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发表于 2008-10-6 20:43:19 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Do you agree or disagree: It is important to know events happening around the world, though sometimes they are unlikely to affect your daily life. (2007.4.29,生活与个人成功类)

We are living in a world full of information that we think is related to us or not. However, whether the events happening around the world would affect our daily lives or not in our mind, we should try to know them and that is what we can do when we have no ideas of them.

Firstly, when we try to understand the news around the world, we also understand the cultrue and history of that place. When we heard that one of Chinese football clubs had quit the Chinese football association while many football fans struggled to this action, we also understand that Chinese people love football game as Ping-Pong ball, although Chinese football was not good enough to satisfy its fans.

Secondly, I noticed that almost every successful people caring the situation and motion of countries of the world. On the one hand, they could know what the appearance of today's world is; and on the other hand, they usually like talking these new things with their friends and collaborators, sometimes, this would propel their business accidentally.

Lastly and mostly, we people have the responsibility to care the events happening around the world, because this is our home.  To some extend, every thing happened or happening or even would happen have the relationship with us everybody. Could you say that the Olympic Game held in Beijing in 2008 has no affection to you? Could you say that the depression of the economy in America has no influence on your choice of buying stocks?If you know all of these events happening every time, that's it.

Although most time we cannot change the situation of the world and society, we at least should know them because that was the events happening in our family and once anybody needs the help, we know what we should do to them and that is our same hope--to make our world happy.

呵呵,第一次发帖,写的不好,请大家指教,谢谢啦!
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发表于 2008-10-6 22:39:43 |只看该作者
We are living in a world full of information that// whether we think is// they are related to us or not. However, whether the events happening around the world would affect our daily lives or not, in our mind, we should try to know them and that is what we can do when we have no ideas of them.

Firstly, when we try to understand the news around the world, we also// should firstly understand the cultrue and history of that place. When we heard that one of Chinese football clubs had quit the Chinese football association while many football fans struggled to this action, we also understand that Chinese people love football game as Ping-Pong ball, although Chinese football was not good enough to satisfy its fans.//- -!这位GGorMM是球迷吧?没太明白这句话的意思。是说尽管游行,但是不代表中国人不热爱足球么?MS没必然关系吧。

Secondly, I noticed that almost every successful people caring the situation and motion of countries of the world // 感觉这句话用I noticed太缺乏说服力了,你可以说History tells us that almost.... On the one hand, they could know what the appearance of today's world is; and on the other hand, they usually like talking these new things with their friends and collaborators, sometimes, this would propel their business accidentally.

Lastly and mostly, we people have the responsibility to care the events happening around the world, because this is our home//这个观点不错,学习了. To some extend, every thing happened or happening or even would happen have the relationship with us everybody. Could you say that the Olympic Game held in Beijing in 2008 has no affection//affection更多指爱的意思,换个词吧 to you? Could you say that the depression of the economy in America has no influence on your choice of buying stocks?If you know all of these events happening every time, that's it//这that's it这什么意思哦?.

Although most time we cannot change the situation of the world and society, we at least should know them because that was the events happening in our family and once anybody needs the help, we know what we should do to them and that is our same hope--to make our world happy.

感觉LZ的观点可以再展开一点,第一篇来说很不错的,我第一篇...哎,都不好意思说了

LZ加油哦:loveliness:

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发表于 2008-10-7 21:13:58 |只看该作者
呵呵,谢谢楼上的,你的指点对我帮助很大呵!要继续关注我哦!

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