Issue69 【7\8\9\10】作文小组 第十六次作业 8.6

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TOPIC: ISSUE69 - "Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

Today, we are enjoying an unprecedented degree of sophistication in modernization, all of which comes from scientific research and development. Under this circumstance, I find no reasons for government to place any restrictions on research and development of science, for the good of ourselves.

To begin with, scientific research and development is the original impetus of human civilization. With the research of science, we realize the basic principles of the natural environment in which we live. With the development of science, we know ourselves on both physically and mentally. Without scientific research, humans are still praying for harvest every year. Without scientific development, humans still believe that an illness is a kind of punishment made by the God. Therefore, placing no restrictions on scientific research and development is an effective way for the government to shoulder the responsibility of serving the public's interest.

Based on the financial consideration, government may restrict the scientific research and development, the objective of which is uncertain, for it needs a great deal of investment. However, research on science is not an achievement-clear job until the whole proceed is finished. Some researches probably cannot come to a planned result, yet people might still find a lot of exploration during the work. For example, hundred of years, many of researches took great efforts to invent a machine called "impetus motion machine". However, it's proved by a lot of practices and theories that such kind of machine is impossible to be created in the end. Was it a waste of time for people to do research on this unreasonable machine? The answer is negative. During the research, scientists found enormous apparatus that are useful for humans. Therefore, if government place restriction on such scientific research, we will lose a lot of achievements.

Moreover, based on the political consideration, government will possibly place restrictions on international scientific and development. If so, such project as Human Genome Plan which depends on collaboration among biologists from different countries might come to abeyance. As a result, using achievement of the project to treat serious illness of humans will postpone.

Somebody may argue that nuclear weapon, which has a power of destroying the whole world, is also a result of scientific research; the genetic engineering used on human cloning will challenge the traditional standard of human morality and ethics. However, to my point of view, it is a problem based on how we use the achievement of scientific research and development, not the study itself. Nuclear energy used on power generation might fundamentally solve the problem of energy crisis. Applying genetic engineering on treating diseases might bring health to humans. Therefore government should regulate the applications of the results come from scientific research and development rather than placing restrictions on research. After all, making use of science and technology properly benefits not only ourselves but also the earth on which we live.

To sum up, I agree with the speaker’s assertion that should place few restrictions on scientific research and development. However, government should take the responsibility of leading the achievements of scientific research to a right way.

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第二段整体要换掉。学习范文上对于科学研究作用的叙述。

第三段的例证可能不合理。

第四段没充分展开。

第五段的例证太老套。

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TOPIC: ISSUE69 - "Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

Today, we are enjoying an unprecedented degree of sophistication in modernization, all of which comes from scientific research and development. （这句话是说我们正处在超前的丧失天真的现代化下？感觉不对啊）Under this circumstance, I find no reasons for government to place any restrictions on research and development of science, for the good of ourselves.（可能是我第一句没翻译对刨去这一句开头还是不错的）

To begin with, scientific research and development is the original impetus of human civilization. With the research of science, we realize the basic principles of the natural environment in which we live. With the development of science, we know ourselves on both physically and mentally. Without scientific research, humans are still praying for harvest every year. Without scientific development, humans still believe that an illness is a kind of punishment made by the God. Therefore, placing no restrictions on scientific research and development is an effective way（这一段说的是scientific research and development is the original impetus of human civilization强调的是重要性但是这里接的因果确实placing no restrictions is an effective way 我觉得还是需要考虑下的） for the government to shoulder the responsibility of serving the public's interest.

Based on the financial consideration, government may restrict the scientific research and development, the objective of which is uncertain, for it needs a great deal of investment. However, research on science is not an achievement-clear job until the whole proceed is finished. Some researches probably cannot come to a planned result, yet people might still find a lot of exploration during the work. For example, hundred of years, many of researches took great efforts to invent a machine called "impetus motion machine". However, it's proved by a lot of practices and theories that such kind of machine is impossible to be created in the end. Was it a waste of time for people to do research on this unreasonable machine? The answer is negative. During the research, scientists found enormous apparatus that are useful for humans. Therefore, if government place restriction on such scientific research, we will lose a lot of achievements.(我建议可以在首句提炼出中心句仅仅个人意见呵呵还有在论证方面这个例子的准确程度还是需要斟酌一下)

Moreover, based on the political consideration, government will possibly place restrictions on international scientific and development. If so, such project as Human Genome Plan which depends on collaboration among biologists from different countries might come to abeyance. As a result, using achievement of the project to treat serious illness of humans will postpone. （这一段就显得太少了上面一段如此丰富的论证在这里也需要发扬光大啊呵呵还有就是个人感觉提取每段的中心句放在第一句会使你的文章更加的条理清晰）

Somebody may argue that nuclear weapon, which has a power of destroying the whole world, is also a result of scientific research; the genetic engineering used on human cloning will challenge the traditional standard of human morality and ethics. However, to my point of view, it is a problem based on how we use the achievement of scientific research and development, not the study itself. Nuclear energy used on power generation might fundamentally solve the problem of energy crisis. Applying genetic engineering on treating diseases might bring health to humans. Therefore government should regulate the applications of the results come from scientific research and development rather than placing restrictions on research. After all, making use of science and technology properly benefits not only ourselves but also the earth on which we live.（这一段我觉得写的不错虽然你自己觉得例子可能有点老套但是准确的论述有时候比例子更重要Therefore government should regulate the applications of the results come from scientific research and development rather than placing restrictions on research.这句话我会收在我的作文里的嘿嘿··）

To sum up, I agree with the speaker’s assertion that should place few restrictions on scientific research and development. However, government should take the responsibility of leading the achievements of scientific research to a right way.

这个嗯总体来说文章写的不错可是有点我弄不明白你首段写I find no reasons for government to place···但是结尾又写··should place few··是不是有点矛盾了？这只是我自己的感觉有什么问题我们商讨还有就是我觉得本文第三段论述很好但是在中心句思路上还需要提高

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