issue130

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ISSUE130 【六人作文小组】第1周第2次作业

"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

1说明现在的小孩比较独立
2 现在不代表以后，现在独立的孩子在工作和真正踏入社会后可能会合作。
3现在应该适当提高小孩的交流能力，使他们以后能更好的融入社会。

Children are the future of the world,how children are educated is strongly related to the future world.However,as the pace of society is far more faster than it was in the past,children today are more unsociable than ever before.

With the actualizing of Family Planning Policy,the phenomenon of  lacking communication skills with other people is especially popular in China.The lack of communicating with people in their early life makes the children prefer to finish things independently.

Further more,with the increasing work pressure,parents have less time to stay with children.The time children ought to be playing with parents is now spent with their friends.Without parents' leading,children have little chances to contact with other people in society.As parents have less time to stay with children,children have to do lots of things by themselves.All these things make children more independent.
However,the independent and unsociablement of children does not mean they will be unsociable in the future.We do not have to worry that children are not well socialized for the children themselves are too young to join the society.They can live a good life at home with parents,early contact of society may cause the children early-ripe then can not grow up healthily.The juvenile delinquency is increasing over the past twenty years all over the world has strongly proved the thought.
As the growth of the children,they will be contact with more people in society gradually.No children can solve social things rightly,when they meet more people in society,they can easily communicate with others.Further more,work force them to communicate with others,what also make them more related to society.They need to do some work with their colleagues.Meanwhile,talking and making deal with people they have not seen before is needed.Wanted or not the children will join the society one day.In brief they should be one part of society one day.
Society will not going to be the exactly one what we imagined.The things we dreamed of are so perfect that we can hardly realize it well.Naturally,no parents want their children to be criminals,people are hoped to be lawyer,doctor and banker in their childhood.However,as we all know,it can not be true.There is always a wide gap between ideal and reality.It is the same thing with children are not well socialized.We can not expect children to be perfect,all we can do is to guild them correctly and suitably.The schools should set up more courses on communication,what can help children improve their communicating skills to help them better adapt to society.


[ 本帖最后由 gardenla 于 2009-1-7 08:40 编辑 ]

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Children are the future of the world,how children are educated is strongly related to the future world.However,as the pace of society is far more faster than it was in the past,children today are more unsociable than ever before.

With the actualizing of Family Planning Policy,the phenomenon of  lacking communication skills with other people is especially popular in China.The lack of communicating with people in their early life makes the children prefer to finish things independently.


Further more,with the increasing work pressure,parents have less time to stay with children.The time children ought to be playing with parents is now spent with their friends.Without parents' leading,children have little chances to contact with other people in society.As parents have less time to stay with children,children have to do lots of things by themselves.All these things make children more independent.（觉得前三段落都在交代背景，可以考虑放在一段写）
However,the independent（independence） and unsociablement of children does not mean they will be unsociable in the future.We do not have to worry that children are not well socialized for the children themselves are too young to join the society.They can live a good life at home with parents,early contact of society may cause the children early-ripe then can not grow up healthily.The juvenile delinquency is increasing over the past twenty years all over the world has strongly proved the thought.
As the growth of the children,they will be contact with more people in society gradually.No children can solve social things rightly,when they eameet more people in society,they can easily communicate with others.Further more,work force them to communicate with others,what also make them more related to society.They need to do some work with their collgues.Meanwhile,talking and making deal with people they have not seen before is needed.Wanted or not the children will join the society one day.In brief they should be one part of society one day.
Society will not going to be the exactly one what we imagined.The things we dreamed of are so perfect that we can hardly realize it well.Naturally,no parents want their children to be criminals,people are hoped to be lawyer,doctor and banker in their childhood.However,as we all know,it can not be true.There is always a wide gap between ideal and reality.It is the same thing with children are not well socialized.We can not expect children to be perfect,all we can do is to guild them correctly and suitably.The schools should set up more courses on communication,what can help children improve their communicating skills to help them better adapt to society.

1 背景是现在的孩子没有过去社会化
2 对社会过早的接触会产生问题
3 长大之后会自然地接触社会，所以现在的未社会化不是问题。
4 所以你认为教育没有问题
希望下次列出提纲，方便大家跟上你的思路，另外希望段落中能有更清晰的主旨句。
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