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yxx19870504UID: 2404670

Movie is all around us, it accompanies one's growth, sharing joy and sadness with him or her, nothing is better than movie to both provide one relaxation and to fertilize one spiritual garden. And therefore movies meet with great favor year by year and in turns filmmakers chase to produce masses of movies.

People consume movies on account of it detaching them from stress and making them feel good. After hard work or study, people might feel tired and irritable, but when watching the movies, one can release the stress by laughing or crying for the stories in the movies. Mr Bean lets one guffaw while The Titanic's tragedy cannot stop one weep away. After watching movies, people often feel comfortable since they adopt film as a vent to assuage the emotion sprung from stress.

Moreover, film, like a boat, conveying one's dream and courage. We have our dream come ture: to use magic spells when watching the Harry poter, it's interesting to find the name of a celebrated film-making company is " dreamworks". Besides the satisfaction to fulfill his or her dreams, one can gain the power to deal with the troubles in real life, taking "Life is beatiful" for instance, what the father told the boy---optimism and strong will, is the very deficiency that people nowadays have. Nowithstanding the film was made long before, it still inspirit the audience to overcome the difficulties and work hard.

Comparing with other entertainments, film is one of the longest but the most popular types. Movie is more accessible than travelling and sports for fewer cost or health quality restriction. Reading neither can be as vivid as movie especially for kids. That's why most of the mass still prefer going to the movie in their free time.

To conclude, movie should be and will be populace's favourite to have fun. It not only can let out the soul's rubbish but turn one's impossible desire real as well as delivering the spirit to audience. Movie is so powerful and accessible that it remains as a long-standing entertainment.

[ 本帖最后由 yxx19870504 于 2008-12-1 20:23 编辑 ]

Mer.UID: 2532485

Movie is all around us, it accompanies one growing up(accompany doing?用accompany one's growth), shares joy and sadness with him or she(her), no other (nothing)is better than movie to provide one(wtih) relaxation and to fulfill dream. And therefore movie is still welcome year after year(not very idomatic,,-------use so far instead of 'year by year').

People consume(things we consume are usually tangible,,-----用watch/see就可以了）movies on account of it detaching them from stress and making them feel good.(TS的句子结构存在问题） After hard work or study, people might feel tired and irritable, but when watching the movies, they can release the stress by laughing or crying for the stories in the movies. Mr Bean lets one guffaw while The Titanic's tragedy cannot stop one weep （from weeping）away.:victory: example很好 After watching movies, people often feel comfortable since they adopt film as a vent to let out(quell/assuage/alleviate..) the emotion sprung from stress.

Moreover, film（re） can have one's dream come true. since in movies, there is almost nothing impossible. Taking ET for instance, this movie reposes(?) the mass's trust in finding other creatures outside the earth and also express the desire to stay harmoniously with them. Even one is unable to fulfill what he or she want, however he or she will be more or less satisfied when movies favor to accomplish his or her dream.bbs.gter.netd%KX7t)w"x^E
这一段的代词需要指代的更明确

Comparing with other entertainments, film is one of the longest (?)but the most popular types. Movie is more reachable(affordable) than travelling and sports for fewer restrictions. Reading neither can be as vivid as movie especially for kids. That's why people still prefer going to the movie when being free.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE7z ff+和BN,f

a little bit digressive

YN7jTo conclude, movie should be and will be the ms(如果要表示大众应该是所有格） favourite to have fun. It not only can let out （same prob）the soul's rubbish（不地道，如果要避免重复用pressure可以用stress burden strain。。） but make one's impossible desire real. Movie is so powerful and accessible（so) that it remains as a long-standing entertainment.

mpromanusUID: 2565872

这位童鞋你没给题目，所以只能给你改语法哦。。

Movies is are all around us (你平时周围不可能只有一部电影吧..这句话余下的单数都改成复数): it accompanies one's growth, sharing joy and sadness with him or her. (跑句太厉害了.该分句的时候就分句.) nothing is better than a movie to in both providing one relaxation and to fertilize one's spiritual garden (Totally uncalled for. 不要把中文的比喻强翻成英文, 更何况语法都有问题..). And therefore movies are meet with great favor year by year (I think you mean 'one year after another') and in turns filmmakers chase (Umm..you mean 'hurry'?) to produce masses (mass是用来形容不可数名词的..用huge numbers) of movies.

People consume movies on account of it they being able to detaching them from stress and make them feel good. After hard work or studies, people might feel tired and irritable, but when watching the movies, one (如果你非要在句子中间把复数主语换成单数主语，最好还是分个句..) can release the stress by laughing or crying for at the stories in the movies (That's called a 'plot'.). Mr Bean (This is not exactly a 'movie'. It's a TV series.) lets one guffaw while The Titanic's tragedy cannot stop one from weeping away (Err..这句话实际上是个病句..Titanic的悲剧也不能阻止人哭? 意思是看了悲剧其实应该是停止哭的? 如果你想说 悲剧让人不由自主地哭，应该是one can't help but weep when watching 'Titanic'). After watching movies, people often feel comfortable since they adopt film as a vent to assuage the emotion sprung from stress.

Moreover, a film, like a boat, conveys one's dream and courage. We have our dreams come true (when watching movies?): to use magic spells when watching the Harry Potter, it's interesting to find the name of a celebrated film-making company is " dreamworks" (这完全是两句不相干的话啊，为什么不要分句呢..). Besides the satisfaction to fulfill his or her dreams, one can gain the power to deal with the troubles in real life. Taking "Life is beatiful" for instance, what the father told the boy---optimism and strong will---is the very deficiency that people nowadays have (正常说话少用这种间接否定，直接说...the very qualities the people lack nowadays即可). Notwithstanding that the film was made long before, it still inspirits the audiences to overcome the difficulties and work hard.

Comparing with other entertainments, the film is one of the longest (? Do you mean 'long' in the sense of history or what?) but the most popular types. A Movie is more accessible than travelling and sports for due to fewer lower cost or fewer health quality restrictions. Reading neither (前面比较的是cost和restriction, 后面比较的是vivid,没有neither的可比性..) cannot be as vivid as movies, especially for kids. That's why most of the mass (You mean, 'people'?) still prefer going to the movies in their free time.

To conclude, movies should be (大家要不要最喜欢看电影貌似不是一个should or should not的问题吧..) and will be the populace's favourite to have fun. It not only can let out the soul's rubbish (又是一个直翻的比喻. 如果你不确定一个地道的比喻怎么写，干脆大白话也比乱翻要强..) but also can turn one's impossible desire real as well as delivering the spirit (? You don't 'deliver' spirit. You 'instill' spirit.) to audience. Movies is are so powerful and accessible that it they remains as a long-standing entertainment.

总结:

单复数和用词的准确，宁可就用简单的词汇句子但是用正确也不要随便翻译看起来很美的比喻..像fewer cost这种明显有问题的词组只能靠你自己多小心了..另外不要一直写逻辑并不互相关联的长句，该分的时候就分句。英语中最重要的语法之一就是agreement，主语要和谓语agree, 单复数要agree, 谓语时态要agree, 如果你的长句中开始出现失去agreement的现象，就是提醒你该分句了 - 不然语法就乱了.