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根据大家的批评和建议……着手写了一篇词汇朴实，主题表达相对明确了一些的文章了，而且超时不是很多了……好现象好现象啊……

Some students may argue that their major have nothing to do with science, thus there seems to be no need for them to take any scientific courses. But I have to veto this assertion, since science classes not only help to form logic thinking, as well as a well-reasoned brain, hence it's obviously important for students of all major to take such classes.

Firstly, science classes which are taught in ways of logical deduction help student to learn cause and effect relationship. Unlike the knowledge taught in art or psychology classes, any possible solution of scientific research comes out of reasoning. While the literature and art emphasis on imagination or even insanity which could help to abstract art from reality, science calls for the integration of mass details and reaching for a cogent settlement. When a question arises, the student of art design might be inspired by the bitterness and draw a picture to release the pain, while the student of liberal arts might write a poem or rather report it to the people around, then the student of science may sat down, analyzing the reasons of the problem, listing possible solutions, weighting them then start to clear the tough question up. This weakness of those students who have less access to logical thinking can be strengthened by providing science classes.

Science classes not only can help forming logical method of thinking, but also make student aware of the way this world is functioning. Even though students are not forced to make any findings on their own, they may conclude something which could play as guidance for their lives from these formulas or principles of certain fields. From the three principles of thermodynamics which are taught in basic physic classes, we've learnt without any stimuli, nothing could ever be changed. This could be a miniature of the reality world, without paying any efforts, success won't show up on its own.

Without science education, the youth would probably lack the ability to detect this world, or seek for rational solutions for the variables of life. In so far, I would insist on the stand to instill students the scientific idea regardless of their majors.

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Some students may argue that their major have nothing to do with science, thus there seems to be no need for them to take any scientific courses. But I have to veto this assertion, since science classes not only help to form logic thinking, as well as a well-reasoned brain, hence it's obviously important for students of all major to take such classes.$cG%z(Q&S$Xl z

Firstly, science classes which are taught in ways of logical deduction help student to learn cause and effect relationship.犀利 Unlike the knowledge taught in art or psychology classes, any possible solution of scientific research comes out of reasoning. While the literature and art emphasis on imagination or even insanity which could help to abstract art from reality, science calls for the integration of mass details and reaching for a cogent settlement.(good job) When a question arises, the student of art design might be inspired by the bitterness and draw a picture to release the pain, while the student of liberal arts might write a poem or rather report it to the people around, then the student of science may sat down, analyzing the reasons of the problem, listing possible solutions, weighting them then start to clear the tough question up.--funny, heihei This weakness of those students who have less access to logical thinking can be strengthened by providing science classes. Ac
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Science classes not only can help forming logical method of thinking, but also make student aware of the way that this world is functioning. Even though students are not forced to make any findings on their own, they may conclude something which could play as guidance for their lives from these formulas or principles of certain fields. From the three principles of thermodynamics which are taught in basic physic classes, we've learnt without any stimuli, nothing could ever be changed. This could be a miniature of the reality world, without paying any efforts, success won't show up on its own.H;]XT s
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Without science education, the youth would probably lack the ability to detect this world, or seek for rational solutions for the variables of life. In so far, I would insist on the stand to instill students the scientific idea regardless of their majors.

条理清楚,明确,用词准确,特别是蓝色部分.值得学习啊.写的很不错哦.
不过对第三段感觉例子并没有很好的支撑主题句,或者说主题句The world is functioning好像不是很概括,很有说服力.

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Some students may arguethat their major have nothing to do with science, thus there seems tobe no need for them to take any scientific courses. But I have to vetothis assertion, since science classes not only help to form logicthinking, as well as a well-reasoned brain, hence it's obviouslyimportant for students of all major to take such classes.GE/bM,q
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Firstly, science classeswhich are taught in ways of logical deduction help student to learncause and effect relationship. Unlike the knowledge taught in art orpsychology (心理学不是科学?)classes, any possible solution of scientific research comesout of reasoning. While the literature and art emphasis on imaginationor even insanity which could help to abstract art from reality, sciencecalls for the integration of mass details and reaching for a cogentsettlement. When a question arises, the student of art design might beinspired by the bitterness and draw a picture to release the pain,while the student of liberal arts might write a poem or rather reportit to the people around, then the student of science may sat down,analyzing the reasons of the problem, listing possible solutions,weighting them then start to clear the tough question up. This weaknessof those students who have less access to logical thinking can bestrengthened (主语是weakness,应该overcome)by providing science classes.(这一段前面没有说清楚意思,应早早说明艺术学生的表现解决不了实际问题,最终要靠reason)
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Without science education,the youth would probably lack the ability to detect this world, or seekfor rational solutions for the variables of life. In so far, I wouldinsist on the stand to instill students the scientific idea regardlessof their majors.

我对题目有些疑惑,主体是basic science, 对比物是other major.
那么other major 是指非basic的science和非science呢,还是仅仅指非science?
如果是后者,那么题目就是讨论science的重要性,那么science包括的就多了, 重要性显而易见

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耶？这个想法提的很好啊……写的时候的确感到由于这个定义不明确，好东西多事情都很模糊，不过我感觉我想说的应该基础科学的学习对于一点科学都不接触的文科艺术的学生的影响，这点应该在开头就定义下来，免得后面的论证过于片面。谢谢这个insightful的建议