超越自我小组~issue147 第6次作业

啊拉UID: 2527432

题目：ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
字数：475          用时：00:48:39          日期：2008-8-11 16:31:01

As the whole world begin to know the importance of the globalization, tradition and modernization begin to conflict to each other. People feel exciting and life becomes more convenient because of the modernization, while the modernization also brings tremendous impact to the tradition. But I do believe they are not totally incompatible. So what we should do is to combine them harmoniously, but not only choose between them.

Tradition and modernization are the presentation of social civilization. They are defined as a kind of culture. The cultures can also coexist in the society. As the improvement of the society, those may be the modernization in the history becomes tradition now. For example, we all know the cowboy is represent of the western culture in middle ages, but it becomes a tradition in America: Only a few of them will dress as a cow boy. But it does not mean we choose the modernization: We can still find cowboy in many films, and even a lot of the foreigners cosplay and imitate the cowboy.

So we need to think about it: Why the cowboy can be a kind of fashion hundreds years after it appeared, while it is also a mark of the western culture? I do believe it is not a coincidence: it is a result of culture export. The federal government knows it so it will let the cowboy go to the whole world. And because of the big influence of the western culture, the cowboy is even known by a lot of eastern countries. So people should show their tradition to the whole world, and they will have the chance to let the world understand them and raises the statues of the nation.

When the people choose to show the tradition to the world, it is also becomes a fashion to other countries. Still remember the open ceremony of the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games? It is so splendid and great that even many of the foreigners got big shocks. The first program of the ceremony was a display of traditional Chinese instrument: Fou. And as I know, only a month after the game a lot of countries turn to know Fou and several of them even turn to learn it. Beijing should be proud of the ceremony because it is no longer a display, but also a kind of culture export, and to turn the tradition to the fashion element. So why we need to choose between the tradition and modernization but not try to combine them harmoniously? If we choose to have culture export, we have the chance to combine them harmoniously and let the whole world cares about our tradition.

In sum, tradition and modernization can be coexisting harmoniously, so we should forget the incompatible. What's more, we should export our culture and tradition, so they can be the modernization.

[ 本帖最后由 啊拉 于 2008-8-11 16:47 编辑 ]

liuyanggzUID: 2487660

As the whole world begin to know the importance of the globalization, tradition and modernization begin to conflict to (WITH) each other. People feel exciting(EXCITED) and life becomes more convenient because of the modernization, while the modernization also brings tremendous impact to the tradition. But I do believe they are not totally incompatible. So what we should do is to combine them harmoniously, but not only choose between them.

Tradition and modernization are the presentation of social civilization. They are defined as a kind of culture. The cultures can also coexist in the society. As the improvement of the society, those may be the modernization in the history becomes tradition now. For example, we all know the cowboy is represent of the western culture in middle ages, but it becomes a tradition in America: Only a few of them will dress as a cow boy. But it does not mean we choose the modernization: We can still find cowboy in many films, and even a lot of the foreigners cosplay and imitate the cowboy. (这个例子不错啊）

So we need to think about it: Why the cowboy can be a kind of fashion hundreds years after it appeared, while it is also a mark of the western culture? I do believe it is not a coincidence: it is a result of culture export. The federal government knows it so it will let the cowboy go to the whole world. And because of the big influence of the western culture, the cowboy is even known by a lot of eastern countries. So people should show their tradition to the whole world, and they will have the chance to let the world understand them and raises the statues of the nation.

When the people choose to show the tradition to the world, it is also becomes a fashion to other countries. Still remember the open ceremony of the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games? It is so splendid and great that even many of the foreigners got big（GREAT) shocks. The first program of the ceremony was a display of traditional Chinese instrument: Fou. And as I know, only a month after the game a lot of countries turn to know Fou and several of them even turn to learn it. Beijing should be proud of the ceremony because it is no longer a display, but also a kind of culture export, and to turn the tradition to the fashion element. So why we need to choose between the tradition and modernization but not try to combine them harmoniously? If we choose to have culture export, we have the chance to combine them harmoniously and let the whole world cares about our tradition.

In sum, tradition and modernization can be coexisting harmoniously, so we should forget the incompatible(INCOMPATIBILITY). What's more, we should export our culture and tradition, so they can be the modernization.

COMMENT:
文章中用到的美国牛仔和北京奥运开幕的例子来体现TRADITION 和MODERNIZATION的转化，例子运用的很不错哦～
不过文章中的观点有点单一化，基本上都是围绕“变传统为现代”，两个例子也都是服务这个主题的。所以文章观点略显单薄。文章开头中有提到传统和现代的界定，它们都反映社会文明，这个观点可以得到进一步充实和发展，而不用急于切入传统现代的转化当中。这样文章会显得更加充实。

hermituforestUID: 2354296

As the whole world begin to know the importance of the globalization, tradition and modernization begin to conflict to each other. People feel exciting and life becomes more convenient because of the modernization, while the modernization also brings tremendous impact to the tradition. But I do believe they are not totally incompatible（否定要转移）. So what we should do is to combine them harmoniously, but not only choose between them.

Tradition and modernization are the presentation of social（语义重复，可去掉） civilization. They are defined as a kind of culture. The cultures can also coexist in the society（这里不太明白你的意思。。不过coexist 应该+with，但culture和society显然不是coexist的关系）. As the improvement of the society, those may be the modernization in the history becomes tradition now. For example, we all know the cowboy is represent（俩谓语） of the western culture in middle ages, but it becomes a tradition in America: Only a few of them will dress as a cow boy. But it does not mean we choose the modernization: We can still find cowboy in many films, and even a lot of the foreigners cosplay and imitate the cowboy.

So we need to think about it: Why the cowboy can be a kind of fashion hundreds years after it appeared, while it is also a mark of the western culture? I do believe it is not a coincidence: it is a result of culture export. The federal government knows it so it will let the cowboy go to the whole world. And because of the big influence of the western culture, the cowboy is even known by a lot of eastern countries. So people should show their tradition to the whole world, and they will have the chance to let the world understand them and raises the statues of the nation.

When the people choose to show the tradition to the world, it is also becomes a fashion to other countries. Still remember the open ceremony of the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games? It is so splendid and great that even many of the foreigners got big shocks. The first program of the ceremony was a display of traditional Chinese instrument: Fou. And as I know, only a month after the game a lot of countries turn to know Fou（这个好像不是after a month的事，而是看完开幕式就知道的。。） and several of them even turn to learn it. Beijing should be proud of the ceremony because it is no longer a display, but also a kind of culture export, and to turn the tradition to the fashion element. So why we need to choose between the tradition and modernization but not try to combine them harmoniously? If we choose to have culture export, we have the chance to combine them harmoniously and let the whole world cares about our tradition.

In sum, tradition and modernization can be coexisting harmoniously, so we should forget the incompatible. What's more, we should export our culture and tradition, so they can be the modernization.

一点意见：
1、很高兴狗狗摒弃了模板选择了自由，明显感觉自己的表达语言错误明显减少。
2、奥运的那个例子好棒！！
3、但是我还是要说一点，issue的问题每一个都很复杂，你必须在自己的文章中体现出它的复杂性，而不是只选择一个比较容易的角度来论证。要不然分数不可能高。