Issue212 【challenge yourself】第三次作业by linyunf

linyunfUID: 2405027

ISSUE212- “If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."


1这个论断对人和社会的发展起了作用。
2有时值得做的是不一定在以后还是worthy的
3当方法不当是会造成其他的后果。



   The speaker suggests that to fulfill a worthy goal any means can be justified and should be brought into action. In my view, this statement is too extreme. It overlooks circumstances under which benefits of the seemingly worthy object cannot be addressed, as well as ignoring the harmful effects of unsuitable methods to the goal.

   The assertion that as long as a goal is worthy we should do our best to achieve it generally plays a great role in the development of individuals and the whole society. For example, although it may be difficult for disabled persons to finish their study and get degree, the previous words spur them to try their best to wipe out all the barriers during the course, thus helping them increase their abilities and make a living as ordinary people. In the society level, the assertion also is important. When the country always suffered from heavy flood which leaded to the deaths of hundreds of people, it may be forced to build a dam to prevent these damages. Once the worthy goal is set, the whole country will use all necessary resources and overcome possible obstacles to protect its citizens at last.

   However, what exactly should be referred to as a good goal will be changed over time. Originally the term may be right. But with the passing of time the benefits that thought to be enjoyed might not be addressed. Take the gold rush as an example, when President James Polk delivered the words that gold was found plenty in northern California, thousands of people thought in exchange for a short period of hardship in California their lives would be changed and they almost rushed there without hesitation. The seemingly worthy goal made them find that every bit in the deposit as distasteful as it was unavoidable. So only a really worthy goal deserves such kinds of devotion and sacrifices.

Another problem with the conclusion is that it ignores other consequences brought out by those means which causes other damages and even impedes the accomplishment of the original goal. Modern society has witnessed many such kinds of damages. The goal of better economic caused polluted air, dying rivers that in turn thwart the further growth. Unstrained extract of crude oil and other fossil energies has leaded to an era of high oil price and inflation of the whole world. More and more evidences alarm us that in order to achieve the long-term goal, our means has to be changed.

  To sum up, the suggestion is too extreme. Efforts to fulfill the worthy goal may be needed at some cases. We still cannot acquiescence the harmful effects in other circumstances.

tangreihanUID: 2499991

The speaker suggests that to fulfill a worthy goal any means can be justified and should be brought into action. In my view, this statement is too extreme. It overlooks circumstances under which benefits of the seemingly worthy object cannot be addressed, as well as ignoring the harmful effects of unsuitable methods to the goal.

   The assertion that as long as a goal is worthy we should do our best to achieve it generally plays a great role in the development of individuals and the whole society. For example, although it may be difficult for disabled persons to finish their study and get degree, the previous words spur them to try their best to wipe out all the barriers during the course, thus helping them increase their abilities(increase ability不知道能不能搭配？) and make a living as ordinary people. In the society level, the assertion also is important. When the country always suffered from heavy flood which leaded to the deaths of hundreds of people, it may be forced to build a dam to prevent these damages. Once the worthy goal is set, the whole country will use all necessary resources and overcome possible obstacles to protect its citizens at last.(佩服，例子几句话就讲明白了）

   However, what exactly should be referred to as a good goal will be changed over time. Originally the term may be right. But with the passing of time the benefits that thought to be enjoyed might not be addressed. Take the gold rush as an example, when President James Polk delivered the words that gold was found plenty in northern California, thousands of people thought in exchange for a short period of hardship in California their lives would be changed and they almost rushed there without hesitation. The seemingly worthy goal made them find that every bit in the deposit as distasteful as it was unavoidable.（好像论点和例子有点貌合神离） So only a really worthy goal deserves such kinds of devotion and sacrifices.

Another problem with the conclusion is that it ignores other consequences brought out by those means which causes other damages and even impedes the accomplishment of the original goal. Modern society has witnessed many such kinds of damages. The goal of better economic caused polluted air, dying rivers that in turn thwart the further growth. Unstrained extract of crude oil and other fossil energies has leaded to an era of high oil price and inflation of the whole world. More and more evidences alarm us that in order to achieve the long-term goal, our means has to be changed.

  To sum up, the suggestion is too extreme. Efforts to fulfill the worthy goal may be needed at some cases. We still cannot acquiescence the harmful effects in other circumstances
表达很清晰阿，赞！

tongdawpUID: 2500696

The speaker suggests that to fulfill a worthy goal any means can be justified and should be brought into action. In my view, this statement is too extreme. It overlooks circumstances under which benefits of the seemingly worthy object cannot be addressed, as well as ignoring the harmful effects of unsuitable methods to the goal.  （这里加一个admittedly好一点） The assertion that as long as a goal is worthy we should do our best to achieve it generally plays a great role in the development of individuals and the whole society. For example, although it may be difficult for disabled persons to finish their study and get degree, the previous words spur them to try their best to wipe out all the barriers during the course, thus helping them increase their abilities and make a living as ordinary people. In the society level, the assertion also is important. When the country always suffered from heavy flood which leaded to the deaths of hundreds of people, it may be forced to build a dam to prevent these damages. Once the worthy goal is set, the whole country will use all necessary resources and overcome possible obstacles to protect its citizens at last.   However, what exactly should be referred to as a good goal will be changed over time. Originally the term may be right. But with the passing of time the benefits that thought to be enjoyed might not be addressed. Take the gold rush as an example, when President James Polk delivered the words that gold was found plenty in northern California, thousands of people thought in exchange for a short period of hardship in California their lives would be changed and they almost rushed there without hesitation. The seemingly worthy goal made them find that every bit in the deposit as distasteful as it was unavoidable. So only a really worthy goal deserves such kinds of devotion and sacrifices.Another problem with the conclusion is that it ignores other consequences brought out by those means which causes other damages and even impedes the accomplishment of the original goal. Modern society has witnessed many such kinds of damages. The goal of better economic caused polluted air, dying rivers that in turn thwart the further growth. Unstrained extract of crude oil and other fossil energies has leaded to an era of high oil price and inflation of the whole world. More and more evidences alarm us that in order to achieve the long-term goal, our means has to be changed.  To sum up, the suggestion is too extreme. Efforts to fulfill the worthy goal may be needed at some cases. We still cannot acquiescence the harmful effects in other circumstances.

整个读下来感觉很顺畅，语言结构都很好，就是字数少了点，只是感觉有点怪怪的，觉得这篇文章总是缺点什么 。
再读第二遍的时候，终于发现问题了，整个文章的论点是什么呢？好像一直没说啊，文章开头只是说这个论断太绝对了，它忽视了什么和什么，这种说法很像argument啊，而且整个文章，除了第二段，都像是argument。注意，issue是立论文，不是驳论文，要提出自己的观点来，然后用几个分论点来支持总的论点，不只是驳斥原论点。

[ 本帖最后由 tongdawp 于 2008-8-3 00:47 编辑 ]