COMEON作文小组-------9.13作业 Chineselady

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9月13日

Agree or disagree: The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone.

(2007.9.25)

Stress is one of the significant signs that the most of people in modern society have. Even if a student, he/she still has more or less pressure from schools, so it is necessary to learn how to reduce stress, otherwise, too busy lives will lead to some mental disorder. Every one has distinct ways to relax; for most humans, being alone may not be a good method because it will bring feelings of aloneness, which is not available to reduce pressure.

In the first place, being alone can be easy for one to remind that what had happened in working and studying. The experiences humans involved in companies and schools result in different level pressure, from relationship to working environment. Spending time by oneself, especially for females who are sentimental, cannot help reduce it but make it strong. For the reason of that, one would fantasize when being alone from psychologist. Therefore, it is nice to spend time with a couple of friends who can listen to each others' troubles and frustrations. Chatting, singing and having dinner with many people may help forget anything distressful quickly, after that, they will not regard pressure as the burden cannot get rid of. Happy time is one of efficient aspects to reduce stress.

Furthermore, it will bring a new way to relax to spend time with different people even if not good friends, which will not appear being alone. New friends can introduce a fresh hobby that people might not know. For instance, to join in a party with full of old and new friends, through talking and playing games, one can learn something distinct from new friends, a shopping mall offering membership, a modern gymnastics or a cheap but romantic restaurant. Those will become another ways to be relaxed learnt from new friends when spending time with a group of friends.

In conclusion, spending time alone can make pressure strong instead of helping reduce it; therefore being alone is not the best way to be relaxation. From the reasons above, enjoying with friends may be more efficient to set humans free as people can forget the pressure through talking, and also develop new habits from new friends.

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纯粹PF这个ID进来的;d:

可以在CHINESE和LADY之间加个FIRST;d:

chineseladyUID: 2403976

PF是什么？？ FIRST 啊好主意

阿泰UID: 209473

佩服的意思

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没人修改，我来帮你改吧。

Stress is one of the significant signs that the most of people in modern society have. Even if a student(if后面最好接句子，或者用even as a student,不过都感觉这句话不是很好), he/she still has more or less pressure from schools(studies，应该是学业带来的压力，不是学校，中文这样说可以，但英文不行), so it is necessary to learn how to reduce stress, otherwise, too busy lives will lead to some mental disorder. Every one has distinct ways to relax; for most humans, being alone may not be a good method because it will bring feelings of aloneness, which is not available to reduce pressure.（第一段的各句间联系不够紧密）
In the first place, being alone can be easy for one to remind that what（有一个what就可以了） had （had不需要，即使要用也是该用have）happened in working and studying.(这句中心意思不明确，段首句应该阐述份论点) The experiences humans involved in companies and schools result in different level pressure, from relationship to working environment. （relationship和working environment不是pressure啊,这里不能这样用）Spending time by oneself, especially for females who are sentimental, cannot help reduce it but make it strong. For the reason of that, one would fantasize when being alone from psychologist.（from psychologist是什么意思？） Therefore, it is nice to spend time with a couple of friends who can listen to each others' （三个人以上用one another）troubles and frustrations. Chatting, singing and having dinner with many people may help forget anything distressful quickly, after that, they will not regard pressure as the burden cannot get rid of. Happy time is one of efficient aspects to reduce stress.
Furthermore, it will bring a new way to relax and to spend time with different people even if they are not my good friends, which will not appear being alone. New friends can introduce a fresh hobby that people might not know. For instance, to join in a party with full of old and new friends, or（连词不能少） through talking and playing games, one can learn something distinct from new friends, a shopping mall offering membership, a modern gymnastics or a cheap but romantic restaurant(这句话要重新想想，和主句间是什么关系？是不是想和后面联系在一起？那就应该用句号结束前一句：one can learn something distinct from new friends. Or a shopping mall offering membership, a modern gymnastics or a cheap but romantic restaurant will become other ways to be relaxed learnt from new friends when spending time with a group of friends.). Those will become another other ways to be relaxed learnt from new friends when spending time with a group of friends.
In conclusion, spending time alone can make pressure strong instead of helping reduce it; therefore being alone is not the best way to be relaxation. From the reasons above, enjoying with friends may be more efficient to set humans free as people can forget the pressure through talking, and also develop new habits from new friends.

结构清晰，但语法混乱，继续努力。
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chineseladyUID: 2403976

Stress is one of the significant problems /signs (that the most of people)去掉 in modern society have. Even students have presuress from shcools. (if a student, he/she still has more or less pressure from schools,)去掉 so it is necessary to learn how to reduce stress, otherwise, too busy lives will lead to some mental disorder. Every one has distinct ways to relax; for most humans, being alone may not be a good method because it will bring feelings of aloneness, which is not helpful in (available to) reducing pressure.

In the first place, if one is alone, it is easy to remember the stressful situations that happened at work or schools. /being alone can be easy for one to remind that what had happened in working and studying. Different people have different stresses and will react to stress differently./ The experiences humans involved in companies and schools result in different level pressure, from relationship to working environment. Spending time by oneself, especially for females who are sentimental, cannot help reduce it but make it strong.( For the reason of that,) psychologist tell us that if one is alone for too long of a time, it may lead to fantasies, which might cause a person to become insane/ one would fantasize when being alone from psychologist. Therefore, it is nice to spend time with a couple of friends who can listen to each others' troubles and frustrations. Chatting, singing and having dinner with many people may help forget anything distressful quickly, after that, they will not regard pressure as the burden they cannot get rid of. Being happy/Happy time is one of efficient ways/aspects to reduce stress.

Furthermore, spending time with friends is a ne way to relax even if they are not good friends/it will bring a new way to relax to spend time with different people even if not good friends, (which will not appear being alone.)去掉 New friends can introduce a fresh hobby that people might not know. For instance, to join in a party  full of old and new friends, through talking and playing games, one can learn something distinct from new friends, a shopping mall offering memberships, a modern gymnasiumes or a cheap but romantic restaurant. Those will become another way to relax learnt from new friends when spending time with a group of friends.

In conclusion, spending time alone can make pressure strong instead of helping reduce it; therefore being alone is not the best way to be relaxed. From the reasons above, spending with friends may be more efficient to set humans free as people can forget the pressure through talking, and also develop new habits from new friends.