemistry—— a science subject, when deciding my major in university. Because both my parents are ordinary workers and we have no special prop, it seems that I have no choice but to study science which can get me a nice job easily after my graduation in such an developing country who show little care about her artists. But the truth is, I do have the alternative to choose my favorite subject——painting, which means the expensive tuition my family has to bear, , the gambler I have to take of can't having a job after graduation, the uncertainty of my talents. Thus I cower and ignore the possibility and claim that I have no choice but to study science.

So it's not that the circumstance of choice is absent, but we make the choice seems like absent. The alternative is always there, but only by gaining knowledge and remaining calm and objective can we find the hidden choices. So don't complain that you can't choose your parents or background, for that's not your decision but your parents, and it is you who choose to be in this world.

chibiUID: 2477825

We make choices ever since the day we're born. The "having no choice" circumstance is rare, almost doesn't exist.(句子挺别扭的) Most of the time, people tend to use it as an excuse for their timidity, hesitation, selfishness, fatuity and other reasons which cannot be talked about aboveboard. However, in my opinion, whether there will be a choice depends on whether you want to make a choice or not.

The most ordinary reason that gives people the illusion of having no choice is probably that they don't realize there's an alternative. Man can easily get blinded and anxious, when being forced to make a decision for issue which is not a certainty, especially without enough observation and analysis of it. Tragedy happened when Lao She, one of Chinese greatest literators who wrote Teahouse and Cat City, ended his life by stepping into the water of Taiping Lake. The tortures brought by the bigots who idolize Chief Mao during the Culture Revolution destroyed him, turned him into an gloomy and desperate old man, so desperate that he saw no faith, no choice but suicide to escape from the Hell called reality. Only if he stay(虚拟) calmed and hospitable would he realize he can choose to live on and live alive again like Ba Jin, famous as he is but more faithful, when the Culture Revolution ended in less than 10 years later. Most of the time, we become hopeless and refuse to take observations from other aspects, and our own experiences block us from making innovations, thus we make ourselves having no choices.  

And even we do have an alternative, we sometimes pretend not to see it，when choosing it means taking more burden, more responses, more hardness which we don't want to bear.  I pick up chemistry—— a science subject, when deciding my major in university. Because both my parents are ordinary workers and we have no special prop, it seems that I have no choice but to study science which can get me a nice job easily after my graduation in such an developing country who show little care about her artists. But the truth is, I do have the alternative to choose my favorite subject——painting, which means the expensive tuition my family has to bear, , the gambler I have to take of can't having a job after graduation, the uncertainty of my talents. Thus I cower and ignore the possibility and claim that I have no choice but to study science.

So it's not that the circumstance of choice is absent, but we make the choice seems like absent. The alternative is always there, but only by gaining knowledge and remaining calm and objective can we find the hidden choices. So don't complain that you can't choose your parents or background, for that's not your decision but your parents, and it is you who choose to be in this world.

总体来说，思路比较清晰。
但是很多地方表达不是很到位，意思不明确。
注意句式的变化，用词不够丰富。
老舍的例子，表达的不是很好。
论述和论据不够支持论点。

[ 本帖最后由 chibi 于 2008-6-18 11:28 编辑 ]

lfj1865UID: 2413050

We make choices ever since the day we're born. The "having no choice" circumstance is rare, almost doesn't exist. Most of the time, people tend to use it as an excuse for their timidity, hesitation, selfishness, fatuity and other reasons which cannot be talked about aboveboard. However, in my opinion, whether there will be a choice depends on whether you want to make a choice or not.

The most ordinary reason that gives people the illusion of having no choice is probably that they don't realize there's an alternative. Man can easily get blinded and anxious, when being forced to make a decision for issue which is not a certainty, especially without enough observation and analysis of it. Tragedy happened when Lao She, one of Chinese greatest literators who wrote Teahouse and Cat City, ended his life by stepping into the water of Taiping Lake. The tortures brought by the bigots who idolize Chief Mao during the Culture Revolution destroyed him, turned him into an gloomy and desperate old man, so desperate that he saw no faith, no choice but suicide to escape from the Hell called reality. Only if he stay calmed and hospitable would he realize he can choose to live on and live alive again like Ba Jin, famous as he is but more faithful, when the Culture Revolution ended in less than 10 years later. Most of the time, we become hopeless and refuse to take observations from other aspects, and our own experiences block us from making innovations, thus we make ourselves having no choices.  

And even we do have an alternative, we sometimes pretend not to see it，when choosing it means taking more burden, more responses, more hardness which we don't want to bear.  I pick up chemistry—— a science subject, when deciding my major in university. Because both my parents are ordinary workers and we have no special prop, it seems that I have no choice but to study science which can get me a nice job easily after my graduation in such an developing country who show little care about her artists. But the truth is, I do have the alternative to choose my favorite subject——painting, which means the expensive tuition my family has to bear, , the gambler I have to take of can't having（have） a job after graduation, the uncertainty of my talents. Thus I cower and ignore the possibility and claim that I have no choice but to study science.

So it's not that the circumstance of choice is absent, but we make the choice seems like absent. The alternative is always there, but only by gaining knowledge and remaining calm and objective can we find the hidden choices. So don't complain that you can't choose your parents or background, for that's not your decision but your parents, and it is you who choose to be in this world.

思路还可以，句子结构也不错。但是很多地方意思很模糊，不清楚。不好意思，给你改晚了


[ 本帖最后由 lfj1865 于 2008-6-21 16:56 编辑 ]