COMEON作文小组9.23作业－yangkeli22

yangkeli22UID: 2360405

agree or disagree : people today spend too much time on their enjoyment-what they like to do, rather than what they should do. (2008.3.2 )

Various entertainments pervade over the world, flush into people's life. Nowadays, people can enjoy their life more than the past before, like they can serf the net, sing the song, take a dance during their spare time. In this way, a problem has brought into focus that whether people spend too much time on their entertainment instead of what they should do? Some people may agree with this statement, while others might hold the opposite opinion. From my personal angle alone, the former assertion consensus with mine.

First, with the advent of computer, people nowadays spend too much time in it. Playing games, chatting with friends or strangers, watching movies those actions cost most people's spare time which, as I see it, should be divide to share with family, learn some useful skills or absorb some knowledge. For instance, one of my classmates were so preoccupied with the computer games that once the class was over, he immediately went to the computer room. No one, even teacher could convince him back to study. Finally, he was dropped out cause of too many failures in subjects. I felt quite pity for him, computer made for the convenience of people to learn things or relax themselves to some extent, instead of harm people in this way. He also concentrated too much in game rather than study.

Second, singing the song is popular today, in particular among young people. Take a case of a thing that we always stay up all the night singing the songs for the quest to enjoy ourselves, have fun and relax ourselves. However, stay up is harmful to the health according to the medical survey. During this time we should sleep, rest the body for the next day's better learning or working. But we put too much emphasis on our own enjoyment that we ignore the poor consequence caused by our own.

Based on those emphatic examples, I can draw a conclusion that people nowadays put too much of their time in enjoyment, which they need to do other things instead.

macross_36UID: 2306285

Various entertainments pervade over the world, flush into people's life. Nowadays, people can enjoy their life more than the past before, like they can serf the net, sing the song, take a dance during their spare time. In this way, a problem has brought into focus that whether people spend too much time on their entertainment instead of what they should do? Some people may agree with this statement, while others might hold the opposite opinion. From my personal angle alone, the former assertion consensus(这个是名词吧) with mine.


First, with the advent of computer, people nowadays spend too much time in it. Playing games, chatting with friends or strangers, watching movies those actions cost most people's spare time which, as I see it（是不是太口语化了）, should be divide to share with family, learn some useful skills or absorb some knowledge. For instance, one of my classmates were(was) so preoccupied with the computer games that once the class was over, he immediately went to the computer room. No one, even teacher could convince him back to study. Finally, he was dropped out cause of too many failures in subjects. I felt quite pity for him, computer made for the convenience of people to learn things or relax themselves to some extent, instead of harm people in this way. He also concentrated too much in game rather than study.


Second, singing the song is popular today, in particular among young people. Take a case of a thing that we always stay up all the night singing the songs for the quest to enjoy ourselves, have fun and relax ourselves. However, stay(-ing) up is harmful to the health according to the medical survey. During this time we should sleep, rest the body for the next day's better learning or working. But we put too much emphasis on our own enjoyment that we ignore the poor(detrimental) consequence caused by our own.


Based on those emphatic examples, I can draw a conclusion that people nowadays put too much of their time in enjoyment, which they need to do other things instead.

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yangkeli22UID: 2360405

谢谢你的建议，加油！你肯定也没问题的！